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Fickle Nature

the blue sky smiling
our small boat crossing the lake
leaping the smooth waves

It was one of our many outings on an ordinary Utah summer day. Our kids were teens. We had rented wave runners that my son and I were riding alongside our motor boat as we all  headed to a small private sandy beach. There we moored the boat and settled down on a blanket for our picnic lunch.

Suddenly, the peaceful sky began to darken. Heavy droplets, starting slowly, developed into an assault of angry pounding rain. We rushed to our boat to get back to the dock, which was about twenty minutes north of us. Once in the water, the wind strengthened, and mighty moving ridges came rolling before our eyes. Fear gripped my heart, and I could hear my 13-year old son begin to sob. “It will be ok,” was all I could think to call out though I felt helpless trembling in the downpour. 

All at once, a billow heaved itself completely over our boat. My husband and daughter began desperately bailing out water as it grew higher. It was up to my son and I to go ashore and bring back help. I now understood the meaning of wave runners, for I was running for all our lives as my heart beat to the rhythm of the lake’s surging waves. 

alone with nature
my husband and my daughter. . . 
the slow sinking boat

Written 1/10/13 for the Haibun Form Poetry Contest of "Broken Wings"

Copyright © Andrea Dietrich

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  1. Date: 3/29/2014 9:13:00 AM
    Andrea What a horrifying and scary write. I am just reading about it and getting chills. Your tale of terror is suspenseful and keeps the reader astounded till the end. Thanks for the sweet comment on my Snapshots poem. Hugs

  1. Date: 11/11/2013 3:11:00 PM
    Thank you so much for this wonderful write Andrea. Oh what an ordeal this must have been for you. Glad I found this poem as I looked through your pages...Thanks for the read, my friend....peter

  1. Date: 11/8/2013 2:25:00 PM
    Lovely use of haibun, Andrea, thanks for sharing the lovely day and experience.

  1. Date: 10/29/2013 10:48:00 PM
    Getting caught in nature can give you some hair raising experiences. I would have been in a panic. love phyl

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 9:41:00 AM
    thank you Andrea I removed it...:-)

  1. Date: 10/10/2013 7:22:00 PM
    I've been caught out a few times by nature but nothing as harrowing as this, very well written story Petal, it got more scary as it went on, what a cliffhanger you've left us with though. Take care, Richard

  1. Date: 10/10/2013 9:31:00 AM
    Astounding. Such tension and terror are evoked by your words.

  1. Date: 10/6/2013 9:40:00 PM
    I just hear the Gilligan's Island theme song. Though the reality doesn't sound very entertaining. Hears to strong hearts. Peace. :)

  1. Date: 10/5/2013 10:01:00 AM
    That would be frightening. This sort of writing is fun, Enjoyed mucho. Love, daver

  1. Date: 10/4/2013 8:58:00 AM
    Powerful emotions! I hung on every word. Nature is a harsh mistress.. You really put the reader in the action. Than you Andrea ; always Michael

  1. Date: 10/3/2013 3:44:00 PM
    Good haibun. my heart is racing too. i meant there Make-up in my poem.

  1. Date: 10/3/2013 12:39:00 PM
    This would be enough to make anyone's heart race, you tell it with great emotion, enjoyed reading this, love xxx

  1. Date: 10/3/2013 10:16:00 AM
    Andrea; this must have been quiet an expirence, This are the stories that later we can tell our grandkids. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.... Lucilla

  1. Date: 10/3/2013 10:15:00 AM
    Andrea; this must have been quiet an expirence, This are the stories that later we can tell our grandkids. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.... Lucilla

  1. Date: 10/3/2013 8:10:00 AM
    very vivid Anthea can picture it so scary lovely pen. Ty for visiting my work Shadow x smile

  1. Date: 10/3/2013 6:38:00 AM
    Cannot even imagine what must have been going on in your mind at the time Andrea.. All the best for the contest :)

  1. Date: 10/3/2013 6:35:00 AM
    nicely written Andrea....that sounded scary

  1. Date: 10/3/2013 4:41:00 AM
    Events like these mark for ever one's life! Moments of the sort remind us how weak we are facing nature and how powerful nature is! Most of all they remind us how lucky we are to go through such an adventure and live to tell the story! One has to be very ,very thankful! Captivating story! Good luck!

  1. Date: 10/2/2013 11:14:00 PM
    Excellent. Well crafted poem. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs

  1. Date: 10/2/2013 5:41:00 PM
    For those that asked, not sure there will be a part two. It is pretty depressing what happened after this!