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The Journey

I set out on a long journey by train That spans from end to end Out through the window flashed past Assorted scenes one by one Sky scrapers and mud hovels, Steaming cities and peaceful hamlets, Row upon row of maize and wheat, Bent down under the weight of grain Cars gliding along crowded streets, Children school bound in crisp uniforms Cattle grazing on distant hills, Cadets on parade beside their tented camps Smoke coiling up from tall chimneys, Sizzling cascades from the heights Swirling streams and glistening rivulets, Silky meadows and tall mounts Disposed not to enjoy the scenes, My mind moored to the final halt Saw nothing before, but the destination My fellow travelers – a flaunting menagerie, Communed with few, connected to none At every halt, some exited out And strangers came in to fill the space But all to myself- my eyes far set Damning the distance, I waited on and on- A wretched lone traveler, like a sailor lost in the sea, Restless I was to reach the shore, My ears agog to shouts of welcome My body eager for the warm embrace I paced the aisles and counted the miles, Impatient and irate, I grew I dreamt, my life - a jig saw puzzle, The pieces neatly fitting together On arrival after a tedious trip Once and for all, at my terminus With my gaze fixed beyond the horizon, Caring not to see what lies before I continue to travel miles on end To a place that outdistances me ever!
March.21. 2022 Form J- Just Write Me a New Poem Sponsor- Constance La France

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Date: 3/28/2022 5:06:00 PM
I see below that your entry was the winner. Congratulations on the win. It was a very interesting poem. A journey never-ending can be depressing unless a person learns to enjoy the process of being on a journey. Full life is in the living of that life: the life, the laughs, the lessons and most of all the Love! May your journey be filled with Love and blessings, Bill
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Date: 3/26/2022 6:49:00 PM
Valsa, congratulations on your win in my Just Write Me A Poem contest, wonderful ~Constance
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Date: 3/25/2022 9:16:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. "The Journey" is a lovely story/write. Love It. Have a great/blessed day............
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Date: 3/24/2022 9:35:00 PM
"I paced the aisles and counted the miles, Impatient and irate", "I continue to travel miles on end" - Comforts and discomforts of the inner journey is beautifully brought out hand in hand with the explicit train journey. Congratulations!
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Date: 3/24/2022 6:56:00 PM
Great prompt for living in the present moment continuum. Congrats on your win, with the finely written poem, Valsa!
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Date: 3/24/2022 6:43:00 PM
Outstanding piece! Your journey spells the very essence of it. CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR 1ST PLACE win with this profound poem.
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Date: 3/24/2022 4:23:00 PM
Congratulations Vasal, on your win. Outstanding poem. Blessings ~ Debra
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Date: 3/23/2022 9:24:00 AM
We have no train now in Malta but when abroad I did travel on several ones. Always enjoyed them Well done for the imagery and descriptions.
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Date: 3/22/2022 2:26:00 AM
Hey my talented friend, an awesome description of a train journey so many things one sometime daily sees to and from maybe work or family or perhaps an annual holiday things we take for granted but which when strung together with creativity produce this exquisite write. How wonderful to finally reach a destination and get a big hug Love, blessings, Jennifer
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Date: 3/21/2022 11:36:00 AM
Love the journey you took me on here with great imagery...such a lovely poem..
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Date: 3/21/2022 11:29:00 AM
Wherever one travels, the most welcome sight is a familiar face!! Enjoyed! Aloha!
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Date: 3/21/2022 10:44:00 AM
What a great experience, Valsa. I enjoy train travels when I can just sit back and take in all of the varied landscapes. I hope you have a wonderful Monday and good luck in the contest.
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Date: 3/21/2022 5:30:00 AM
Enjoyed this train ride, Valsa. Your exquisite details bring forth the images as if being there. Excellent write, as always.
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Valsa George
Date: 3/21/2022 7:41:00 AM
To get an "Excellent' rating from an Excellent poet is always a pleasure ! Thanks a lot dear friend !
Date: 3/21/2022 1:34:00 AM
An incredible journey Valsa, love train journeys where you can just admire all the different scenery. Hope you have a great week. Tom
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Valsa George
Date: 3/21/2022 7:39:00 AM
Even I love traveling in train ! Thanks a lot Tom
Date: 3/20/2022 11:15:00 PM
An outpouring of raw and deep emotions, oozing from within. We are all lone travelers adrift in endless space. Powerful indeed Valsa!!...ab
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Valsa George
Date: 3/21/2022 7:38:00 AM
Thank you so much ! We fail to enjoy what is in front and our hopes are built on future. As a result we can neither enjoy the present nor the future. It is the sad fate of man !

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