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what once was bright is now a terrible fade an indominable feeling that hope once gave i'd look at you and my heart would melt in the beginning thats exactly how i felt now i've seen those feeling depart and something diminished pulls us apart all that extra energy just seemed to desolve after suspisions of unfaithfullness became involved my illusions decreased and came to a cease and my stary stare became a glare what was once deemed ours now yours and mine all of love disitegrated by one single crime instead of love i have the passion of hate feelings well hidden as i resolve my fate looking for a get away away to escape an open door an unlocked gate once a secret love now a secret hate i wanted to be with you but now i want to escape

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 8/21/2013 12:47:00 PM
Again, you have some grammatical errors, but as I conveyed in my other review of your work, it absolutely does not detract from its beauty and impact. You can definitely count me as a fan of your rhyming work. I look forward to reading more! :)
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Date: 5/28/2012 1:29:00 PM
Never hate John for God teaches us to forgive and to love. A well done poem. John love phyl
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Date: 5/4/2012 8:50:00 PM
'...passion of hate,' neat phrase. Well composed and rhymed, my friend! Best wishes, Keith3s
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Date: 5/4/2012 9:37:00 AM
there is always a turning table for everything.. A very thoughtful poem, john. Enjoyed this a lot.
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Date: 5/2/2012 6:45:00 PM
Not a personal plight I hope John. Well written, the point is clear. "Love of the Godly kind is never bound, what seems to be hate could be love needing freedom to grow." Agape, Moses
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Date: 5/2/2012 6:48:00 PM
thanks john, for the wisdom you brought. the light of God gives us power to frogive.
Date: 5/2/2012 5:57:00 PM
by the way..Both love and hate are born of each other.. xox~ PD
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John Loving Iii
Date: 5/2/2012 6:17:00 PM
i can tell this piece eats at some people.
Date: 5/2/2012 5:54:00 PM
Thank you John, for a very lovely and deep thought. and when i say lovely..i mean the thought that came with the get away image.. I can not relate to your pain, or the the feelings that confuse you.. However your words are deep and full of grieving and confused feelings.. thank you for sharing your poem with us.. have yourself a very wonderful day ;-) LINDA
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John Loving Iii
Date: 5/2/2012 6:18:00 PM
truthfully. this is how men feel.
Date: 4/28/2012 2:22:00 PM
Strong and emotional poem here, John! Thank you for sharing this! oxox always Laila
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John Loving Iii
Date: 5/2/2012 6:19:00 PM
wow! i thought you were a little girl.
Date: 4/27/2012 8:48:00 PM
Love that turned to hate...But....I think I still see love.Very nice & emotional write John.
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Date: 4/26/2012 4:55:00 PM
You pour such emotion in your poems John; another great one to stir up the mind! Luv, Lizzie
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Date: 4/23/2012 11:42:00 AM
great ending :)
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Date: 4/22/2012 10:27:00 PM
Sad one of love turned to hate. I like the last two lines how you summed it up with those contrasting lines.
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Date: 4/22/2012 2:04:00 PM
Sad one here..Unfaithfulness is a terrible thing between two that are suppose to be one and only to each other..Great way to express the topic..Enjoyed reading..Yes, those baby oaks are probably fated to destruction..Pity that I could not sell or give them away..Sara
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Date: 4/21/2012 12:50:00 PM
Thank you for visit John - But... I am not being featured on my poem "It is the Market Today" - About yours poem:Not a happy poem....hopeless love life, but very well done. - Have a nice weekend. - oxox Anne-Lise
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