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Sailing Away

On the clear water,
A boat is floating away;
Its' sails wave goodbye.

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  1. Date: 3/27/2009 2:38:00 PM

    Dear Chris, Welcome to the SOUP I can tell YOU know Raul(Whom I admire and respect) Are YOU a Photographer also? I see YOU are also a Haiku Expert ALWAYS...HG

  1. Date: 3/25/2009 9:47:00 AM

    Great visual Chris.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

  1. Date: 3/25/2009 2:35:00 AM

    Loved the last line...............Danielle

  1. Date: 2/14/2009 8:44:00 PM

    What a lovely haiku, Chris! The imagery of sails waving goodbye is amazing. Carolyn

  1. Date: 2/5/2009 12:39:00 PM

    Nice use of personification. Sounds like a peaceful place to be. Welcome to Poetry Soup! I hope you enjoy your time spent with us. Best wishes with your writing. Karen

  1. Date: 2/5/2009 6:43:00 AM

    Word selection is great, it paints a beautiful picture, with great personification in the last line. Welcome to the soup! ~Jen~

  1. Date: 2/5/2009 5:17:00 AM

    Again the form is perfect and your words are selected well and placed for a perfect flow. The imagery is nice and clear making for a very good write. Michael

  1. Date: 2/5/2009 3:55:00 AM

    Check your soup mail in the member area. I dropped you a few extra lines...Raul

  1. Date: 2/5/2009 2:47:00 AM

    Excellent haiku Chris, nice 5-7-5 flow and I welcome you to poetry soup where you are amongst great company...Raul