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What I Gained from the Sea

I once loved a shell that lived in the sea
It was smooth as the water and precious to me

And it was as large as my 8-year-old hand. Not a flaw-
like the ones that get washed on the sand

So lovely and spiraled and crowned like a queen
Such a jewel out of water so seaweedy green

And talk of the color!

As creamy a tan as the first sands of shore
With the gold of a cloud a sunset once bore
It melted into the orange of molten iron
And cooled into plum as the robe of a siren

A shell out of shells, a borne of divine
I searched and I found and now it was mine

I turned it over again (Not a blemish or a kink)…
But then I saw gray where it should have been pink

Already claimed, a snail was in there
Inside my shell so comely and rare

So slimy and ugly (unworthy) it seemed 
To be in my treasure that glistened and gleamed

Yet I couldn’t steal it and call it my own
Lest I kill the old wretch that called it its home

So I swam with the shell that I could not keep
till my body grew cold and the darkness grew deep

And my mom called me in as we packed up to go 
So I dropped the snail in, back to live and to grow

But the shell that I left was not just but lost
The lesson I gained was much worth the cost

For if I had taken it and let the snail wither 
the beauty of my treasure would grow strangely dimmer.

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  1. Date: 2/2/2010 4:54:00 PM

    Beautiful i love this <3

  1. Date: 1/26/2010 3:55:00 PM

    Excellent imagery, beautiful story (with purpose ... smile) and just delightful read here Deneith!! Thanks so much for bringing your talent to PoetrySoup!! I look forward to reading lots more from you and appreciate very much your recent comment ... I had to laugh when you said you thought ether was a bug killer ... its fun here at the Soup ... I have to look up words all the time too ... smile

  1. Date: 5/28/2009 2:18:00 PM

    This is a fantastic poem and it brings back many memories of my own special moments spent next to the sea during my youth and also as a grown man,Thank you for sharing, God bless you, Dean

  1. Date: 5/28/2009 1:12:00 PM

    I'm a 30 year Navy Reservist. This was a wonderful write. I love writes about the ocean. God Bless. Vince

  1. Date: 10/14/2008 10:18:00 AM

    This is wonderful having lived by the sea and I can vividly see what you write. Welcome to PoetrySoup.

  1. Date: 9/28/2008 9:42:00 PM

    So touching! A true poem of nature.

  1. Date: 9/28/2008 1:34:00 PM

    I like your use of extended metaphors in this poem. The descriptiveness of the piece impacts the sense of sight. The poem flows very well and presents vivid images. Great job and welcome to Poetry Soup! ~Joseph

  1. Date: 9/28/2008 8:48:00 AM

    I loved the way you characterized a lesson through a snail's shell which stands to be a home not many would care of. The way you dimmed the glow of treasure when anything, even a snail, withers...You have displayed a feature some have which is the way you feel for everything around. Beautifully written...Sara...