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You Are So Beautiful

You are so beautiful.

More beautiful than eye              sit here in the shadows
watching you,
inspired by your innocence.

You are so kind,
the way your fragility shatters over and over
upon the surface of your precociousness.

Eye shed my monk's robes
to join the fight against evil,
but evil won,
washed through me
as an all-encompassing disease....
....became evil to fight evil.


eye look upon the Temple;
looking at it from the outside-in.
And, all I really want,
is to pray there again with butter candles and beads.

The evil is too powerful to fight against,
mere mortals do not have a chance.
Eye didn't know this yet,
far too green behind my soul.


eye just want to atone for my many misdeeds,
so that my heart burns brightly enough,
the winds of wickedness cannot extinguish its flame.

Eye still have my robe and beads here with me,
buried the sword in foreign sands,
but the Temple looms high above,
looking down upon me as a stranger.

Eye will wait within its shadow,
for my patience has yet to evaporate.
Watching the beautiful, kind people
pass through the Temple,

eye wonder if they even taste the butter tea.

~(2012 Jungle Re-mix)~

Copyright © Chris D. Aechtner

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  1. Date: 6/21/2012 7:40:00 AM
    CDA, thanks a mill for my placement in your contests. It's a good thing you didn't know I wrote "Windswept" :D coming back to your gem, eye absolutely love it, this made me smile today!!

  1. Date: 6/20/2012 8:29:00 AM
    I don't comment often enough, Chris, but you are indeed, one of the best!! I am honored to ever be among your list in any contest you sponsor. Thank you!! This poem is why I am always in awe of your writing. :)

  1. Date: 6/18/2012 1:47:00 AM "You Are So Beautiful" a lot Chris, a lovely written poem. - oxox Anne-Lise

  1. Date: 6/18/2012 12:55:00 AM
    "the winds of wickedness cannot extinguish its flame."... me likey berry much Christopher :) xx

  1. Date: 6/17/2012 7:39:00 AM
    very nice, Chris. Enjoyed this one. hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 6/17/2012 3:28:00 AM
    WOW,I love this Chris.Creativity at its peak,OUTSTANDING GEM!!!!!

  1. Date: 6/17/2012 12:41:00 AM
    gosh, this is the second remix I am seeing here tonight. Makes me think there is a contest going on I don't know about. Anyway, this is really nice writing, Chris. I enjoyed what you did with "eye" and now "eye" am thinking it had something to do with your Avatar change!!!

  1. Date: 6/17/2012 12:39:00 AM
    There is nothing more beautiful than the innocence and the light of a child...

  1. Date: 6/17/2012 12:34:00 AM
    What a piece of art here...would have to check out the original version as it Chris!!!

  1. Date: 6/17/2012 12:31:00 AM
    This is so made me laugh and cry at the same time...I'm not sure how many taste the butter tea...But I sure like to butter the sky while the water is boiling...and catch the happy virus...often :) But's contagious! (I don't know where this comment came from -- mad! I stole most of these words from Hafiz.)

  1. Date: 6/16/2012 11:51:00 PM
    Ok I read it again. Yes, still a beautiful in its own way, and this version does have its own special appeal to it. Did I say this had shorter lines? Umm maybe I'm wrong, this has longer lines. Yup my memory fails me. Hehe sorry, I guess I just couldn't help comparing it with the 1st one since I distinctly remember how that one was one of your first poems that truly moved me and made me all misty eyed. Haha so I am being a bit sentimental over that version, lol.

    nawala Avatar wala na nawala
    Date: 6/17/2012 12:31:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Oh as for the cliches, hehe I can be a sucker for them sometimes, but super good for you for editing those.... It's definitely more interesting to try to think of alternatives to these cliches, i enjoy doing that myself . And yes, methinks butter beads, butter tea is definitely unique! :)
    nawala Avatar wala na nawala
    Date: 6/17/2012 12:23:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I swear you are freaky! It actually came across my mind a few minutes ago that you wrote that a couple of years back! And it occurred to me that maybe you wrote it right about this time? And you just confirmed it for me, lol. Thank you for keeping the original version :D. Let me fave this one as well, ;)
    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner
    Date: 6/17/2012 12:15:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    nikko, thanks for the feedback. I just found it interesting is all. The original version was written 2 years and a day ago, and I thought there were a few cliche lines in it, so I began editing it recently. Hmmm, I will leave the original version as is.
    nawala Avatar wala na nawala
    Date: 6/17/2012 12:08:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Oh, and why is it interesting? Eep, is this supposed to be the deeper poem or something and I totally didn't get it? Oopsy then :D
    nawala Avatar wala na nawala
    Date: 6/17/2012 12:06:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Like? I Love that version! Hehe. To be honest, that's one of my all time favorite of yours, lol. So reading this was like watching a movie remake where I like the original version better. Don't get me wrong, I do like this one too, but I love that one :p.
    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner
    Date: 6/16/2012 11:59:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Interesting! You like the 1st version, eh?
  1. Date: 6/16/2012 11:44:00 PM
    Wot happened?! Borrowing your 'wot' btw- Don't hate me, but I love the original version! I loved how that one flowed, your ending there just wowed me. I will admit that your edited version is very interesting though, I really enjoy the wordplay you use with 'eye'. You played around withshorter lines? It's cool how you did. And of how this has a more lighthearted feel to it if you will.just me but the word butter makes it a bit comic for me, I'm just thinking butter slippery oily hands, yup I am weird, btw i have no idea what butter tea is? Maybe i should look it up to understand this version better. :) still a wonderful read, Chris. I enjoyed reading this again with a twist :)