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Rewritten

I measured my words carefully
Sweet verses I wanted you to drink
To help you escape your misery
A new beginning awash in pink
Tears in your eyes, I watched you blink

A slight smile a knowing look
I witnessed how your shoulders shook
Your sadness was breaking away
Rewritten pages in your book
Colored words a brand new day


Inspired by Dr. Ram Mehta to try a new form.

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  1. Date: 10/3/2014 9:02:00 PM

    One word, "Wonderful"....Sharon G.
  1. Date: 9/21/2014 1:55:00 PM

    You nailed this new form with a spectacular write my friend! Bravo!!
  1. Date: 9/21/2014 9:53:00 AM

    To uplift or to make aware is our duty. Words contain healing powers and can devour; A healing is in here Mr.! .. Thanks for your comment, it was deep and truly appreciated!
  1. Date: 9/21/2014 12:14:00 AM

    After reading this, how can one top it? Brilliant
  1. Date: 9/20/2014 11:06:00 PM

    Your Muse had inspired you well, Richard. Another beauty.
  1. Date: 9/20/2014 12:44:00 AM

    Beautifully written Richard. Rated 7. Verlena
  1. Date: 9/19/2014 10:01:00 AM

    A lovely treat for my evening reading Rick! :D thank you for stopping by to my page before, you made my day! Yay! :D have a great day there, hug, Yanny
  1. Date: 9/19/2014 7:50:00 AM

    Such sad and beautiful loving words. Every poem i read of yours is a gem, Richard :) I am adding you to my fav poets. Thank you for your visit to my page yesterday, your kind words are always appreciated. Love, Juli-Michelle
  1. Date: 9/19/2014 12:23:00 AM

    So beautiful and descriptive, you captured the moment so well! a real beauty of a poem.
  1. Date: 9/18/2014 9:59:00 AM

    really very beautifully crafted piece
  1. Date: 9/18/2014 9:03:00 AM

    You took this form to a new level. I love how the pages were rewritten in color.
  1. Date: 9/18/2014 1:30:00 AM

    As your story resonated deeply, by my third time through I swear I could see the scenes... Absolutely beautiful dear one.
  1. Date: 9/17/2014 2:14:00 PM

    Wow baby seems like if we are writing to each others souls, you are really getting to me with the last few that I have read, Hugs hugs.
  1. Date: 9/17/2014 12:44:00 PM

    I really like this form and love how you also chose the words to form this beautiful poem. I really enjoyed reading this. Well done Richard.
  1. Date: 9/17/2014 12:17:00 PM

    Im not familiar with this form..will have to check it out..Ive read this several times and each time I get a different feeling about it. Good work...Dr Ram will be proud...BG ( thanks for your kind words )

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