The Poets I Hope To Meet In Heaven

I pray that in my Eternity, I'll meet Shelley, Poe and Emily That we'll all sit down at a table round, And at length discuss our Poetry! And Longfellow, lest we forget Lord Byron, Shakespeare, and beloved Keats! If I prove their favorite Poet, I could accomplish no greater feat! For all my many silly musings, This one I covet above the rest For my Soul's toil- finally proving That the Masters love me best! *My rhymes are rather choppy and will need revising a some point, but I wrote It just now on a whim ;) Also, I am open to new title suggestions; I struggled to conjure a fitting one *** Here is an alternate version suggested to me by Delysia Hendricks. This sweet soul reworked my poem and I am posting it so the two can be juxtaposed. Please feel free to comment and say which one you prefer and why. Be as candid as you want; constructive criticism is ALWAYS welcomed and appreciated. Thanks, and a BIG thank you to Delysia for her revision! Here is her rendition: I pray in all Eternity masters Poe and Emily Longfellow, Shakespeare and Shelley would seek me out to hear me spout not theirs but my own poetry The humble Keats would kiss my feet his favorite poet of them all they'd all but swoon and bow and croon midst the mightiest I'll stand tall *Let us know what you think, PLEASE! Pretty, pretty please with sugar on top? lol ;)

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Cole Banner

Date: 10/30/2013 7:43:00 AM

I liked the first version. It seemed to work better for me...

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/30/2013 8:06:00 AM

Thanks, Cole; that was my version :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/10/2013 10:50:00 PM

LOVE It.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/11/2013 7:34:00 AM

Thanks, hon! :)

Karen Anglesey

Date: 9/28/2013 3:34:00 AM

I accept the challenge. I think Delysia's revision is very good. I see some bumps but overall both versions have good qualities. This one may take some time to get the flow a little more precise without taking out some of the names. Great content !

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/28/2013 9:35:00 AM

This is one of those pieces that's going to take me a while to iron out. I'm going to come back to it when I have fresher eyes and have had time to ruminate over it. Thanks for your feedback, Karen; you know it's always appreciated! <3

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 9/26/2013 4:17:00 AM

The rhyme scheme is not choppy at all my beloved poet. But if you feel the need to change some wordings go right ahead but I thought it was well conceived and left as is.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/26/2013 7:25:00 AM

Thanks, Mustapha. It just doesn't flow as effortlessly as I would like; it needs some ironing, though I haven't the faintest idea right now of how to achieve it. I welcome any suggestions :)

Vinayak Pratap

Date: 9/25/2013 9:47:00 PM

Quite a interesting thought u had there not bad at all shows ur devotion for the greats not at egocentric my suggestion would be Heavenly Poets ~V~

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/26/2013 7:22:00 AM

Thanks for taking time for reviewing. Sorry for being cross last night; I was feeling a bit ill-tempered. Your vernacular is your own, so who am I to question it? Anyway, thank you for your feedback! :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/24/2013 6:20:00 PM

I would love to sit around that table!...I liked the rhyme scheme in this poem, and the flow of the words. Nicely done! As far as a title, I was going to say "Heaven For A Poet", but that is one of mine! I wouldn't mind if you borrowed it though! Great work!...Thank you so much for the encouraging comments!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/25/2013 8:43:00 AM

I would personally invite you to that little gathering, Kelly :) I'm still struggling for a better title, though. Usually titles come to me fairly easily, but not this time. Glad you liked the rhyming, but I think it's much too choppy, irregular and jarring; it needs some doctoring for sure lol. Thanks for reading and replying, sister! :)