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What Lurks Within

Outer room perfectly clean Stone wall Four squared ancient glass This old floor without even a spot I open a wooden gate Walk through a high arched door Tools fastened to a wall Knives, cleavers and a saw A single glove made of chain Sheets layed out on the floor Large hooks hanging from the ceiling They look like they have been polished No evidence of blood remains Still I can smell it in the air I hear the click of the door handle behind me Startled I quickly turn Greeted with a toothless smile Droopy eyes Bob the Butcher asks "Would you like more rump Roast Rick?" For Seren's What Lurks Within contest.

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/28/2016 7:41:00 PM

Very good payload delivered at the end of this poem, Richard. Great detailed imagery leading up to the surprise finale. Fine piece of writing. Love your work as always, my friend. Peace and love to you, RW.

Victoria Anderson-Throop

Date: 4/9/2013 4:26:00 AM

Isn't it fascinating how we each interpret a picture in such a unique manner? That is why art has always held a special place in my heart.... well done, Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/9/2013 6:33:00 AM

Thanks Victoria. You are up early.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 4/8/2013 8:30:00 AM

Congratulations Richard, good one xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/8/2013 8:41:00 AM

Thanks

Len Gasun

Date: 4/8/2013 8:08:00 AM

Big congratulations on your super win as well my dear friend Richard! Cheers! love and hugs, Leonora

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/8/2013 8:41:00 AM

Thanks Leonora.

Dinda Minardi

Date: 4/8/2013 12:31:00 AM

hahaha this one is out of the box. congrats on the win!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/8/2013 7:50:00 AM

Thanks

Ray Dillard

Date: 4/7/2013 9:02:00 PM

It was indeed a pristine room! Nice take on the reason. Congratulations, Rick! RAY

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/8/2013 7:50:00 AM

Thanks Ray

Hidden Sister

Date: 4/7/2013 8:41:00 PM

This is up my alley, scary and twisted. J

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/8/2013 7:51:00 AM

Thanks Jennifer

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/7/2013 6:13:00 PM

LOL, Richard, and you had me going there for a second or two~ Congratulations in Seren's "what lurks within" contest. Always~ LINDA

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/8/2013 7:51:00 AM

Mission accomplished

Seren Roberts

Date: 4/7/2013 5:24:00 PM

lol Richard I enjoyed this , Congrats....Seren

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/8/2013 7:52:00 AM

Thanks Seren

Bernard Colasurdo

Date: 3/31/2013 12:42:00 AM

Great write Rick love the ending, very funny

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/31/2013 7:10:00 AM

Thanks Bernard

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 3/29/2013 6:02:00 PM

Scary start with a nice twist at the end, excellent write Rick! Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/29/2013 6:16:00 PM

Cecillia, so nice to hear from you. Thanks for visiting.

Tim Ryerson

Date: 3/28/2013 4:59:00 AM

You sure got me on that one Richard!...I was thinkng that Bob the butcher was a cannibal like Hannibal Lecter until I read your explainations below...Great write! - Tim

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/28/2013 6:50:00 AM

I thought I would try a different approach.

Ale A A

Date: 3/27/2013 9:54:00 PM

I like how you started the poem very mysterious and I was sure it was all evil inside and then it turn out to be innocent. Shows that we should hold our judgement until we have all the facts.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/27/2013 10:26:00 PM

Good way of seeing it.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/27/2013 2:54:00 PM

A wonderful entry for the contest that should do well. Welcome to Poetry Soup! I don't get to visit too often because l don't have the spare time. I always enjoy reading poems whenever l get the chance. Aloha

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/27/2013 10:23:00 PM

I am glad you checked out one of mine.