Submit Your Poems
Get Your Premium Membership

Post Comments

Please Login to post a comment
  1. Date: 6/5/2012 11:20:00 AM
    A belated congratulations on your placement in Nikko's contest David. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 6/4/2012 11:31:00 AM
    An awesome write David!Congrats on your win!!

  1. Date: 6/3/2012 3:43:00 PM
    David, such raw and powerful emotion...I felt it all the way. Gripping!

  1. Date: 6/3/2012 1:27:00 PM
    A gripping write David...congrats on your win!

  1. Date: 6/3/2012 6:22:00 AM
    wonderful imagery in this one! Congratulations, David, on your win in Nikko's contest. hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 6/3/2012 4:28:00 AM
    wonderful take on the theme…so deeply scribed, david!... congrats all the way!...:) huggs

  1. Date: 6/2/2012 11:09:00 PM
    Whoa. Wot a powerfully emotive dedication, David. The raw human loss and survival of it all. See, you can knock free verse out of the park as a homerun when you want to....maybe this is connected when the topic comes purely from your heart. A big congratulations on your win!

  1. Date: 6/2/2012 7:38:00 PM
    Wow! Wow! and Wow! I think this is your best poem, David!! Exceptional...and terribly emotive... This beauty goes to my FAVs! Congrats on your win! Ruben.

  1. Date: 6/2/2012 11:29:00 AM
    This is gripping, David. It's going to my favs. Congrats!

  1. Date: 6/2/2012 10:25:00 AM
    Oh gulp. I was reading the comments below & things finally clicked in place I was wondering about the line, about losing half your DNA-- I can be a bit dense, considering I have a twin myself I guess I should have gotten this poem more? What stood out for me here was the Emotion, I just couldn't get this out of my head, this poem, your last couple of lines totally gripped my heart, all the more now that I understand who this is for. Very beautiful, touching poem, David! Super congrats :D!

    nawala Avatar wala na nawala
    Date: 6/2/2012 10:26:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    btw sending you hugs, I am really truly sorry for your loss, David-- I remember how you told me about losing her...
  1. Date: 11/29/2011 4:19:00 PM
    How this touches my heart David, The acute sorrow in this verse can't help someone feel the pain you are experiencing. A beautiful sad verse with so much love expressed. Thank you for sharing my friend.

  1. Date: 10/6/2011 10:13:00 PM
    So lovely David..sadly its something we all tell ourselves 'happens to other people' and it's hard when its your own. A million tomorrows isnt going to stop you missing her. Big big hugs x0x It is really nice to see you writing again David, it does help :)

  1. Date: 10/3/2011 1:21:00 PM
    you move me to pieces, david.. how beautiful.. take it easy! :) huggs, nette

  1. Date: 10/1/2011 9:11:00 AM
    David,, a nice dedication,,, the start of your poem,, is very strong,, but your feeling do seem small... hope all is well,,take care,..p.d.

  1. Date: 9/28/2011 11:44:00 AM
    a touching and intense write David.. all loved ones await as we join them eventually.. the loss here is deeply felt.. pain .. the whys .. I experienced all the same emotions when my Mother died on Thanksgiving Day .. no one knows why but your lines reflect hope and care for the next journey luv..