Twenty-Below Zero

The deepest chill of wavered Will- Dry and drained of thoughts once Sane No rush, no haste- just Time to kill (As nervousness engulfs my Brain!) The solemn place no eyes invade- A world away from another's touch The Mental Fortress I have made From trusting people far too much...

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Karen Anglesey

Date: 11/12/2013 11:14:00 AM

I read some of the comments below. I think I suffer a little from SAD. I dislike the gloom of winter, cold and snow but there is beauty in it. Sitting next to a fire with comfy blanket and sipping Merlo takes the bite out. Love this :)

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 11/13/2013 4:52:00 AM

Thanks, K. Much love and many hugs <3

Robin Davis

Date: 10/17/2013 9:14:00 AM

Hello my friend This is a very clever and intriguing piece. You make the reader think about the message in a unique way. Nice job. Hugs

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/17/2013 9:44:00 AM

Thanks, Robin; much love to you and thanks for the review :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/10/2013 10:40:00 PM

Just read what you said about loving winter. I don't know, man. If you have a tendency to become sad, summer is much better for you. SAD is actually the name of the syndrome for those who feel melancholy in winter. I sometimes wonder if I have it!!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/11/2013 7:45:00 AM

lol yeah, we discussed this one in "Equinox". I know I have SAD, so it's ironic I love fall and winter so much. If I didn't already know about it, I would have really appreciated the information. Thanks, Andrea :)

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 10/10/2013 6:36:00 PM

Very smooth flow of thoughts here my dear Archaic. I totally get this one. Truly impressive.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/10/2013 6:40:00 PM

Always a pleasure to receive a review from you, dear friend; many thanks :)

Joseph Matose

Date: 10/9/2013 1:16:00 PM

Archaic, this is an impressive piece. Your very style of condensing a gigantic message in so short a poem. Only Poetic connoisseurs can do that. Great write and thumbs up my friend! JM

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/10/2013 12:33:00 PM

That's so very kind of you to say, Joseph; makes me happier than I can express. Thank you so very much! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/7/2013 6:04:00 PM

A very cold way to be. You gotta move to a warmer climate and thaw out, man. I enjoyed the metaphor.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/7/2013 6:10:00 PM

Thanks, Andrea. Ironically, I love cold weather. Autumn is my favorite season, and I look forward to winter. The shorter days wreak havoc on me psychologically, but I love to watch it snow. I'm one of those nuts that prays for blizzards lol. Thanks for dropping by :)