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One Dark Moment

I am  
lost in my mind
steeped in dark emotion.
Shadows block the light from my eyes
and all I see is the blackness of pain
which holds my heart captive again.
Swift flow my silver tears
and burn my skin
in trails.

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  1. Date: 11/16/2009 9:37:00 PM

    Now that is one that I hope doesn't keep making you hurt inside. But if you're like me, sometimes I can read one of my past written poems and they will bring a few tears to my eyes all over again and again, just like yours just did...keep up the great writing dear...I love it...friends in poetry...lawrence ingle in lou. ky.

  1. Date: 2/21/2009 4:47:00 AM

    ooo! the emotion you have filled the reader with plenty!! Robin, you inspire me... thank you for that! ~ Arany

  1. Date: 2/20/2009 12:54:00 PM

    this is so great..filled with so much expression and feeling...whatever type of poem it is, doesn't matter to u ....u just do it in a wink as always...love*/*Maryam

  1. Date: 2/20/2009 6:23:00 AM

    Ferciuos friend, Mother of Nations, fear not, the road fills with adventure, break free from mindset failed, emerge to brave the gale, let laughter fill your ears; go beyond the pale. Love & Light Debbie

  1. Date: 2/19/2009 6:33:00 PM

    Such a profound expression of ones saddened moments within their life~which in your case dear lady, hopefully shall be merely but a passing wind~here today and gone tomorrow!!! I sincerely hope that you are doing wonderfully tonight my blessed and gifted friend, "Priceless Robin!!?"~For I truly dislike, to ever see your precious heart suffer, within any way dear lady!!!? My Love & Warmth To You & Your Loves Always, John!":)

  1. Date: 2/19/2009 11:36:00 AM

    I've not seen this form before, but you have done a wonderful job with it! Very heartfelt, sad and lonely. I was pulled into my own sorrows for a moment. Very well written! ~Trudy~

  1. Date: 2/19/2009 10:15:00 AM

    the wave of depression. i know it well. john

  1. Date: 2/19/2009 9:01:00 AM

    Excellent phrasing Robin and memorable imagery expecially L7.Rgds Brian

  1. Date: 2/19/2009 6:01:00 AM

    Very talented write, Robin. This seems to really suit my mood today. I really love it and think I am putting it in my faves. Love and hugs, Christie

  1. Date: 2/19/2009 4:48:00 AM

    While the form is outstanding, the read itself is very introspective and sad. I sure hope this is fiction. Beautiful writing however. Michael

  1. Date: 2/18/2009 8:42:00 PM

    It amazes me how you guys fit your heart and words into a form, that's talent. Nice work Robin. loveudo, Laurie

  1. Date: 2/18/2009 5:46:00 PM

    Wow, Robin. This is one of the deepest and best you have written, I think! So solemn, so sad, so well done! ~ Carrie

  1. Date: 2/18/2009 4:20:00 PM

    Robin, please step out of the "shadows." I love the way you shine! Interesting verse form; I see I can learn a lot from you, and I am trying to experiment. Thanks for your thoughts on "Feline Survivor." She's brought me such great joy. Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 2/18/2009 3:23:00 PM

    Robin great expression of emotion with-in this poem - very well written piece - God Bless, MJ

  1. Date: 2/18/2009 3:09:00 PM

    Vivid, emotional write, here, Robin. Also, you've used a form that I've not heard of before now. I loved the line, "Swift flow my silver tears". This is just very well written. Hugs, Donna G.

  1. Date: 2/18/2009 2:36:00 PM

    I have related to this in the past, great write Robin and nice choice of form, it's always nice to see something different...Raul

  1. Date: 2/18/2009 2:13:00 PM

    dark probing and we writen I really enjoyed this piece

  1. Date: 2/18/2009 2:02:00 PM

    Well this is a style I've not yet seen on the soup but I like it ! Deep emotion in your words! Laura :)

  1. Date: 2/18/2009 1:47:00 PM

    This is awesome Robin..the form is totally new to me..you have written this piece very well. Chris.