The Pregnant Woman

(A modern freestyle haiku). Languishing in reasonable pains Nine months labor. ...................................... In the outside cherishing the inside An asset in her womb. ...................................... They intermingled human offspring sprung their cardboard copy. ..................................... Womb load don't lean on fear you will drop freely. By: Charles Melody (Lightning Ink).

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Phyllis Babcock

Date: 2/28/2011 4:38:00 PM

Charles this is lovely. What better gift in life than new birth. I guess we are all sort of carbon copies when we are born. Never thought about it that way. Hope all is well with you. love mom

Susan Palli

Date: 2/22/2011 9:15:00 AM

great ones! Thanks for the comment. I've been too busy with my volunteer work. Hope to be back soon. take care Susan

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 2/21/2011 6:39:00 PM

Interesting take on pregnancy....I have been in and out of the soup lately...mostly busy with helping my son with school and just being lazy about writing. Will try to be better about commenting.

Earle Brown

Date: 2/21/2011 8:07:00 AM

make me laugh

Daver Austin

Date: 2/19/2011 10:28:00 AM

Yes. The total speaks very clearly of being human. I love this sort of Haiku, and, hello Charles. Love, daver

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 2/18/2011 4:33:00 PM

Well this is exactly the process Charles and having had five sons and three lost pregnancies I can vouch for your words my friend.. delicately but emphatically stated luv..

The Situation

Date: 2/18/2011 4:09:00 PM

drop freely?obviously you've never had a baby. i will look into nigeria. my cousin is an ambasitor in some country that they say is crime free. i hope to one day visit. i dont know about nigeria though. i hear it's not compleatly crime free. T.S.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/18/2011 11:08:00 AM

Hey, this is a most interesting series. I hope you do well in the contest, Charles!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/18/2011 8:38:00 AM

Great one..I especially like the next to last..Those children amazing how different traits from each parent and generations back become apparent..Enjoyed reading today..Thanks for the comments on my work.. A little instruction never hurt anyone..Sara

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/18/2011 8:07:00 AM

a life stage that grows with warmth.. lovely work, charles!! winning wishes if for a contest..:) huggs, nette

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/18/2011 8:03:00 AM

There is a special bond a woman feels with her unborn child and you have described it so well, son. You made your "mum" proud. Beautiful haiku! Love, Carolyn