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Ticking Indifference

Through the silence of the years Time tiptoes in each small story Another morning wakes with gentle glory Too quickly, pass the years, ...it is clear Around me and everywhere I look Time slips and slides, so close upon the slopes With mists upon the distant hills....our hopes Are dwindled down to one small book Ticking loudly, as down the ridge I climb Echoes of the time, casting shadows grey Narrowed down to waning days A world of clocks, unwinding time Uncaring clocks, to hear the sound, can be quite hard Each minute, one by one, ticks-ticks-ticks my life away The face of time, indifferent, without care, never strikes a last ballet But, simply carries on, and will tick on, with no regard

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 12/11/2010 7:49:00 PM
Carrie, you have done a great write with this your first place win, congrats my friend, enjoy. Blessings, Joy (Jew)
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Date: 12/10/2010 5:08:00 PM
yup no other choice live or don't? Nice win here. Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 12/10/2010 12:25:00 PM
Conmgratulations on this well deserved in the contest, Carrie,
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Date: 12/8/2010 11:57:00 AM
Dear Carrie, my congratulations to you on your Ist Place win in Barb's "Time" Contest! This is very worthy of Ist Place and goes to my favs. list! Blessings for today and all during this holy season! Love, audrey
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Date: 12/7/2010 4:54:00 PM
Sometimes a hard fact of life that life goes on and very few people will miss those that go on into eternity..Cogratulations on your win with well deserving work..Sara
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Date: 12/7/2010 1:18:00 PM
congrats to you Carrie on numero uno!
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Date: 12/7/2010 6:20:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Carrie in Barbara Gorelick's "Once Upon A Time" contest. Love,Carol
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Date: 12/6/2010 6:02:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie on your big win with this beautiful poem. Love, Joyce
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Date: 12/5/2010 2:07:00 PM
Congrats Carrie on your first place win in BG's contest on Time with this special and intricate entry ...my friend.. enjoy another top win and victory with luv..
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Date: 12/5/2010 11:27:00 AM
Big congratulations on your first-place victory, Carrie! Well deserved. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 12/5/2010 11:24:00 AM
wonderful piece, congrats on your first place win Carrie
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Date: 12/5/2010 11:13:00 AM
Congrats to you Carrie for another 1st place. I just love this poem..please soup mail me your address for little surprise..BG
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Date: 11/29/2010 8:35:00 PM
Wowie,Carrie. YOu always amaze me. Your rhyming style is effortless and even though you do not do a lot of rhyme, you make it look awesome, not forced at all. Your approach to this topic, style and descriptiveness are all A-1. A big fav for this. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 11/29/2010 8:03:00 AM
That is so true time will continue to move on and is so indifferent to us. A wonderful write. Thanks for all your comments I am feeling good and back into the retail frenzy of Christmas. God Bless Phyl
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Date: 11/28/2010 8:30:00 AM
The "uncaring clocks" tick on as we try to cope with events that make the years significant. It is hard to lose hope as they pass by so quickly, Carrie. You always use the most amazing imagery. Excellent entry for Barbara's contest and I wish you success! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/28/2010 5:15:00 AM
We all feel the time is always fleeting. very nice enjoyable thoughts, Carrie
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Date: 11/28/2010 1:51:00 AM
nice ti be the frist to comment here...yes, time slip by like a whirl... beautiful word behavior with flowing decriptions so nostalgic and sweet.. a sure bet in the contest, carrie... warmes, nette
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