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The Dark Side of Love


She sat,
sinking into the darkness
of gloom and sadness
He passed with a sudden glance
her eyes lit up
a faint smile appeared,
but slowly faded
A teardrop fell.

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  1. Date: 5/8/2009 2:44:00 PM

    very true about the darker side of love. great choice! kudos! --madison

  1. Date: 3/26/2009 6:16:00 PM

    Very dramatic scene Maryam , nice vocabulary. great sequence . Mohamed.

  1. Date: 3/23/2009 12:09:00 PM

    Filled with emotion and meaning.. Thank you for your comment. Love, D.N.

  1. Date: 3/13/2009 6:58:00 PM

    This is a very good write Maryam...I know the feeling all to well...

  1. Date: 3/12/2009 11:31:00 AM

    This is a remarkably well captured moment Maryam.... it contains a whole welter of emotions in such few lines... excellent poetry.... thank you so much for your comment

  1. Date: 3/11/2009 5:23:00 AM

    Very beautifully written Maryam... the ending is powerful and I agree with Mr. Brian Strand, it does have the feel of a haiku, there is a lovely gentle feeling to this. Thanks for your kind comments on "Invisible." :) Love, Amy

  1. Date: 3/10/2009 3:15:00 PM

    Awww, go get him! Love & Light

  1. Date: 3/10/2009 5:59:00 AM

    Short but loaded with story and emotion. Nice work. Love, Shar

  1. Date: 3/10/2009 3:48:00 AM

    Like the last line..very haiku in flavour Maryam .Excellent vignette.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

  1. Date: 3/9/2009 6:23:00 PM

    Just like real life....the awakening of hope...faded as he continues on. Well done, Maryam! ~ love, Carrie

  1. Date: 3/9/2009 2:59:00 PM

    Wow, love does have a balance of light and dark. You nailed it on the dark...Raul

  1. Date: 3/9/2009 2:07:00 PM

    WOW!. . so powerful. . .i can relate. . .love this one! thnx for the comment =). . .best wishes ~Breana