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7/27/2015 9:52:28 PM
Topic:
I am new here so bear with me....

eric boddie
Posts: 1
I have been writing for quite some time
my pen is addicted to the line
that inspires so many Souls
finding the perfect muse is my only goal
it could be a relaxing summer breeze
maybe the birds chirping up in the trees
it could easily be all my pain and strife
but whatever it is, it will forever define my Life....
I am happy to be a part of this community, and I look forward to befriending at least most if not all of you....one
7/27/2015 8:49:25 PM
Topic:
Okay....Be brutal

Brenda Kelly
Posts: 2
mellowsquid, thank you very much! It has been very helpful! I have been doing a lot of reading on this site and learning quite a bit. I can't wait to try your suggestions. Thanks again, Brenda
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7/26/2015 8:03:02 PM
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Discovered a new love

A. Jax
Posts: 1
While listening to a TED talk at work about spoken word, realized how much I loved poetry growing up, and how I really need an outlet, so I started writing some things down.

Then I came across this site, and look so forward to reading other's poetry and getting some feedback on mine! Nice to "meet" you all!!!
7/26/2015 3:37:09 PM
Topic:
Fire away!

Mary Oliver Rotman
Posts: 1
The Call of the Alpha MaleRobin Hood, man in tightsJulius Caesar, might makes rightAlexander, called "the Great"Sitting Bull, righteous hateRobert the Bruce, Attila the HunCharlemagne, NapoleonHear the call of the alpha male!Warriors leave a bloody trail.George Washington, man on the spotJFK and CamelotThomas Jefferson, renaissance manAbe Lincoln took a standRonald Reagan, Richard IIIHenry VIII, Harry ByrdHear the call of the alpha male!In politics it's all for sale.Hemingway, Shakespeare, Kant, and PlatoChaucer, Shelley, Cicero, CatoVoltaire, Dickens, Rene DescartesByron, Lawrence, Jean-Paul SartreHear the call of the alpha male!Some prefer to write the tale.Wolfgang Mozart, dead so youngLeonard Bernstein's song is sungPicasso, art you love to hateLudwig Beethoven, voice of FateBach, Lennon, and ShostakovichMonet, Manet, Buddy RichHear the call of the alpha male!Art and music fill some sails.Joe Montana, football starMichael Jordan raised the barWayne Gretzsky, Hall of FameJesse Owens changed the gameRockne, Ruth, Gehrig, OrrChamberlain, Beckham, Man O' WarHear the call of the alpha male!Athletic prowess up for sale.Tyrone Power, Harrison FordJohn Glenn, Sir Thomas MoreEdmund Hillary, John DonneAlbert Einstein, Brigham YoungJames Dean, Alvin YorkMargaret Thatcher, Robert BorkAudie Murphy, Mohandas GandhiChris Columbus, Walter RaleghHear the call of the alpha male!Now it's time to end this tale.Woe to she who hears his cry,Destined, like as not, to die;For alpha males blaze bright and sweet,But she-moths burn inside their heat.
7/26/2015 10:29:22 AM
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And I have an 'Ology' :(

Bill Lindsay
Posts: 1
Sitting in the park ( close to the University ) eating lunch, and I became aware of 2 Professor types walking into my view. Deeeeep in conversation, they were speaking so loudly that the gulls and ducks scattered before them. As they did so, I turned my head to eavesdrop and all I heard was: "... and *NINTHLY"
7/25/2015 11:36:34 PM
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Just wanted to say hello

Wilbert Dela Cruz
Posts: 1
Hello everyone, my name Wilbert E. Dela Cruz, and just likeeveryone else, all over the world, I was born a poet and I consider my life as wholemess of poetry in motion…My dreams are currently under construction and my passionis a work in progress. I believe in thesaying that, life is a lot like writing poetry, by how you live; it is how youcan inspire the world. I also believethat there is power in our words and every time we happens to write one down and then calls it poetry, in however ever ways we wrote them down, it isalready beautiful just like any other work of art is beautiful, all the other rules arejust different ways of specifying in what ways do each one of us, want to re-define what is beautiful. In a more personal note, I don’t particularly like walking inside astrange place as a stranger and so if you guys don’t mind, I’ll come in here andspeak as a friend and so don’t be a stranger, friend.
7/23/2015 11:20:25 PM
Topic:
Okay....Be brutal

Sigmund Fraud
Posts: 7
DAYUM!! Did he die!?
7/23/2015 11:17:43 PM
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My poem life is a fraud

Sigmund Fraud
Posts: 7
I feel like your poem is lacking pure expression and freedom of thought. I don't know if I can crituque your writing style so much as ask you what is it you're hiding from? What's holding you back? Is it your poem that's a fraud, or are you hiding behind your poetry? How can you return one day if you never brought it to us in the first place?

Work it out and come back here when you're serious, cause right now you're a clown.
7/23/2015 11:13:19 PM
Topic:
Tomato Soup

Sigmund Fraud
Posts: 7
Nameste man. Keep doing your thing. I appreciate your expressions of love.
7/23/2015 11:10:49 PM
Topic:
Think of a title then just riff.

Sigmund Fraud
Posts: 7
I don't know if this is totally helpful, but I find it best when I'm writing poetry just to think of a title of an abstract thought then just go for it.



For instance I just thought of the title "I shed a tear so don't even worry about my eyes; they function" So I'm just going to go for it, I hope you guys don't mind.




It swells up inside me, as the lump builds in my throat. I put up a wall, and my tears become a moat you can't cross. You have to just sit and watch me and wish that you could help, but all along you're the problem, with you I'll never cope.




So anyway, just think of a title and basically pure expression and pure genius will follow. Some say they're empty words, but if they fill your heart then put them on paper and you can save a life.




Nameste.
7/23/2015 11:00:59 PM
Topic:
I got a word for you, and you have to accept it.

Sigmund Fraud
Posts: 7
You've got no choice, as I put my thoughts in your thoughts and transcend what all you got goin on there in that bag of tricks.



Don't even try to pretend you don't like it. I've got it on good authority that if you had a remote you would change it to that channel and watch it all go down, you psycho. Like you don't even know it's good for you. Take a look at the before and after and tell me it's not all that. You've got words, but I've got better ones to come out yo mouth.




I got a whole new bag, and so does papa. And you don't even know to give it the what for, or even to ask what for if you did! Post it! Upvote it! Make sure to like it, and hashtag all of it to get the word out to the whole world, but you still empty and you know it, so clap your hands. And pretend. Cause it's all you know how to do.




And I'll be watching. I'll be watching and waiting for you to fail, but I'll be watching for a long time, cause failure looks a whole lot like success in this world, and I'm as confused as you. But the whole world keeps on turning, and sometimes it turns so fast it's hard to even stand up, let alone walk.




So I'll walk alone. Cause I don't even need you, Sheila. So you can suck it.
7/23/2015 10:51:48 PM
Topic:
Sick your momma on me so I can chase her out.

Sigmund Fraud
Posts: 7
I can't believe I've grown so stagnant. I got no where to go but out. What lies behind these walls? I don't even know, and I have no motivation to move. No desire to find out, nothing pushing me to be a better version of myself. ly



So let her loose. Let her track me down, let her chase me out of the rut I'm in. Let me runs towards the unknown, but mostly running away from her bare skin, trying to figure out why lies beneath but also what lies within.




Don't make me do it alone. She's your mom. She's your problem. She's after me, but she's part of you and I don't want to see what part of me she brings out and what part of me she puts in.




So watch us, but always let us be. Always remember who I was, but also remember who I'm going to be.




Call me father. But resent me. I'm sorry I did this to you. Let me call you daughter. Let me call you son. It's up to you. You'll figure it out on your own. But eventually we'll all be one.
7/23/2015 10:51:12 PM
Topic:
Tomato Soup

Benjamin Lieness
Posts: 1
I like the free flow of thought. True artists don't get hung up on grammar. True artists aren't concerned with how others preserve their thoughts but are concerned with expression and just spilling their thoughts freely to the page. Kudos man.. Keep it up!
7/23/2015 10:35:30 PM
Topic:
Tomato Soup

Sigmund Fraud
Posts: 7
Memories of my childhood, mother making soup as I'm sick trying as I might not attend a school full of children and spite. I lay in my bed of my childhood cloaked in a blanket of lies as my mother brings in soup served with a knife.



I plead with my mother not send me out into the cold dark night of the world as outside my window the sun shines as bright as the blood I wished would bleed from my eyes. If only to make the reality of my lies as real as my childhood pries.




But mother knows. Mother knows that I'm faking as I slip into the cold dark hands of my creator and slowly I die. Why she heats up my tomato soup, so sure that all along I was faking, she seemed so sure, but now mother cries.
7/22/2015 5:24:56 PM
Topic:
Agree to Disagree (A Sonnet)

Graphite Drug
Posts: 36
rstonerjr wrote:
May I recommend "Discussing weather a wise decision". Talk of weather has a connotation of time passing conversation. This phrase also fits the 10 syllable count. The form works well and the message is clear and understandable.



Sports fan, your comment is appreciated. I do like your suggestion and have considered it. Regarding myself, people I have discussed sports with do take it seriously, but with people I have been with it has been a more friendly rivalry than anything heatedly political. From personal experience, sports fans seem to enjoy their discussions about their pass times and are able to joke about opposing views with less resentment (some Red Sox and Yankees fans excluded). Also from my own experience, weather is an introductory topic, while sports are a good change of subject.
edited by graphitedrug on 7/22/2015
7/22/2015 5:15:15 PM
Topic:
Okay....Be brutal

Tess B.
Posts: 1
Hello Kelly!
I'm glad you are interested in poetry. This poem does look like the work of a beginner, however what would you expect from a beginner! Here are some things you can work on to improve yourself as a poet and your poem:




1. Avoid, avoid, avoid (in fact, run like it's wildfire) cliches (burning desire, washed clean, etc.) Pretty much any normal words having to do with pain or love (rage, beautiful, etc.) Instead, practice using synonyms of ordinary words. Practice, learn, practice.




2. Don't use so many filler words! You don't need so many "as, from, the, and, in"s. Instead, maybe write with these words and cut them down later. See what happens:

A. Both of us

skipped and twirled

across the glorious seas

b. We twirled

across glorious seas.




3. Practice on writing more concrete images. Instead of writing (telling) about a vague pain you feel, SHOW what made you feel that way. So, instead of:




his unfair words ache my soul




You would want something a little more like this:

screams of vanity

on the kitchen table

(he says I'm no good);

i cried on messy sheets.




Use your own style. Paint a picture in the reader's mind... don't telling them what to think




I hope this advice has helped you and good luck!!!




xoxo

mellowsquid
7/21/2015 2:27:15 PM
Topic:
Introduce my self

Robert Meacham
Posts: 1
Im just a poet and avid reader of poetry. I hope to find this site a ghreat place to share poetry.
7/21/2015 2:01:03 PM
Topic:
My poem Leviathan

Robert Stoner Jr
Posts: 4
I enjoyed the write, the form economical of word and consistent works. I found the message clear and understandable. I did find the capitalization of Waves, Ocean, Behemoth Breaching, Longboats a bit distracting as I read trying to guess the significance of these words. I also would like to have seen the use of commas to break lines and add emphasis in areas. Revenge, rage, regret- three similar but different concepts. Destruction, death, defeat same situation. Since you did use a comma in the last line you established a precedent for their use making their omission distracting.




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