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It seems I'd left the door open in my previous limericks about Jim so I've added six more and finally shut the door on the saga of Unlucky Jim.

(I'VE PUT THE PREVIOUS LIMERICKS WITH THIS FINAL WRITE ,12 LIMERICKS IN ALL )

Bank robber Jim was one unlucky bloke Went to draw his gun but the holster broke It dropped on the bank floor And went off with a roar The shock was too much and he had a stroke... Though he was unconscious he hadn't died Woke in a coffin for his final ride In a desparate bid Banged on the coffin lid But all he could hear was laughing outside... Written 17th June 2021 Then someone shouted can you hear banging It was quite faint because folks were singing The sheriff prised off the lid And he was so glad he did Because he thought we'll have us a hanging... Jim didn't know whether to laugh or cry Resigned himself to the fact that he'd die Saw sheriff holding a rope Realised there was no hope And for unlucky Jim the end was nigh... He was taken to the gallows in town Handcuffed and wearing nothing but a frown Jim was then starting to choke But with the drop the rope broke The crowd screamed as poor Jim came tumbling down.. Unlucky Jim jumped up quick as a flash As he passed the bank ran in and grabbed cash He stole the first horse he saw Then let out a loud yee haw And for sweet freedom he made a quick dash... Written 19th June 2021 A bounty hunter called Nevada Slim Went after bank robber Unlucky Jim With tracker Spirit Bear They discovered Jims lair And Jim's future was now looking quite grim... Slim called out "put your hands in the air" Jim grabbed his gun, Slim said "don't you dare" But Jim was too fast And let off a blast Slim fell dead then Jim shot Spirit Bear... Jim quickly packed his things and rode away Thankful that he'd survived another day He decided to lie low But what old Jim didn't know Was that Pinkertons were heading his way... Jim was sleeping in the afternoon sun And didnt hear the cocking of a gun He woke up with dread Saw guns at his head And a lawman said "Jim looks like your done"... Jim was handcuffed and they rode back to town There to meet them was Sheriff and Judge Brown The charges were read Jim nodded his head Sheriff said " this time Jim you're going down" ... For Jims last request he asked for a smoke And noticed the hangman had a new rope He put a hood on Jims head Jim dangled then he was dead An escape this time!, there wasn't a hope... Written 1st July 2021 RIP UNLUCKY JIM

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/22/2021 4:08:00 PM

oh dang it, he finally bit the dust. Poor dude. I enjoyed seeing the ending nonetheless.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/23/2021 12:20:00 AM

Thank you very much Andrea, one thing for sure, he had a good run. Glad you enjoyed it. Tom

Terry Flood

Date: 7/8/2021 3:49:00 PM

Ha Ha, Tom. Looking forward to ‘Jim - The Early Years.’ You know you want to. ;-) Terry

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/9/2021 5:01:00 AM

Lol, you know me better than I know myself, just back from Wales by Aberystwyth. Wifi was hit and miss so playing catch up. Hope you're well. Tom

Joseph May

Date: 7/4/2021 5:33:00 PM

Unlucky Jim did get a few lucky breaks, Very Nice story Tom

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/4/2021 11:19:00 PM

Thank you very much Joseph, im happy that you enjoyed it. Tom

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 7/3/2021 11:17:00 AM

Well guess there's no hope for him now, but 'Unlucky Jim' sure was quite a saga to follow - Loved your vivid imagination Tom, so well penned, Blessings, Jennifer.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/3/2021 12:17:00 PM

Thank you very much Jennifer, Sadly Jim is no more, he now lies up at Boot Hill. Lol. Tom

Charles Messina

Date: 7/3/2021 3:48:00 AM

Tom, seems unlucky Jim had gotten pretty lucky at times...until the end of course. Great from start to finish. Hope all is well. Charlie

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/3/2021 3:51:00 AM

Thank you very much Charlie, im happy you enjoyed them. All good here thanks, enjoy your weekend. Tom

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/2/2021 3:34:00 PM

Poor Unlucky Jim had been lucky in a way to have such a long stay and was able to keep all the law men at bay. But like every story the bank robber was sorry and the end he came to was positively gory. Well told Tom so sorry poor Pete is gone.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2021 4:14:00 PM

You too Tom.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/3/2021 3:50:00 AM

Lo, love your comment Richard, Enjoy your weekend. Tom

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/2/2021 10:31:00 AM

Great, and just, ending to a well-told story--excellent narrative poem, Tom! Janice

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2021 10:37:00 AM

Thank you very much Janice, im pleased that you enjoyed it Tom.

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 7/2/2021 2:11:00 AM

I knew it would come to this, Jim had a good run for his money........

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2021 2:25:00 AM

Thank you very much Delice, he certainly did but the long arm (or rope) got him in the end. Enjoy your weekend. Tom

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/2/2021 1:23:00 AM

This is an incomparable story written in a majestic style that captivates and excites the mind of the reader. You are an exceptional story narrator and your talent should be recognized worldwide. A FAVE , my friend, Tom!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2021 2:06:00 AM

Thank you very much Demetrios, Im happy that you enjoyed the tale of Unlucky Jim, thanks too for the fave. Enjoy your weekend. Tom

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 7/2/2021 1:10:00 AM

This is too good and the ending episode so brilliant. Well done Tom.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2021 1:15:00 AM

Thank you very much Victor. Im happy that you enjoyed it. Tom

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 7/1/2021 10:55:00 PM

Hello Tom … All good bank robbers have a used by date but the law doesn’t as Jim found out - thanks Tom - Lindsay

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2021 1:14:00 AM

So true Lindsay, now with drones and cctv there is no hiding place, Not forgetting trackers in the covid vaccines lol. Tom

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/1/2021 10:53:00 PM

Well, isn't it truly said, "Your sin shall find you out", justifying ending, Tom:)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2021 1:11:00 AM

Thank you very much Jo, you live evil ways you pay the price. Tom

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/1/2021 6:23:00 PM

If you haven't had a POTD in the last week or two, I'll be a monkey's uncle twice removed on his aunt's side if you don't get it for this epic limerick, Tom! Bravo! Hats off! ~ gw

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2021 1:10:00 AM

Thank you very much for your vote of confidence Gershon, had my day in the spotlight last week so stepping aside. Tom

Terry Flood

Date: 7/1/2021 5:34:00 PM

But the local hot shot, had been smoking some pot, he took wobbly aim, and his claim to fame, was shooting Jim’s rope, or not! Didn’t hear no fat lady singing, Tom! Fun conclusion. Terry

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2021 1:08:00 AM

Lol at your comment Terry, as the saying goes, never say never. Tom

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/1/2021 3:49:00 PM

I am glad to see that you continued to the end, because you write so well and the story is suspenseful. We sure know what happened now. Well done Tom! :)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 3:53:00 PM

Thank you very much Heidi, I was in two minds whether or not to continue the saga of Jim, but decided he had to pay for his wrongdoings lol. Tom

Judy Ball

Date: 7/1/2021 1:22:00 PM

Loved this story Tom. Unlucky Jim got what he deserved. When you're that mean and ornery you don't deserve good luck. Told with good rhyme and rhythm and super imagery. A fun read. God Bless, JB

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 1:50:00 PM

Thank you very much Judy, im glad you enjoyed the humour. Tom

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/1/2021 12:45:00 PM

Hi Tom, This was a great ending to a wonderful story. The legacy of Unlucky Jim was quite grim. Well done- Alexis

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 12:48:00 PM

Thank you Alexis, im pleased you enjoyed the finale. Killer, horse thief and bank robber, there was only one place he was going, Boot Hill lol. Tom

Jenna Logan

Date: 7/1/2021 12:43:00 PM

Well, I guess that really was the end of Jim. Kinda sad your tale won't continue, but as a horse thief, Jim got what he deserved. haha Tom, your stories are wonderful!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 12:47:00 PM

Thank you very much Jenna, crime didn't pay off for Jim in the end.. Im happy that you enjoyed it. Tom

Rico Leffanta

Date: 7/1/2021 12:02:00 PM

until he saw it was Chinese rope?

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 12:45:00 PM

Lol, yes the bouncy kind, will he come back, who knows. Tom

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 7/1/2021 11:06:00 AM

Hello Tom Cunningham, I enjoyed the tale of unlucky Jim. Enjoy your day my friend.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 7/1/2021 3:37:00 PM

Hello Tom, ienjoyed this poem. Enjoy your evening my friend.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 11:10:00 AM

Thank you very much Darlene im happy you enjoyed them. Tom

Jan Allison

Date: 7/1/2021 10:44:00 AM

I'm so glad you have embraced the limerick form and thanks for continuing the story its a shame to see the demise of Jim but his antics gave us a good tale indeed:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 10:49:00 AM

Thank you very much Jan, I thought I'd quit while I was ahead lol. Im sure Jim had some unsavory relatives eager to follow in his footsteps. Tom

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 7/1/2021 10:36:00 AM

Wonderful tale well told. Enjoyed thoroughly. Thanks. When is the next story coming?

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 10:47:00 AM

Thank you very much Rama, I'll be consulting my muse later lol. Tom

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/1/2021 10:22:00 AM

- He had is "rich life" ... r.i.p. Jim :) - You're amazing, Tom :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 10:46:00 AM

Thank you very much Anne, glad you enjoyed them, hope you're feeling better now. Tom

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 7/1/2021 10:18:00 AM

Fantastic Tom, every Limerick. A wonderful tale, well done… Belle

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 10:21:00 AM

Thank you very much Belle, im happy that you enjoyed them. Tom

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/1/2021 10:07:00 AM

Thank you for including the entire tale! Fantastic! I agree you should see another POTD! Perhaps Cosby likewise will follow in suit. Maybe justice for these women.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/1/2021 10:45:00 AM

Thank you very much Kim, glad you enjoyed them, I saw the news about that, if you've got money and know the right people you can get away with anything, its disgusting. Tom