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what did i do wrong? one minute we were riding high that crest of euphoria the next i was tumbling in the water pummeled by the waves unable to breathe to see to....be what did I do wrong? how did I change? didn't I give you my all maxed out love and care what else is there to give how can I live without a heart and soul? I gave you....all was it not enough to fill your empty spaces? how did I lose those enchanting graces shocked disbelief gnawing gently to grief rejection sated insides churning with the bile of betrayal brewing spewing pain burned esophageal refrain acid lined life what did I do? what did I say? why did you go away? away...away....away..... You don't hear a word I say Gone with the wind of wistful wanting daunting the life bound to me...haunting You went away....away.... took away my voice left me no choice but to shrivel and die goodbye good? bye? it's been so very long and yet.... I cry! Eileen Manassian

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Date: 9/5/2016 9:56:00 AM
The strength of feeling here is explosive in all of it's creative reverberation. Bravo! –-))
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Date: 6/28/2016 10:50:00 AM
This is emotionally gripping, Eileen. But who said that it was your fault? Your only fault could have been giving your all to someone who did not appreciate it. Hugs // paul
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Date: 6/22/2016 8:18:00 AM
Has Tim left your class??
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/22/2016 8:31:00 AM
I taught him last semester, Richard. He's left our university. :( Found something elsewhere. Hope he comes back. Hugs
Date: 6/21/2016 7:33:00 AM
Good morning, where have you been?
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Date: 6/17/2016 3:44:00 PM
When you have had this happen to you your heart bleeds from the remembrance of it with only time being that healing balm that will help to heal the pain. I can relate. Beautifully expressed Eileen! 7 ; )
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Date: 6/16/2016 10:01:00 AM
Good morning Eileen.
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Date: 6/15/2016 8:34:00 AM
You have done a great job so far. Check out mu recent Collab with Liam when you have a chance.
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Date: 6/14/2016 5:28:00 PM
So much sentiment ..emotion...This poem evokes a deep feeling of loss, want, sadness , changes and beauty too..I am touched sweet Baklava.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/15/2016 1:51:00 AM
We write of joy....we write of sorrow....we write ....we write....we write....Thanks my sweetest sister. It's so good....SO GOOD....to have you post a comment. I responded to your message. Hugs, dear one
Date: 6/14/2016 8:18:00 AM
What a painfully romantic and emotional writing that makes the heart bleed yet one cannot overlook its poetic beauty dear, Eileen!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/15/2016 1:54:00 AM
Thank you, my dear esteemed poet. Life gives us a taste of joy and sorrow...and gives us no choice but to drink what it offers. Thanks for the visit. I hope all is well. Filakia
Date: 6/14/2016 12:53:00 AM
Powerful emotions! You made this feel real. Being rejected by someone we love deeply would be the worst kind of suffering.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/15/2016 2:00:00 AM
Thank you, Richard. I'm glad my words were able to covey that. Hope all is well with you. :) I'm excited. Tonight I'm recording more programs. I'm trying to pick and choose with care. Hugs, dear.
Date: 6/13/2016 6:36:00 PM
I refuse to admit you are the Queen of romance, to me you will always be the princess, beautiful in all ways, your words and voice are like sugar! hugs!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/15/2016 2:01:00 AM
OH!!! Sugary sweet!! What a treat!!! Thanks, Arthur. You know I thrive of words of affirmation. :) Hugs
Date: 6/13/2016 1:47:00 PM
A wonderful write which is reveals how vulnerable we really are.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/13/2016 3:35:00 PM
Yes, Lenny....Some of us are more vulnerable than others. That's why the heart becomes hardened...at times. Thanks for the visit.
Date: 6/13/2016 1:07:00 PM
You do love lost like no other, really really good Eileen. Hope fictional and not real although really feels real, raw emotions and despair, been there, don't wish it on anyone. A7
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/13/2016 3:41:00 PM
Thank you, John. I think people that just bail from a relationship without having the fortitude to offer closure....really have no clue of the damage that they do to others. We write of joy....we write of pain....the blessing and the curse of being a poet. :)
Date: 6/13/2016 12:53:00 PM
Oh I feel the emotions! Wow...well done... Hugs x
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/13/2016 3:42:00 PM
Thanks, Cas. I'm glad the emotions came across well. Hugs
Date: 6/13/2016 12:37:00 PM
So much anguish and heartache portrayed here. Well expressed, Eileen! Love, Kim
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/13/2016 3:43:00 PM
Thank you, Kim. Heartache is something we all experience at one time or another....In a way...we are all walking wounded, but we pick ourselves up and carry on. Hugs

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