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The Solo Dancer - Tanka To Sonnet

Alone atop a hill, an ornamental willow dances in the breeze. Long limbs form a lovely gown that gracefully sweeps the ground. Adored by the sun, the willow is not weeping. She blooms rosily! April’s first shower has passed; for the sun alone, she shines. The Solo Dancing Ornamental Tree (new title for the sonnet version) An ornamental tree with willow leaves upon a promontory stands alone. In April’s breeze, each limb, cascading, weaves with fragrance. She is dancing on her own. I wonder how she came to be at all. Her roots lie in a solitary place where few traverse to spy her - lithe and small - there moving in rain’s aftermath with glee. In small degrees, the sun has climbed the sky. No longer pallid, he is smiling down upon the swaying willow. By and by, Her graceful limbs shine like a lacquer gown. Her lovely blooms have opened to expose The splendid blush of buds with hue light rose.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 5/1/2013 5:57:00 PM
Andrea, Congratulations :-) In Debbie's "Metamorph" contest. always~ PD
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Date: 4/29/2013 6:17:00 AM
Hey, congrats on your win! You made the right choice for this contest. I'm afraid my metamorph was far too lazy...haha
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Date: 4/27/2013 8:20:00 PM
This poem is awesome Andrea! Congratulations on your second place win with this beauty. Hope you share this one with PFT.
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Date: 4/27/2013 5:32:00 AM
Great work that you have penned in this one..Very descriptive coupled with some imagination..Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 4/26/2013 11:26:00 AM
congrats on a great win Andrea...
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Date: 4/26/2013 6:45:00 AM
wow!! excellent write my friend Andrea..hail to a great poet..Congratulations on your win :) can I have it as one of my favorite? thanks LOVE, Maria
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Date: 4/25/2013 11:59:00 PM
Big Congrats on your win. Love and hugs~A.O
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Date: 4/25/2013 6:49:00 PM
I love both forms they are so beautiful :D congrats on your big win Andrea :D wishing you a lovely day :D hug, Yanny
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Date: 4/25/2013 4:12:00 PM
Simply breathtaking thoroughly enjoyed both forms. Congratulations Andrea.
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Date: 4/25/2013 3:32:00 PM
So glad i poked you ;) and you know a sonnet is a fav form of mine! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 4/25/2013 10:08:00 AM
Many congratulations Andy luv , goes without saying love em both well done xx
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Date: 4/25/2013 9:11:00 AM
Beautiful either way !! How could one choose one over the other?? Nice to share this spot with you!!! Congrats to the sonnet queen!!!
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Date: 4/23/2013 4:49:00 PM
Nice job of rearranging this. It sounds beautiful both ways. love phyl
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Date: 4/22/2013 1:56:00 AM
That's a beautiful tanka and the verses have been reconstructed artfully and very ingeniously.. Heya Andrea! Checked out the contests,, so I missed. But hearing from you and to be beckoned so felt wonderful!!! Shall love you and your work always....
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Date: 4/17/2013 12:55:00 PM
Soo beautiful! Check debbie s blog ..there s something 4u : )
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Date: 4/15/2013 8:02:00 PM
very nice metamorph Andrea...winning wishes
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Date: 4/11/2013 3:28:00 PM
yes, I agree with Lucilla - this is awesome
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Date: 4/9/2013 11:43:00 AM
Andrea; this is awesome. You have painted a beautiful picture for us to enjoy. Thanks for sharing..... Lucilla
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Date: 4/8/2013 4:42:00 PM
I love them both, just as all willows are beautiful, A wonderful metamorh. I know how long it takes to make it sound effortless....you are amazing, beautiful girl. Thanks for finding something to like in my poems.... SuZ
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Date: 4/7/2013 11:13:00 AM
excellently done Andrea!Love the both versions of this beautiful poem.Now transform one of your haiku into a Sonnet:)
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Date: 4/7/2013 8:10:00 AM
Andrea whichever way it is written it is not only written very well but it is excellent ...David
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Date: 4/7/2013 3:32:00 AM
The ease and dexterity with which you transformed the Tanka into sonnet is amazing, this is something you alone could do. love it!! Jag
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Date: 4/6/2013 6:57:00 PM
Andrea, my precious and cherished friend!...I am absolutely blown away that you would actually take the time to go back and read my old poems and pick out what my talents are!...You remind me so much of my dad...the most selfless (unselfish) person I ever knew and you come in a very close second...You are a breath of fresh air to this selfish old fool! - Tim
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Date: 4/6/2013 10:15:00 AM
such transformation, but not surprised, when i know whom the poet is..
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Date: 4/6/2013 8:34:00 AM
I like the Tanka best, but they are both picturesque. Love, daver
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