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The Raven Part of Me

----- ………………….. Treading on broken glass intoxicated and splintered By exciting dangers as call of the wild littered; My mind seduced by sly games uncontrolled Feeding insatiable urges more than life could behold, Until I collapsed, succumbing to black heat Charred , burned from slits of fevered beat. Then , a glint of light where reborn eyes pranced Are where hopes begged for a winged chance, My spine bent to a shape deeply shaded white As if to say, damn! Put your act together and do it right; While from afar, *Angels descending, bring from above, Chiming blurred *echoes of mercy, whispers of love* And in that moment, the raven part of me led to slaughter Tipping my choices to bathe on cleansed waters © …….. .. . . . .. . To Hell and Back for PD's Contest By: nette onclaud

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 8/9/2012 11:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "To Hell And Back" contest Nette. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/5/2012 1:28:00 PM
Nette, congrats on your win, just excellent...David
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Date: 8/5/2012 8:34:00 AM
Congrats on your wonderful win Nette
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Date: 8/4/2012 8:37:00 PM
NETTE :-) , this has been my favorite contest out of all the ones I have sponsored this year.. Congratulations and thank you for the double journey... good night... XOX~ PD
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Date: 2/21/2012 6:04:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in ~Tracie's~ "Fallen Angel" contest Nette. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/19/2012 3:08:00 PM
congratulations!
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Date: 2/19/2012 12:58:00 PM
Congrats on your awesome win! Love the last two lines...a perfect conclusion. Blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 2/19/2012 11:48:00 AM
Congrats Nette on your another Top win.Loved it first time around.
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Date: 2/19/2012 11:11:00 AM
Wonderful set of Couplets. Excellent job, as usual. Congrats for placing on Tracie's winners list....................S.Ronthorpe
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Date: 2/19/2012 7:58:00 AM
Congrats Nette!!!
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Date: 2/19/2012 7:15:00 AM
congrats Nette luv on an amazing win for these vibrant words on fallen Angels luv.. think u know I collect the, and have over 3000 at home in NJ..here I view one rare beauty playing a golden harp .. as lovely as this write luv..
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Date: 2/19/2012 7:15:00 AM
soup mail in a few ..
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Date: 2/19/2012 6:06:00 AM
Congratulations a smashing write a deserving win xx
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Date: 2/15/2012 5:40:00 PM
Excellent Nette. This speaks of the naive being seduced but once this person sees the darkness and recognizes it for what it is she/he turns from it walks toward the light. Super job. God Bless, JB
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Date: 2/15/2012 9:44:00 AM
This is very poetic, Nette. And the ending? Marvelous :) Huggss back at you and big winning wishes.
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Date: 2/14/2012 8:33:00 AM
Fantastic poem and good luck in the contest. Happy Valentine's day. Nice that you received some roses. Lucky lady. Have an awesome day love phyl
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Date: 2/13/2012 8:42:00 PM
Last two lines concluded well, a fantastic poem read like a winner. Best wishes to you for the contest, loved always, bl
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Date: 2/13/2012 8:20:00 AM
I love how you ended this: to bathe on cleansed waters. REdemption for the angel!! Sure to do well in the contest. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 2/12/2012 5:27:00 PM
A grim tale of a beautiful redemption, well done, a fine yarn full of rich metaphors and vivid imagery. I love the vocabulary, just love it, great job Miss Nette! Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 2/12/2012 4:22:00 PM
like the flow its excellent, tells a story twisted bent, very good my sweet dark nette, good 4 contest is my bet, raven-nette.....:)
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Date: 2/12/2012 3:40:00 PM
just beautifully written Nette! Best of luck to you although you don't need luck with this gem...love,Deb
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Date: 2/12/2012 12:44:00 PM
Reads like a winner..Very creative use of the idea presented for you to use for your work..Amazing the different ideas that have come forward..Your presence at my work was uplifting..Sara
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Date: 2/12/2012 11:28:00 AM
Wow, what a gorgeous write my friend! This poem brings out completely the fallen angel! "...to bathe on cleansed waters" is a solid foundation to work on! I loved your write a lot this afternoon!! Incredible Work!!
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Date: 2/12/2012 9:14:00 AM
a superb creation Nette luv.. have been there myself and felt like a fallen angel at times with this scenario u so perfectly rhymed and timed with grace.. good luck in contest.. glad I added another verse ..went back to checkj rules and saw I could luv.. thankxxx..
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Date: 2/12/2012 8:36:00 AM
Hey it is 9 PM here...tomorrow Math....studying.......
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