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*note* I can't exactly remember when I wrote this...sometime in elementary. But my teacher really liked it. I had no idea why he would be so excited about a depressing poem about war. Anyway, this is all from memory so I might have left some lines out here and there. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- War is bad, there is nothing to give Would you choose to die or would you choose to live? Everything filled with dark violence, People screaming - then silence The kind of silence that makes happiness die Death can be simple, is it worth a try? Gazing through the backyard of your life, Think of the suffering, think of the strife Wounded soldiers that grasp your heart Think of the victims in that grim death cart Make the best for your family and you Think of your life, and your future too

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 2/5/2012 11:59:00 PM
The fact that you wrote this so young says to me what a natural observer you are. The way you placed (then silence) felt almost sermon like, a time to reflect. Such a sordid subject to wrap a young head around. Thank you Laura for inspiring me.. Karen
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Date: 1/19/2012 9:24:00 PM
the war, the constant murder, seems necessary to bring, a cull to the numbers? 7 billion in this spring....:( no pleasure, can of it sing, a bloody awful thing, predators in human form, sort of have me wondering, too much animal in our jeans, so much murder is the cost, perhaps its a survivor gene, fight or flight the bridge is crossed thanks... Laura Breidenthal
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/20/2012 2:36:00 PM
This is a freaking awesome poem!!! You rock!
Date: 1/17/2012 12:38:00 AM
Thank you for adding positive energy into our Universe. I wish more people would think of our future as much as they think about our present. Thank you for a well written gem of a poem...I am one of your latest fans..
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Date: 1/10/2012 7:26:00 AM
Like I have always been saying, you are a natural, born poet. This is super cool
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Date: 1/9/2012 11:16:00 AM
Very expressive and descriptive of the topic war..I know that God does not like war and death of his dear children..I am glad that I chose this one to read this afternoon..Thanks for the review of my work..Sara
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Date: 1/8/2012 9:19:00 AM
It makes you stop and think an maybe one day more people will stop and think and wars will all be over . fully enjoyed my read Laura . Declan xx
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Date: 1/7/2012 7:49:00 PM
Lovely, war is evil. You wrote this in elementary? Wow. Ok
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Date: 1/7/2012 9:27:00 AM
Very nicely penned, Laura! These are very deep thoughts for one who was so young! I can still remember the first time I'd had to recite one of mine during a school assembly. Oh, I can still remember that poem! Oddly enough, it had the same theme as yours, however, yours is far better!! :) You're a natural, keep up the good work! Best wishes, Mikki
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Date: 1/6/2012 11:18:00 PM
I was first exposed to poetry when I was ten years old and in the fifth grade. From reading this, I would say you were more talented at writing poetry than I was. Unfortunately, none of the poems I wrote back then have survived. My old man never kept anything. He threw them out.
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Date: 1/6/2012 8:00:00 PM
enjoyed reading your work!! I like your picture I can see mischief on your face....
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Date: 1/6/2012 6:44:00 PM
JESUS! You wrote this in elementary?! I could barely even put a sensible sentence during that my elementary days, that's impresssive! p.s. might've exaggerated about the sentence thing but...I sure as hell couldn't something like this - Kyle
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Date: 1/6/2012 6:46:00 PM
excuse the 'that' before 'my' in the second sentense...see my point
Date: 1/6/2012 5:07:00 PM
Ah, written in the concrete, idealistic world of adolescence! The consequences of war are, indeed, tragic, but the cost of freedom is priceless! I'm sure, you have taken this into consideration as you have matured over time. A nice rhyme scheme, and a pertinent point of view aptly expressed!
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Date: 1/6/2012 4:41:00 PM
I'm saddened that your mind was burdened by war at that age, Laura.. but that's the world we live in...By the way, this is very good..you expressed your feelings well. Never stop writing..keep sharing your gift! Happy New Year wishes to you and yours, Laura. Love, annalise
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Date: 1/6/2012 4:24:00 PM
Well,its very impressive I must say! I like it. :o)
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