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5/28/2015 2:06:54 AM
Topic:
The Battle of Borodino - by Bob Atkinson

Bob Atkinson
Posts: 107
Evolution'sDead End Crew

- by Bob Atkinson




Human Devolution

atrocity


many choose to define themselves

in ways which deviate their caste

from normal sense of order

to that of distant, delinquent past





here, when one views this kind

and wonders how could they

find comfort in disorder

in such a deviated way





all sweetness life has to offer

those forms so fine we see

deer grazing in pasture

green leaves on growing trees





killed by senseless direction

for power lusted by those who seem

to find their petty purpose expanded

muddying humanity's stream





why do these folks lack prime skill

to have goodness in their hearts

no positive force, unknown to purpose

feeling for brightness of character lost





barbarity, brutality, cruelty

three actions which disgust

souls with tasteful personality

watching humbleness departed





for deviants who worship lust

our universe beholds

remorse for their existence

brings sadness because of hurtful goals





clenched fists denote barbarity

not advanced in that they do

symptom of sickened culture

evolution's dead end crew

5/27/2015 3:33:56 PM
Topic:
What Inspires me to write poetry.

Diane M Quinlan
Posts: 6
way2go wrote:
Mother Nature's is my inspiration as well and what ever happens on any given day that sticks in my mind I sit down and write words, sometimes good sometimes not so good. Main thing is to have ago. Your Ode is thoughtful with lots of big words but you should take a little more care with your spacing.
I also wrote a poem on Mother Nature have a read on way2gokev page.
Cheers and keep the words flowing.
Kev




Thanks for the comments and reply. I will take note of what you noted about my writing. Perhaps I do use too many big words and loose myself in the spacing. I think I know what you are saying but not too sure on full meaning of spacing when writing poetry. New to this phraseing Please explain if you will if you have the time to get back to me on this. Thanks for caring.....didee
5/27/2015 2:05:28 AM
Topic:
i should have done this before

Czarinyka Panganiban
Posts: 1
I've been into writing poetry since i was in my grade school,
whenever i tried to read those pieces i have written? I always end up giggling on how awful my writings were (feeling embarrassed to myself). but never have i think of quitting instead I still have that passion for poetry inside me. Every Poem i have written is the reflection of my feelings which i have deeply suppressed inside, it's the very reason why i so love writing poems. However, never have i consulted somebody to check, inspired, and guide me with my writings (how I wish I could, but i so lack with the guts). When I've found out about this site? it drew me back to hoping that i can make myself a better poet.


Please I kindly ask for you to view my poems and feel free to leave a comment. It was nice meeting you all.
5/26/2015 2:06:23 AM
Topic:
"Love At First Sight"

kursi tamu
Posts: 2
believe it because I have experienced it and my relationship with my girlfriend is very harmonious
5/26/2015 1:57:15 AM
Topic:
To become a writer....

kursi tamu
Posts: 2
it's make easy for me to understand Thanks for sharing such a good content. Keep sharing
edited by kursitamu on 5/26/2015
5/24/2015 11:12:43 PM
Topic:
What Inspires me to write poetry.

Kevin Fairbrother
Posts: 3
Mother Nature's is my inspiration as well and what ever happens on any given day that sticks in my mind I sit down and write words, sometimes good sometimes not so good. Main thing is to have ago. Your Ode is thoughtful with lots of big words but you should take a little more care with your spacing.
I also wrote a poem on Mother Nature have a read on way2gokev page.
Cheers and keep the words flowing.
Kev
5/24/2015 6:44:04 AM
Topic:
Aspiring Writer

Tom Woodliff
Posts: 2
poetryjam1 wrote:
I won a scholarship at my school because of my poetry. I'm so happy!
I also received a notice that my poem advanced to the semi-finals of a contest I entered, with the ability to possibly win 2,000!

Very cool. one of mine just won the annual poetry contest at the local county library. They say the check's in
the mail. Lol
edited by tommyboy on 5/24/2015
5/24/2015 6:40:36 AM
Topic:
I luv bugz!

Tom Woodliff
Posts: 2
Now that I've got your attention....
I consider myself an eclectic writer of poems, song lyrics, short stories (wish I could post here but most are too long for this format) and children's books. I hope to one day get published. .. the traditional way (sigh). Anyway, looking forward to reading your good stuff, and hope you get a chance to check out mine. Until we meet again...
5/23/2015 4:21:07 PM
Topic:
Screen Door Flying in the Wind

Bob Atkinson
Posts: 107
Thanks Jill and DiDee for your sweet comments. And Didee you bring up a subject near to my heart, that is: "a picture without a poem is like a heart without a soul." Think of it, you paint a beautiful picture, then without narration why would somebody sit and stare at it for more than a few seconds. But, if there was a poetic narrative printed and framed right next to it, wouldn't it be more than the sum of two framed ideas? A marriage of art and poetry, another reason for poetry. If you want examples google: art critic arizona
lots of examples there, julia, the letter plus marjorie's works. Regards, Bob Atkinson
5/22/2015 3:02:32 PM
Topic:
My poem Leviathan

jill spagnola
Posts: 5
Hip hip hoorah! Three Cheers! Kudos! Props! Hats off!
5/22/2015 3:00:44 PM
Topic:
My poem Leviathan

jill spagnola
Posts: 5
Unbelievable alliteration! I learned sooo many new words. The last word says it all...Art!!!!
jill
5/22/2015 2:31:16 PM
Topic:
Screen Door Flying in the Wind

jill spagnola
Posts: 5
Wow! I actually get it What a wonderfully concrete combination of image and prose, yet with plenty of room left for one's own imagination..., Jill



Those who have never failed have never tried...
edited by sunshine williams on 5/22/2015
5/22/2015 9:30:48 AM
Topic:
Screen Door Flying in the Wind

Diane M Quinlan
Posts: 6
Reminds me of the song "Throw away your troubles---I think it was titles. Loved following the adventure bob it its entirety. It was so well described and written. Lots of insights from your imagery with words. A great, great, excellent read. Thank you for sharing. I love the very stark inviting illustration you chose to add with your poem! I am a lover of art and do paint and like to add my painting .works to my poems subject. I know a lot of poets and readers of----do not like poems added to pictures but alongside is a lovely addition. I love to not only read a poem twice but love to savour the image presented as well. Excellent work.....Didee

Screen Door
Flying in the Wind

- by Bob Atkinson



Screen Door




I left my screen door flying to the wind

open, flapping, telling me to come back home again

never thought trying would last until the very end

but I'll stay off that there mountain 'till I win




cast aside my home in part because

my goals they were on fire

wanted to partake of life

as if a king for hire




I tried most everything I knew

to succeed in all I done

yet when push came to shove

my race was barely run




I saw forever's failure

staring me right in the face

yes, shameful destitution

carried me from birth to grave





but, money doesn't buy the kind

of peace I have in mind

trying to reinvent myself

because of foolish pride




my cause became a wonderment

of things I'd re-arrange

but, my ideas floated to nothingness

and my name just became a game




for when one sets out to do something

he doesn't have a clue

how hard one has to try to live

among those motley fools




and I left my screen door flying to the wind

open, flapping, telling me to come back home again

never thought trying would last until the very end

but I'll stay off that there mountain 'till I win




over some blue hill I walked

out toward a setting sun

well, seemed to me that life began

when you did what you set on




on to do with grace and style

back there in that darn place

yes, my morning's bright and sunny

but my face has been disgraced




and I left my screen door flying to the wind

open, flapping, telling me to come back home again

never thought trying would last until the very end

but I'll stay off that there mountain 'till I win




now, someday in my solitude

my feelings won't be hurt

with that shroud of mystery cover

I'll begin to laugh and blurt




blurt out those triumphs I

have made of which were few

not because of lack of courage

but by cause of being true




true to spirit of that mountain

where home once was of mine

where a winter wind sent snow

so deep 'till one was blind




where my face turned toward the sun

when spring time finally came

and those flowers grew so colorful

and so did tall grass grains




and when feelings of accomplishment

finds my soul has been consumed

will take that worn path home again

and light an evening fire for my moods




when troubles again cause me

to try another path

will sit right down and ponder

right here upon my ........




knowing we all get antsy when

we know not what we want

but, my feeling's now arranged securely

I find comfort in my bunk




and I closed that screen door securely in its frame

closed it tight, locked it firm, I'm back home again

never thought trying would last until the very end

but trying's good for something if you really want to win
5/22/2015 9:26:10 AM
Topic:
My poem Leviathan

Bob Atkinson
Posts: 107
Shane, what a wonderful exercise. At first I didn't get it, but then the style got out of the way and
imagery tumbled like a waterfall onto my (pea) brain. Nice to see someone attempting to expand the genre'. Was like you distilled the emotion from the novel, which is after all, what poetry's all about.
-- regards ---bob
5/22/2015 9:08:40 AM
Topic:
My poem Leviathan

Janet Cervenka
Posts: 5
Shane,
I think the issue with this is that the story is getting somewhat lost in the tight alliterations and lines. Perhaps loosening it so that the alliterations flows in a sentences like structure, rather than tight minimalist lines that feel more like lists to the reader than a story. If the rest of the poem read more like the last two stanzas, it would be easier to follow. Right now you have the slide show or photo album in words where each line is its own picture. what you need is a movies that flows together.

I'm not sure what result you were really looking for in this piece but that is my view of it.
5/22/2015 8:37:07 AM
Topic:
My poem Leviathan

Diane M Quinlan
Posts: 6
This is surely an adventure poem and you did well in your pleasing (story-line way) by bringing to mind--- Man and Nature intrusions and the not-so-foretold outcomes. Nature (Mother) does slap wrists when a wrong is done in her kingdom! What a great pay-back in the end! Highly imaginative and wonderful references to
'like-situations and matters. I enjoyed this very much. I am not an authorized critic and very new to appeasing another's work, but having done well here with my man vs. nature poem "Katrina"---critiqued here very 'highly'.... I think yours is due for attention. Didee
5/22/2015 5:35:16 AM
Topic:
My poem Leviathan

Shane Cooper
Posts: 3
I would like some honest critique of this work I have not achieved the result I wanted why?
5/22/2015 5:33:00 AM
Topic:
My poem Leviathan

Shane Cooper
Posts: 3
LEVIATHAN


Arrogant autocratic Ahab
Sails set seaward
Heartless harpoon high

Wind wracked Waves
Revenge rage regret
Wretched white whale

Opaque Ocean oblivious
Deep dark dangerous
Titanic terrors traversing

Captain callous cold
Blood bought bonds
Obsidian oaths ordured

Foreboding fears fester
Sacrosanct silent seas
Motionless midst moonset

Dim daylight dawned
Spray shot skyward
Lithe Longboats launched

Barnacled Behemoth Breaching
Heartless harpoons hefted
Destruction death defeat

Ahab alone as Achilles did battle
Poised proud purposeful in battle
Long lance light in hand for battle

White whale welcomes the battle
Dives deep deep to rise to the battle
Man monster meet to do battle


The sea is still, it has no tale to tell
5/22/2015 5:30:57 AM
Topic:
My poem Leviathan

Shane Cooper
Posts: 3
LEVIATHAN


Arrogant autocratic Ahab
Sails set seaward
Heartless harpoon high

Wind wracked Waves
Revenge rage regret
Wretched white whale

Opaque Ocean oblivious
Deep dark dangerous
Titanic terrors traversing

Captain callous cold
Blood bought bonds
Obsidian oaths ordured

Foreboding fears fester
Sacrosanct silent seas
Motionless midst moonset

Dim daylight dawned
Spray shot skyward
Lithe Longboats launched

Barnacled Behemoth Breaching
Heartless harpoons hefted
Destruction death defeat

Ahab alone as Achilles did battle
Poised proud purposeful in battle
Long lance light in hand for battle

White whale welcomes the battle
Dives deep deep to rise to the battle
Man monster meet to do battle


The sea is still, it has no tale to tell
5/21/2015 10:45:25 PM
Topic:
Teak Furniture

lionhorest
Posts: 4
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