I Wish

I wish I could be by your side, without you knowing. I wish I could be the wind that touched you, without you seeing me. I wish I was close to your heart and there you could feel me. I wish I was water and you could drink me and go inside of you, without you knowing. I wish I was the sun that comes through your window, every morning and wake you up with a caress and a kiss on your face. I wish I was the wind that forms a hurricane and take you with me, real far away. I wish I was a bird of a very special kind and be able to fly and be by your side. All these things, I wish to be, but they are fantasies that can not be. I wish I knew, if deep in your mind, you still remember me from time to time, or you forgot me little by little as time went by...
Copyright: For fantasy contest Written by Lucilla M. Carrillo
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 9/20/2013 9:39:00 AM
lovely and emotional words of love and devotion. the reader can feel the sentiment and caring in each line. nice job
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Date: 1/30/2013 9:18:00 AM
Very touching excellent poem written by a very good poet. I saw that you view another poet named Margherita Russo she's only 14 and I know it would mean alot for her to have you read her newest poem if you have the time. Thank you very much.
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Date: 1/26/2013 5:02:00 PM
Lucilla, :-) Congrats in Mystic's "FANTASY FANTASY FANTASY" fun contest... God Bless*LINDA
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Date: 1/24/2013 2:51:00 PM
Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 1/24/2013 12:53:00 PM
Congrats on your win. A very creative write. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 1/24/2013 12:10:00 PM
Touching and sad. Congrats on the win.
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Date: 1/24/2013 11:19:00 AM
Enjoyed the read once more...and congratulations on your win !!
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Date: 1/24/2013 9:58:00 AM
Oh my goodness, this is beautiful and so full of yearning. Really enjoyed reading this one! Congrats!
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Date: 1/24/2013 9:23:00 AM
I love this romantic wishful poem. An excellent write. love phyl
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Date: 1/17/2013 9:48:00 PM
A wonderfully romantic write is this one, Lucilla,!! Jag
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Date: 1/17/2013 5:46:00 PM
Ahh!!The romantic heart has written some great passion into this work...Enjoyed reading this eve..Thanks for your stop by my work..Sara
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Date: 1/17/2013 4:07:00 PM
Ah a true to life fantasy! Light & Love
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Date: 1/17/2013 9:35:00 AM
A fantastic fantacy. I like it. I wish you a win in the contest. Thanks for your appreciation of my Tanka Kiss of Death, Lucilla. I am grateful. -Mohammad
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Date: 1/16/2013 9:20:00 PM
Hi Lucy, a hard feeling not knowing if you still exist in the mind of the one who still rains upon your stars.... a very lovely and sad feeling... good luck in the contest..pd
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Date: 1/16/2013 3:19:00 PM
Beautiful fantasies! Lovely, Lucilla. Enjoyed! Good luck :)
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Date: 1/16/2013 2:55:00 PM
wonderful poem for the fantasy contest. Wish I had thought of this!!!
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Date: 1/16/2013 11:41:00 AM
Romantic wishes and dreams Lucilla. - Beautiful poem. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/16/2013 11:00:00 AM
To be smitten is lovely, till it leaves your life. Tender heartfelt words you have penned here.
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Date: 1/16/2013 10:38:00 AM
This is a lovely fantasy Lucilla luv xx
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Date: 1/16/2013 6:32:00 AM
I wish I were the ONE you have… wished for! Charming, full of sentiments and honesty! Good luck with the ONE! Thank you!
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Date: 1/16/2013 4:01:00 AM
Though it may be a long time passing since you've met this man, but I guarantee that he remembers you! All your kindness and passion that you feel here isn't easily forgotten! With each sundrop and each piece of the wind that he feels he knows its you my friend, I know that he knows...just as you remember him, so he remembers you! Memories last forever Lucilla, especially the good ones! This is an excellent write, I enjoyed reading it immensely! Thank you for sharing it today! Awesome Work!!
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Date: 1/15/2013 10:00:00 PM
Life is full of such nice wishes. You have described everything well here.
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Date: 1/15/2013 4:19:00 PM
deep feelings and serene very pretty
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Date: 1/15/2013 3:41:00 PM
This stirs feelings within... "Hey, Honey come quickly"!! (He yells to his wife in need of passions quelled.)
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