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Just Let It Go. . .

Let go

I'll bring you closer

Right now

I'll hold on tightly

Let go

We're going no where

Somewhere

And aren't over

Harder times like these!

Growing up on the streets!

Harder times like these!

I'll put you back on your feet!

And I fall to the ground with my teardrops

And I get lost everytime my heart stops

This love this      is burning me away

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  1. Date: 12/4/2008 6:23:00 PM

    You have talent. I think you are a developing young poet that will far out do anything I will ever write. You write because you need to I write for fun.

  1. Date: 12/4/2008 6:18:00 PM

    this piece is so so. john

  1. Date: 12/4/2008 12:53:00 PM

    I can see where you're going with this like derrick is saying, this needs some more heart more depth, I know it's in there. i liked it either way. ~Michaela~

  1. Date: 12/4/2008 11:08:00 AM

    i dropped you a comment earlier on this one and really dont see it any more, the key to great poetry is not trying to make it good and only writing off the top of your head, this poem is really expresses your love for this person, make sure its real.

  1. Date: 12/4/2008 8:51:00 AM

    Pretty good i should say. It confused me initially, but subsequent readings made things clearer. Thanks for sharing