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.-G-. .-R-. .-O-. .-O-. .-V-. .-E-. .-S-. pierce my ears, caressing notes to rake tears on such moonlit aches, strings groan through passages on breaths as scrapes of violin lurch; veiled weeping dives low like fine spear falling on my riddled head, as if to crack reeds just there, enthralled by heaves of waved air swelling along melodies tragic in liquid gothic drones, my old innocence plucked raw beyond deep allegro of time; tunes' long drags hard to bear peeling my burnt flesh slow the fine bow screeches, I cry on slain notes. © by nette onclaud for Craig Cornish Concrete/Shape Contest

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  1. Date: 8/2/2012 9:57:00 AM

    Nice description of a bow. Congrats on your win, sorry for late. Loved always,bl

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 6:05:00 AM

    Congratulations on your well deserved win in Craig's "Concrete/Shape" contest Nette. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 7/31/2012 11:46:00 PM

    A woman!!!! : ) Splendid shape, Nette! Congratulations on your win in Craig's Contest! Ruben.

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 10:48:00 AM

    Poetic music! Every line is laced with sound and emotion!

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 10:42:00 AM

    First let me fab this grandiose instrument!

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 10:30:00 PM


  1. Date: 7/29/2012 5:39:00 PM

    Very creative idea, Nette! Congrats on your well-deserved win! Love, Kim

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 3:32:00 PM

    wonderful shape nette and you are so sympatico with sound! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 2:23:00 PM

    Congrats, Nette, with this imaginative shape and write! Excellent!! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 1:11:00 PM

    Congratulations nette great shape what a whizz you are xx

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 1:04:00 PM

    Knew it would be a winner...Congrats..Sara

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 12:44:00 PM

    Congratulations Nette, on your win with this wonderful and creative write. I enjoyed the read~ Caryl

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 12:20:00 PM

    Wonderful write and the shape is great! Congratulations on your win. Love, Suzette

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 12:13:00 PM

    Nette, congrats on your very musical win..David

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 12:05:00 PM

    Nette--Wonderful!! Thanks for entering--read my blog

  1. Date: 7/25/2012 11:44:00 AM

    Nette, I absolutely love this. You make it look so easy.. All the best for the contest!! Hope your week's been not too hectic ;-) *hugs* Wilma

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 11:40:00 PM

    Brilliant!!!! :) love ya, deb

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 8:09:00 PM

    wow...Nette,,, now this picture kicks ~ butt... and you know it... good luck in the contest...xox~pd

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 3:34:00 PM

    I sing song from your glorious write, and the shape creates a way for this tune to be produced! This is a wonderfully grafted write working with musical notes from scores of pleasurable finds by your gracious hands! You sure can produce the greatest of songs my good friend! You will do well in the contest, I haven't seen such an awesome shape as this! Great Work!!

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 12:44:00 PM

    So you forgot to enter it in the contest...isn't so?

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 10:34:00 AM

    wow nette this is so good, truly a poem of distinction, so unique, it jumps off the page at one, when reading. harry

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 10:24:00 AM

    You made my day special Nette, thank you!!! Lovely poem with that violin, unique. - oxox love Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 10:23:00 AM

    What a clever "shape" poem! Good going! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 10:14:00 AM

    *.* As Usual Another Amazing Profound Beautiful Poem By Your Priceless Beauty Beautiful Nette ˜ I Believe The Key Unto Myself Here Would Seem To Be, 'Slain Notes;' In Re, What Was .... One Thing I Do, Never Do I Look Behind Yet Ahead; Unto The Brightened Throne Of Everlastings Beauty & Love, My Eyes Set Their Questive Course ˜ My Luv, Tristen *.*

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 9:40:00 AM

    Great work ...Very creative with high hopes of being in the top of the winners' circle..Thanks for stopping by....Good to know that you were on stage at age 17...Sara

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 9:28:00 AM

    Sounds like Ravel's Tzigane. Passionate with varied, deep meaning. This is what I get, nette. Love, daver

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 9:26:00 AM

    Oh, Nette! This may be the best concrete poem I've ever seen! You are an artist in so many ways...favorite list!!

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 9:22:00 AM

    this is terrific Nette luv.. wish I was artistically inclined to enter this contest but a, not.. best wishes as u made this one a note worthy contender for a top spot .. craig will be as impressed as I .. am doing pretty good now.. both head and hand seem to be much better after some gruelling tests yesterday.. oh.. my pets have been my blessing .. how r u?

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 9:03:00 AM

    Check if you have entered it in the contest.No.of entries is 25 from today morning till now!

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 9:01:00 AM

    Wow Nette,this is awesome!!!