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Thirsty I could tell right away he was up ta sum thin. I could see it in doze beady eyes! His wordz were smooth in a snake like sorta way, my pappy says heze city smooth. He don't look like nobody round here, he wears dat fancy tree pieze suit wit dat gold watch in da pocket. He pulz it out and swings it on its gold chain, I tink he hipnotize folk... Dat first day he come, he come in dat big caddy. Oh she a beauty, cherry red a glistenin in da sun. All dat dare Chrome reflectin back our dirt. Boy dat fella knew how ta make an entrance, he look like sum movie star outa da magazine. Folks round here were impressed, if I tell da truth I don't blame dem. Deeze ain't sophisticated folk, dey are shake yo hand keep yo promise folk. Boy dis fellow like ta shake doze hands, yad tink he was da President! When he smiled da ladies all near passed out, but I tink it were da fellas dat mostly swooned. all intoxicated by iz big wordz, mind ya all da rounz he bought added to da mood. He sayed da railway is a comin, just tirty milze down da road. Wit it, a factory an all kindz a jobz! Now jobz in a place like dis, dat is music ta da earz, prosperity in da land a dirt. Now folks here is poor, mosta demz just got dare farms. Da farmz ain't done good fer near on five years, wit da drought come da thirst Dis fancy fella pour da water in fronta da eyes, oh dat water sure look good! He got land on which ta build, but da people is poor. "No problem" he says "I'll give you mortgages on your farms." "I can start building your new homes right away." Next time he bring da banker, da people line up ta sign da paper. 2 hundrid in all. Now dat a lot, cause dare only 201 farmz. Me and pappy we da only ones dat hold out. Not da we rich, we tirsty too. We just don't like owing folks, so we watch an see. Doze houses go up fast fancy an new Da women folk can hardly wait ta be movin. No more dusty roads, all nice asphalt streets But sum dreamz ain't meant ta be! Therze a big hole were the factory spose ta be and we ain't seen any tracks been laid. Den Da bank start ta want dem mortgage payments. One by one da bank start ta take da farmz. All da good people load wat little dae got in da back of dere trucks and move away... All dats left is me an pappy. The fancy man he come ta see me, offerin me a whole lotta money for dis here land. I had sumtin special planned for him out in da barn. I hung him like da watch hangin from his gold chain! I kept da watch as a souvenir, ya never know when ya might want ta hypnotize sum one Pappy and me, we buried city smooth in his cherry caddy. Strange ting nobody come lookin for him. Mindya da bankers came an offerd a whole lotta money. It seems we were all sittin on black gold. Now pappy and me we made a deal, we wanted all dem dare houses tirty miles yonder. Also dat factory built an dat dare railway right troo da centre a town. Dem nice bankers agreed an da deal was done. I dint shake dare hands, I thought it best ta rely on paper! "In the news today two hundred families move to new homes just thirty miles outside of Rainsville. A multimillionaire formerly from Rainsville has offered the families free homes and a job at his shirt factory. The factory is expected to start operations in three weeks time."

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Date: 7/5/2016 6:51:00 AM
Enjoyed, very cool. Dialect reminded me of a book Shephard of the Hills.
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Date: 6/26/2016 9:17:00 AM
A 10 outta 7... a hoot! GREAAAAAAAT! Loved the dialect! Jake from the east!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/26/2016 11:40:00 AM
Thanks Jack, it was a fun one to write.
Date: 6/16/2016 6:55:00 PM
Im sure this wasnt easy to write,but it definitely gave a brilliant result.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/16/2016 9:44:00 PM
As always, you are generous. Thanks Charmaine.
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 6/16/2016 6:56:00 PM
a fave
Date: 6/16/2016 3:40:00 AM
Congratulations!!!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/16/2016 7:59:00 AM
Thanks Jai.
Date: 6/12/2016 7:38:00 PM
Congratulations on having this great poem featured as POTD! What a story teller you are Richard! #7 ; )
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2016 8:01:00 PM
Thanks Connie, you might also enjoy the story I just posted.
Date: 6/11/2016 11:17:00 PM
You are one talented poet, love the story and the "accent" :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2016 7:41:00 AM
Thanks Arthur, this was a fun one to write.
Date: 6/11/2016 3:08:00 PM
You are a wonderful story teller Richard - many congrats on POTD:-) hugs Jan xx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 6:28:00 PM
Hugs back and a big thanks Jan.
Date: 6/11/2016 2:06:00 PM
Well I am sure glad I didn't miss this one, fantastic story telling!! Wow! ;)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 6:29:00 PM
Thanks Casarah! I'm pleased you like it.
Date: 6/11/2016 1:50:00 PM
Let's see, he's the best looking guy on soup and on Facebook. He's super talented, lives in a mansion only surpassed by his shiny piano! Yep that's Richard who also happens to be an outstanding poet! This poem is a wow wow just like Richard!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 6:30:00 PM
There you go making me blush again. Thanks Judy.
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Judy Konos
Date: 6/11/2016 1:54:00 PM
Whoa! Poem of the day too! Wow again!
Date: 6/11/2016 10:59:00 AM
Well, lookie who's here! ;) If it ain't my fav poet...splashing his way to the top. Congrats, dear. Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 6:31:00 PM
Hi Eileen, it as a nice surprise! Hugs back and thanks for coming back to read it again.
Date: 6/11/2016 9:01:00 AM
- A skilled and wonderful story, Richard - Well deserved today's poem !!! (7) - Congratulations :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 9:12:00 AM
You as well Anne-Lise
Date: 6/11/2016 7:47:00 AM
Great storytelling Richard, got to be Louisiana, loved it. Congratulations on POTD honors...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 7:49:00 AM
What a pleasant surprise! Thanks Charlie.
Date: 6/11/2016 2:53:00 AM
Yep you did it a great story Richard, love it xx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 7:25:00 AM
Thanks Mandy.;0)
Date: 6/10/2016 7:06:00 PM
wow, Richard, a very interesting and well laid out murder story!! I loved this!!! Was it for any contest or just something you felt like doing? I would love to see this made into a movie!!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 7:19:00 PM
Thanks Andrea, it was just something that came out of my head early yesterday morning. Do you have any friends in the movie business *lol*!
Date: 6/10/2016 1:04:00 PM
He sure did hypnotize those folks...Very well done...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 2:37:00 PM
Thanks Joseph.;0)
Date: 6/10/2016 10:16:00 AM
I'm always thirsty for your writes. Fantastic. Don't know how you get into character like that, but it blew me away. Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 2:39:00 PM
Thanks Eileen, it was a fun one to write. Hugs Rick.
Date: 6/10/2016 9:15:00 AM
You are unbeatable in these types of poems, Richard. This one is excellent, both in content and the way it's expressed. A fav it is. Regards // paul
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 9:27:00 AM
Thanks Paul, much appreciated.
Date: 6/10/2016 8:57:00 AM
An excellent entertaining story Richard, love the ending, bout time the poor folk come out on top. Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 9:28:00 AM
I too like happy endings. Thanks and a big hug back to you.;0)
Date: 6/10/2016 7:43:00 AM
Reading your creative and delightful poem dear, Richard, I am ready to start...English classes again. Haha! Entertaining, yet very serious in its essence with multiple messages. Certainly a seven!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 7:52:00 AM
Thanks Demetrios, it was a fun one to write. Some pieces seem to write themselves.
Date: 6/9/2016 10:49:00 PM
There is soooo much truth and simple wisdom in this piece! "Kept da watch as a souvenir"...that rolls me! :-) Very good write Sir!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 12:11:00 AM
Thanks Walter, jus avin a bit ta fun with ma words.
Date: 6/9/2016 4:46:00 PM
You sure you aren't Creole,Acadian...Coon Ass?Great write as always!Justin
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2016 7:47:00 PM
Thanks Justin, just letin my maginatin go where it wants.
Date: 6/9/2016 4:31:00 PM
There are always scammers trying to take advantage. Luckily someone sees through them and they get their just rewards. Hope he was buried deep and glad everyone got what they lost, Gives great food for thought Enjoyed it especially the ending. Big 7 from me Love Mom Mythical towns are such fun
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2016 7:48:00 PM
Thanks for the love and 7. Love back to you mom.

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