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Yellow Submarine

I took a dive And saw the fish. A star fish too… I made a wish. An octopus, A scuttling crab, The ocean’s floor Is never drab. As mermaids sing And dolphins play, I wish this was My holiday. A treasure chest, A sunken ship. Now time to leave - But what a trip. I can’t believe The things I’ve seen; I wish I owned This submarine. For Heather’s Beatlemania contest

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Date: 8/22/2013 6:38:00 PM
Congrats on you win, but why yellow! lols
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Date: 3/16/2013 12:19:00 PM
Jack.. Congratulations on your win :-) PD
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Date: 3/15/2013 1:27:00 PM
Many congrats Jack, sorry its a wee bit late xx
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Date: 3/13/2013 9:13:00 PM
Congratulations on a great win, JMH! Well done and I'm not surprised, my friend. Always, Annalise
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Date: 3/13/2013 4:32:00 PM
Love that song congrats on your win! Nicely done.
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Date: 3/13/2013 3:34:00 PM
jack congrats on your win, good fun poem this ...David
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Date: 3/13/2013 2:34:00 PM
This makes me want to sing it to my grandkids!!! What a cute twist on a favorite Beatle song!!
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Date: 3/13/2013 12:50:00 PM
Jack, "Yellow Submarine" was the first song I ever heard (and I mean ever! I was probably two or three years old.) You maintained the innocent essence of the original and turned it into a fun, unique piece. Great job! Congrats on your win in my contest :)
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Date: 3/7/2013 9:53:00 AM
You find lot's of treasures in the deep, I think a mermaid is waiting for you!
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Date: 3/6/2013 5:02:00 PM
You are so good! A definite winner in my book, my friend Jack... Best wishes for the Winners' List! Always, Annalise
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Date: 3/6/2013 2:55:00 PM
Well Jack, I had several Beatles songs in mind for this contest including 'Yellow Submarine' but I think I shall certainly mark THAT off my list...Perfect! - Tim
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Date: 3/2/2013 3:43:00 PM
Awesome write jack, good luck in the contest! Hugs
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Date: 3/1/2013 7:47:00 AM
Write MORE!!! and thanks for taking time to see so many of my poem, dear friend.
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Date: 2/26/2013 9:32:00 AM
A beauty to read Jack, sounds like an experience on the reef. I only get to see it on the computer but your way is the best. Wonderful write! LOve, Lizzie
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Date: 2/26/2013 6:11:00 AM
Jack, it is just fabulous, the flow is like a wave, I love it, best of luck in the contest, Constance
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Date: 2/25/2013 12:46:00 PM
This made me chuckle and what a wonderful ride that would be. Hard to believe we saw the Beatles make their debut in the sixties. Look at the music they made. CLASSIC. Awesome write. love phyl
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Date: 2/24/2013 12:52:00 AM
What a cute and clever way to do the Beatlemania contest. I really enjoyed this one a lot, Jack. Wanted to thank you for taking the time to catch up with so many of my recent poems. I know some were a bit long. Yours are always so succinct, just like i love poetry to be.
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Date: 2/23/2013 10:20:00 PM
Awesome as Donna says ;}
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Date: 2/23/2013 8:01:00 PM
AWESOME!
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Date: 2/23/2013 7:16:00 PM
Wow, this one really impressed me my friend, I really enjoyed reading this incredible poem this evening! You have written a masterful piece, grand showmanship here, beautifully portrayed, Great Work!!
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Date: 2/23/2013 4:48:00 PM
How dare you Jack!...I was gonna do that one!...However, 'Penny Lane' is in my ear and in my eye (very strange!) Good stuff my friend - Tim
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Date: 2/23/2013 4:18:00 PM
Oh, this fits perfectl, Jack... good luck in the contest... Terry
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Date: 2/23/2013 3:50:00 PM
I remember that song..Enjoyed reading this one today..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for the visits..Very uplifting to have you stop by..Sara
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Date: 2/23/2013 3:36:00 PM
Aah yes Jack, that's what we all could do with a submarine to conjure just like this.
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Date: 2/23/2013 2:15:00 PM
This is just adorable..and this is one of my favorite Beatle tunes. I think children would love this..BG
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