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3/9/2023 7:09:40 AM
Critique please!	I wish somebody would’ve told me I wish somebody would’ve told me That the world never ends Even when you want it to. When a black hole swallows you up On the spot When an earthquake leaves you cracked and bleeding When a wave covers you and you drown In a sea of deep dark pain. The world goes on, It keeps moving, keeps spinning, Leaving you behind. I wish somebody would’ve told me That screaming is it’s own natural disaster Yelling into the void of moving bodies, Is taking a magnifying glass to an ant hill And burning it down Pain spreads the farther your voice carries As you watch your pain burn down the world, Then you open your eyes and no one has heard you The scream never left your bloody lips I wish somebody would’ve told me That disasters don’t count When they happen in your brain.
3/9/2023 9:31:58 AM
The Rougarou	The Rougarou Somebody told me To put thirteen shiny Pennies On my window sill. To ward away The Rougarou They say he can’t count past twelve Being dim So he just keeps counting The Rougarou does, Over and over Until the sun hits his back Scaring him back to the shadows Safe. I put out the pennies For the Rougarou Just as I was told But the sun never shines In my darkened depression So the Rougarou Never left.
3/9/2023 9:36:18 AM
Performing the Warrior	It's really good! very good job portraying emotion through description, I think it might be interesting if you changed this poem to second person
3/9/2023 9:40:08 AM
Hey everyone	Hi guys! I'm the Ant, I write poems that feel to personal to share anywhere but the interenet
3/10/2023 6:22:48 AM
Critique please!	Thank you, that means a lot
3/15/2023 8:32:11 AM
"Mind" please tell me what you think	Mind Tic tic tic Go the seconds on the clock And the rustling of papers “Someone please say stop!” “I am trapped inside a nightmare” “I am trapped inside my head” “I’m filled with millions of equations” “Was it something that I said?” Tic tic tic “Goes the clock I cannot hear” “Because I’m floating and I’m sinking” “I am drowning in my fear” “I am screaming and I’m crying” And nobody can tell On the outside All is perfect “In my head I’m stuck in hell” I am calm and I’m collected I am joyous and secure “In my head I know I’m lying” “Although my reasons are unsure” Tic Tic Tic And the clock keeps ticking All the voices getting louder “And I know there’s something missing” Everything is moving faster Everything is slowing down “If I scream and no one's listening” “Do I even make a sound?” A millions things have happened “But it’s all inside my brain” “It finally has happened” “I have finally gone insane” We all have tried to reach you But you just can’t hear The clock will still be ticking without you here
4/11/2023 10:07:58 AM
"A Look Inside my Psyche" -The Ant	Tic tic tic Go the seconds on the clock And the rustling of papers “Someone please say stop!” “I am trapped inside a nightmare” “I am trapped inside my head” “I’m filled with millions of equations” “Was it something that I said?” Tic tic tic “Goes the clock I cannot hear” “Because I’m floating and I’m sinking” “I am drowning in my fear” “I am screaming and I’m crying” And nobody can tell On the outside All is perfect “In my head I’m stuck in hell” I am calm and I’m collected I am joyous and secure “In my head I know I’m lying” “Although my reasons are unsure” Tic Tic Tic And the clock keeps ticking All the voices getting louder “And I know there’s something missing” Everything is moving faster Everything is slowing down “If I scream and no one's listening” “Do I even make a sound?” A millions things have happened “But it’s all inside my brain” “It finally has happened” “I have finally gone insane” We all have tried to reach you But you just can’t hear The clock will still be ticking without you here.
4/12/2023 10:45:41 AM
"A Look Inside my Psyche" -The Ant	Thank You!
4/26/2023 10:48:24 AM
Critique please!	Beautiful Poem, definitely share it!
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