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4/11/2023 10:07:58 AM

The Ant
Posts: 9
Tic tic tic
Go the seconds on the clock
And the rustling of papers
“Someone please say stop!”
“I am trapped inside a nightmare”
“I am trapped inside my head”
“I’m filled with millions of equations”
“Was it something that I said?”

Tic tic tic
“Goes the clock I cannot hear”
“Because I’m floating and I’m sinking”
“I am drowning in my fear”
“I am screaming and I’m crying”
And nobody can tell
On the outside
All is perfect
“In my head I’m stuck in hell”
I am calm and I’m collected
I am joyous and secure
“In my head I know I’m lying”
“Although my reasons are unsure”

Tic Tic Tic
And the clock keeps ticking
All the voices getting louder
“And I know there’s something missing”
Everything is moving faster
Everything is slowing down
“If I scream and no one's listening”
“Do I even make a sound?”
A millions things have happened
“But it’s all inside my brain”
“It finally has happened”
“I have finally gone insane”
We all have tried to reach you
But you just can’t hear
The clock will still be ticking without you here.
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4/11/2023 10:17:45 PM

Edgar R. Eslit
Posts: 2
theantwritespoetry wrote:
Tic tic tic
Go the seconds on the clock
And the rustling of papers
“Someone please say stop!”
“I am trapped inside a nightmare”
“I am trapped inside my head”
“I’m filled with millions of equations”
“Was it something that I said?”

Tic tic tic
“Goes the clock I cannot hear”
“Because I’m floating and I’m sinking”
“I am drowning in my fear”
“I am screaming and I’m crying”
And nobody can tell
On the outside
All is perfect
“In my head I’m stuck in hell”
I am calm and I’m collected
I am joyous and secure
“In my head I know I’m lying”
“Although my reasons are unsure”

Tic Tic Tic
And the clock keeps ticking
All the voices getting louder
“And I know there’s something missing”
Everything is moving faster
Everything is slowing down
“If I scream and no one's listening”
“Do I even make a sound?”
A millions things have happened
“But it’s all inside my brain”
“It finally has happened”
“I have finally gone insane”
We all have tried to reach you
But you just can’t hear
The clock will still be ticking without you here.
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4/11/2023 10:19:58 PM

Edgar R. Eslit
Posts: 2
Wow! A poem with elegance ang grace. Congratulations!
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4/12/2023 10:45:41 AM

The Ant
Posts: 9
Thank You!
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