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What You Don'T See

Him "My life consists of many accomplishments!" Her "Yes you have told me about them many a time." Him "Listen very carefully if you want to grow!" Her "Oh do share, I never cease to be impressed" Her "Yes you have told me about them many a time." Him "My friends are all of the highest caliber." Her "Oh do share, I never cease to be impressed" Him "Some think I'm the most interesting man in the world!" Him "My friends are all of the highest caliber." Her "I'm not surprised they want to hang out with you." Him "Some think I'm the the most interesting man in the world" Her "Tell me more what does that means to you?" Her "I'm not surprised they want to hang out with you." Him "Yes we all have so much in common" Her "Tell me more what does that mean to you? Him "We grew up together and went to the best schools." Him "Yes we all have so much in common." Her "Can you really count on them in a pinch?" Him "We grew up together and went to the best schools." Her "I wish I could tell you that makes a difference." Her "Can you really count on them in a pinch?" Him "My hope is yes they are really important!" Her "I wish I could tell you that makes a difference." Him "Stop talking you are making me angry." Him "My hope is yes they are really important." Her "I think down deep you know the answer." Him "Stop talking, you are making me angry!" Her "In the end know you can count on me." Her "I think down deep you know the answer Listen very carefully if you want to grow. In the end know you can count on me My life consists of many accomplishments" Written June 10th 2016 Was For Becca's Contest but I read the directions wrong. It was supposed to be free verse. Sometimes the ones you don't see can be your best friend. Those people who are taken for granted and who sometimes are made to feel small or invisible. Their accomplishments may go unnoticed. They may be the only ones to see beyond the facade of importance.

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Date: 6/14/2016 4:59:00 PM
Fantastic poem Richard. I do love simple people more than those with pretentious brains..Simple people are happy people that make me feel great to be alive.yes they are wise people too..and smart in ways we dont always appreciate until they ' re gone.It feels so good to read you again.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/15/2016 8:00:00 AM
Welcome back Charmaine. If you have a chance read my poem "Thirsty" I think you might enjoy it.
Date: 6/12/2016 9:28:00 PM
A very unique structure and form ....U have perfected this form...A7 and Hugs ~Red
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2016 11:25:00 PM
The dialogue was a challenge with this form. I'm pleased you like it.
Date: 6/11/2016 8:58:00 AM
Interesting work..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for visiting my page..Sorry so long in returning your visit..Sara
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 9:13:00 AM
No worries, life is really busy!
Date: 6/11/2016 7:41:00 AM
Very interesting. This has cascaded into a poetic pantoum conversation and it was a great read. x
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 7:57:00 AM
Thanks Casarah, I'm pleased you like it. Check out my "Thirsty" poem if you get a chance. I'm off to see what you have been up to.
Date: 6/11/2016 7:27:00 AM
Innovative Pantoum writing with several messages for the reader to get! Wonderfully done dear, Richard!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 7:58:00 AM
Thanks Demetrios, I appreciate your kind comment.
Date: 6/11/2016 6:35:00 AM
Good one, dear. Have never written in this form....you write so well...hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 7:26:00 AM
Thanks Eileen, you are sweet. Hugs Rick.
Date: 6/10/2016 11:25:00 PM
I think the pantoam form is very powerful for the subject matter here, Richard! Very impressive, this! Good luck in the contest :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 1:03:00 AM
Thanks Laura.;0)
Date: 6/10/2016 10:17:00 PM
Words can be so empty but actions are what counts in the long run. Well put and very apt to our world in general A 7 from me. Love Mom
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 1:03:00 AM
Thanks mom you are sweet!
Date: 6/10/2016 8:55:00 PM
The interest in reading stays tense till the end....a true interpretation of life in general... the poem transcends all boundary .... impressive write....
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 1:07:00 AM
Thanks for being the first to comment.

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