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7/1/2016 4:16:48 PM
Topic:
Finally giving my writing a home. Feels damn good

Amanda Mawu
Posts: 1
[url=]linkI am new to the soup a new found sacred space thus far.....I am extremely opinionated and love expressing my writing through erotica and semi spoken word. I practice yoga daily and make candles & loc jewels for a living. Come say hi I love feedback and love to give it as well....
7/1/2016 7:56:55 AM
Topic:
Feedback appreciated. Constructive criticism okay,

David Smith
Posts: 6
Can feel the beat of life on the street. Cool writing. "Life is full of stages" from David in NZ
7/1/2016 7:54:04 AM
Topic:
Feedback appreciated. Constructive criticism okay,

David Smith
Posts: 6
Jmc86850 wrote:
Kitty-cornered Jaguar

She came tearing through the parking lot
Finally she brought the car to a stop
From fore to aft I count three lines crossed
What worries me more is how near are the people

Finally she brought the car to a stop
The "other 2" tires again touched the ground
What worries me more is how near are the people
She doesn't touch street drugs, unless you count her adrenaline

The "other 2" tires again touched the ground
The proprietor of the establishment came out and she said
She doesn't touch street drugs, unless you count her adrenaline
Try to be calm he said rolling his eyes, take to the stage to find your natural high.

The proprietor of the establishment came out and she said
From fore to aft, I count three lines crossed
Try to be calm he said rolling his eyes, take to the stage to find your natural high.
She came tearing through the parking lot.
edited by Jmc86850 on 6/30/2016
7/1/2016 7:20:14 AM
Topic:
WOULD LOVE SOME FEEDBACK PLEASE

David Smith
Posts: 6
Will look them up David from NZ
6/30/2016 5:17:55 PM
Topic:
The Ball

David Smith
Posts: 6
I spent 30 years working with preschool children and some of my best humour comes from those times.
I particularly remember playing catch with a 2-3 year old. We started playing catch together. the ball kept coming back and forth, back and forth until I thought when is he going to drop the ball or get tired and stop. We kept passing the ball and just when I thought I would have to give my attention elsewhere he suddenly piped up "when are we gonna stop throwing this silly ball".

I love children's sense of humour and when I worked with babies I loved making them laugh. Find someone to have a laugh with. A good way to make friends of all ages.
6/30/2016 2:24:01 AM
Topic:
Why, and who are you writing for

David Smith
Posts: 6
There are many reasons why I write poetry and each poem may have been written for a different reason.
Feelings play a big part in my writing. When I first started writing it was to impress a lady. So looked for words that would best suit that purpose and my feelings towards her.

Poems like "on stage" (posted) were to celebrate a special time and place and to acknowledge that to the people involved. For some of my poetry the message takes centre stage. Some is more like doodling. Some is for fun. Some is to experiment and fit a particular category. It is all for me part of growing and understanding. I have written some poetry as a record of feelings and motivations. Some poems are to release pressure and keep my sanity. I am now in the refinement stage and poetry soup is helping. Some poems are to reach out and connect with others. Asking questions of myself has helped maybe it could help you too.
6/30/2016 2:00:17 AM
Topic:
Feedback appreciated. Constructive criticism okay,

Jolene Cheyney
Posts: 57
Kitty-cornered Jaguar

She came tearing through the parking lot
Finally she brought the car to a stop
From fore to aft I count three lines crossed
What worries me more is how near are the people

Finally she brought the car to a stop
The "other 2" tires again touched the ground
What worries me more is how near are the people
She doesn't touch street drugs, unless you count her adrenaline

The "other 2" tires again touched the ground
The proprietor of the establishment came out and she said
She doesn't touch street drugs, unless you count her adrenaline
Try to be calm he said rolling his eyes, take to the stage to find your natural high.

The proprietor of the establishment came out and she said
From fore to aft, I count three lines crossed
Try to be calm he said rolling his eyes, take to the stage to find your natural high.
She came tearing through the parking lot.
edited by Jmc86850 on 6/30/2016
6/29/2016 8:50:03 PM
Topic:
Long live eccentricity

David Smith
Posts: 6
Recently joined poetry soup. Hope my eccentricities appeal. I attend the university of Life. There are always new courses for me to attend and don't expect my graduation party any time soon. I am 62 going on 18. I have a community spirit and am a professional turner upper. I am married . Have been for 27 years with the usual hiccups. Would not even get invite to Father of the year yet I have three children who have people skills and budding careers who still talk to me and play monopoly off line -funny that. One a civil engineer with a top job in asset management at 22. My other girl graduates this year with a double degree and job for next year. My finishes degree next year as electrical engineer. Spent 30 years as ECE Teacher. Self published book on state of childcare in NZ. - struggling with marketing but those who read it are positive about it.
Have reached Presidency of Lions club. Then switched to Toastmasters and did same. Received wood beads as cub leader. Running metal collection project for my local Church. Play chatty chess. Read and follow current events and make submissions on issues I am passionate about. Would love to get into freelance writing. I work part time cleaning at night.

Apart from that I am just another grumpy old man whom somehow my children manage to love to bits. I just wish they would appreciate my sense of humour more and stop say "that's embarrassing Dad"

Did I mention I can cook.
6/28/2016 7:52:37 PM
Topic:
trying out a new poetic form

James Townsend
Posts: 1
Diet
Time's broken memories weep
On the day before Thanksgiving's
Pecan pie recipe arrives.


Tender whispers seem to console
The soul while it's sleeping
Off the bloated corpse of yesterday's chicken.


Oreos spring forth a child-like reaction
As if sugar-coating the depths
Of sadness would help at all.


Gluten-free wafers hold out hope
Of restoration inside and out
If it's really not too late.


Apple-picking in fall restores
The spirit and a longing that in winter
That the carefully sorted stores will actually last.
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6/27/2016 5:52:00 PM
Topic:
Sharpness of Her Pen - by - Bob Atkinson

Bob Atkinson
Posts: 188
Thanks Mike
6/26/2016 4:53:59 PM
Topic:
Shark Week is here!!! Read this!

Graphite Drug
Posts: 54
Cross Species Awareness

Beneath a calm ocean,man watches a shark.
They are same in size,but one has advantage.
Man is wearing a wetsuit and long swim fins.
Shark is naked and isnot bearing its teeth.
Water passes silentlythrough gills of stealthy predator.
Bubbles rise fromapparatus of explorer.

A camera and lightsfill hands of explorer.
Teeth and cunning fillfront of shark.
Black tiger stripes anddark eyes of predator
intensify beauty andexclaim an unrevealed advantage.
Locked behind itsinquisitive nature are rows of sharp teeth.
It circles the diver,dipping and bending its fins.

A menacing fin on itsback and long pointed side fins,
the shark does notappear as clumsy as explorer.
A man clamps on tobreathing device with his teeth,
watching effortlessmovements of a curious shark.
There seems to be somewariness in the predator.
Its large dark eyesseem to measure any advantage.

Any threat to the sea’soccupant is from surface advantage.
The wary man’s feetrest on white sand trapped in fins.
He could kick and flapbeneath waves, but is no predator.
He is either a verybrave or very stupid explorer.
If the sea is aplayground or battlefield it belongs to the shark.
If it decides, the kingof the deep can bear its teeth.

It can open its gapingmouth and expose rows of teeth.
It can clamp on to softflesh with an easy advantage.
Such things happenoften in the life of a shark.
It swipes its tail sideto side and climbs and dives with fins.
The only help for thediver is another explorer.
A spear gun orrepellant may offend the predator.

There is not muchcomfort offending such a predator.
It will only findanother place to sink its teeth.
It is a distractingthought for an underwater explorer,
to learn and gainknowledge under this creature’s advantage.
It may not speak; itdoesn’t have hands, but does well with fins.
Ruling the depths, itis a majestic presence this shark.

A vicious predator withacute senses and sharp teeth,
the shark patrolsoceans riding currents with strong agile fins.
The explorer has theadvantage of meeting it at peace.

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6/26/2016 4:49:35 PM
Topic:
Can someone critique my poem about a ant death

Graphite Drug
Posts: 54
There needs to be a better sense of linking clauses with line breaks, stanzas, and punctuation here. This is difficult territory and I have somewhat avoided it in my own work. The majority of contemporary poets I have read need to work on this. They seem to have delusions of grandeur.
6/26/2016 4:42:02 PM
Topic:
Critique

Graphite Drug
Posts: 54
Not sure what it is you're trying to do or say. Something spiritual and sympathetic to victims of. . . ? Maybe you should write about what you're trying to say or discuss it more with somebody. Maybe this is just free-form expression?
6/25/2016 10:04:42 PM
Topic:
Critique

Tina Lineham
Posts: 2
Hi there,



I'm always very open to receiving helpful feedback in any form to try and improve. Any feedback would be much appreciated. I've copied one of my poems bellow that I would like to improve.








The world is a filter for the finest

Naturally divided,

Refined in detail,

To strike revenge,

To falter is to fail




Now the frail remains of our undoing are cremated

In his image

The universe implodes

Only the finest will be saved,

The rich and the richer

Those who spill blood,

Not their own,




Those who reap what the poor have sown

The faces behind the Nations finest

Haunt the dead and dying.





Please feel free to read and critique my other poems posted on my page.




Regards,




Tina
6/25/2016 9:57:33 PM
Topic:
Feedback is much appreciated

Tina Lineham
Posts: 2
Hi There,



I'm new to this site but have been writing poetry as a hobby since adolescence. I've joined a few different poetry sites in order to get feedback and read other poetry to try and improve my writing. While poetry is a hobby that I keep mostly to myself outside of work and university, I have always been interested in the opportunity to improve and participate within the poetry community.




Regards,




Tina
6/25/2016 9:42:09 AM
Topic:
Can someone critique my poem about a ant death

Lisa Costigan
Posts: 4
Good use of words,like how such a dark topic was made lighter
6/24/2016 10:31:44 PM
Topic:
Can someone critique my poem about a ant death

LeoBlues
Posts: 1
I wrote this poem after seeing the death of a ant.



Upon Montreal evergreen stone,
Urban sounds, trotted in flash of light
The stone shook, thunderings in wounds
Thou paladin agony, was second long


Upon grounds of worthy fought
Where battles, swirl in moonlight
Howling tunes of great combat
Where gleaming shields, clash
With Giants of Montreal


Gentle gaint, looked upon ant
With smiling, eyes dying
So thus his song was sorrowful
To see thou paladin in agony


Thus burial was crafted,
Gently, with childish hands
Your muse of healing hearts
Happily, praise your inter camelot


Tearful Gaint, wrote upon stele
Of paladin great purpose,
His wroth in earthen realms
Giving incense for afterlife
6/23/2016 5:45:01 AM
Topic:
My first Villanelle Poem... Help!

Mike Jones
Posts: 8
Thank you Lisa




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