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I stroll along the bank of a meandering river Weeping willow leaves dance as they escape from tree branches See them pirouette as the water gathers momentum They rush past like expert kayakers white water rafting Until they come to rest on jagged algae covered rocks Contest River Line Sponsored by Rick Parise Checked with how many syllables 14 per line 11~17~16

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Mark Paul Van Der Merwe

Date: 11/29/2016 5:41:00 AM

Great write Jan as usual, All the best, Mark

Jan Allison
Date: 11/29/2016 11:47:00 AM

Many thanks Mark great to see you back:-):-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings

Date: 11/28/2016 5:44:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Jan, Lovely description of the weeping willow. Barry.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/28/2016 6:48:00 AM

Thanks Barry:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White

Date: 11/28/2016 1:10:00 AM

Congratulations, Jan :) I love the pirouetting leaves

Jan Allison
Date: 11/28/2016 2:39:00 AM

Thanks Darren I was delighted to place in the contest:-) I can see why you like that line:-) hugs Jan xx

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 11/28/2016 12:58:00 AM

Great. Congratulations. I like the resting of the leaves. Wishes, Kai

Jan Allison
Date: 11/28/2016 2:40:00 AM

Thanks Kai:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 11/27/2016 10:39:00 PM

I wanted the kayakers to win. Good. Congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/28/2016 2:40:00 AM

:-):-) I was delighted Rick liked my poem Janis:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 11/27/2016 10:24:00 PM

Congrats on your fine poem, Jan. :)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/28/2016 2:39:00 AM

Thanks Laura:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/27/2016 6:48:00 PM

Lovely, Jan! Congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/27/2016 6:53:00 PM

Thanks so much Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Tamal Kundu

Date: 11/27/2016 6:45:00 PM

Absolutely beautiful. Congrats on the poem and the placement, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/27/2016 6:53:00 PM

Thanks Tamal:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/27/2016 6:32:00 PM

Great imagery, Jan. Congratulations on your fine placement. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 11/27/2016 6:34:00 PM

Thanks Sandra I'm delighted to place so well:-) hugs jan xx

Janet Grace

Date: 11/24/2016 3:06:00 PM

You certainly tickled my love of nature with this poem. I could almost smell and hear the waiter as you described its travels. Also, willows are my favorite trees. I am new to the site, only 2 poems submitted but I have quite a collection I will be submitting as time goes by.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/24/2016 3:20:00 PM

Thanks Janet:-) I hadn't written a poem since childhood .. then my hubby had cancer surgery and now poetry flows like a tap that I never want to turn off! :-) hugs Jan xx

Dalia Shahein

Date: 11/20/2016 5:35:00 PM

It's surely a winning poem to me but good luck though , great write as always , hugs / / :)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/20/2016 5:43:00 PM

Thanks Dalia:-) hugs jan xx

Vera Duggan

Date: 11/20/2016 4:08:00 AM

Hi Jan, Good luck in the contest for this remarkable piece of work, love it I can just see the flow of the river in my mind, hope you are well, take care.......Vera

Jan Allison
Date: 11/20/2016 6:45:00 AM

Thanks so much Vera. I am on cloud 9 at the moment I performed 2 poems on stage in front of an audience of 600 and we raised over £6000 on the night for Parkinson's Disease and Alzheimers:-) It was the most incredible experience of my life:-) hugs jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 11/19/2016 4:44:00 PM

I can plainly see why you called the leaves kayaks. The imagery is so real and lovely, Jan. A sure winner.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/19/2016 5:13:00 PM

Thanks Janis - I enjoyed writing the poem and the imagery of the leaves as 'kayak's really appealed to me:-) hugs jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 11/19/2016 9:29:00 AM

I actually walked along this river while reading your poem. I could see the slimy willow leaves attaching themselves to the jagged rock. I wanted to bend down and pick up a willow leaf but the rot caused a horrid smell. Your poem is authentic enough to involve the imagination in reality!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/19/2016 2:38:00 PM

Thanks so so much Judy I am so pleased you liked the image I portrayed:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/18/2016 12:35:00 PM

- A beautiful pirouette, Jan ... one autumn dance in river :) - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/19/2016 2:39:00 PM

Thanks so much Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White

Date: 11/18/2016 11:19:00 AM

Lovely... The image of the leaves on the water is great! Good luck.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/18/2016 12:09:00 PM

Awd thanks I've got my legs crossed lol:-) hugs Jan xxx

Darren White
Date: 11/18/2016 11:20:00 AM

(good luck tonight, keeping fingers and toes crossed)

Lim'Rik Flats

Date: 11/18/2016 8:04:00 AM

Jan, I know tonight is your stage debut — just wanted to send extra huggapoos for all you doos! ps. wich I could be a mouse in the corner when you rock the house!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/18/2016 12:11:00 PM

The rehearsal went like a dream. I am so excited:-) hugs Jan xxx

Paloma P

Date: 11/18/2016 6:34:00 AM

Lovely imagery Jan, from the pirouetting to the kayak maneuvers. Good luck.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/18/2016 12:12:00 PM

Thanks Paloma I enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 11/18/2016 5:31:00 AM

What a delightful and peaceful imagery dear, Jan! A seven and good luck. Hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/18/2016 12:13:00 PM

Thanks Demetrios:-) hugs Jan xx

Supraja Kannan

Date: 11/17/2016 9:04:00 PM

Lovely imagery... Great write... Good luck with the contest... A 7...

Jan Allison
Date: 11/18/2016 2:11:00 AM

Thanks Supraja:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/17/2016 6:49:00 PM

Jan, you did really well with this one. I think you have a chance with him writing with this kind of description. I Hope I can come up with something unique. I am doing miserably with some of this week's judges.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/18/2016 2:14:00 AM

Thanks Andrea:-) I write and hope but my list of N/A grows daily ... people only see when we win not all the other contests we enter and our poems disappear into the ether lol:-) hugs Jan xx