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I staggered along the road praying you would come to rescue me Dried blood surrounded the wound in my skull and a silver machete was lodged deep in my shoulder. I’d tried ringing your mobile but it rang and rang I fell to the floor and began crawling along the sidewalk Passers-by ignored me, no one would stop to help Some even crossed the road so our paths wouldn’t meet A dark blue car pulled up beside me Someone was calling my name Dad.... dad is that you I cried ... you had managed to track me down You leapt out of the car and helped me to my feet Handed me fresh pair of shoes to replace my broken high heels.... Now I could rejoin my friends at the Halloween fancy dress party! Contest the hunt Sponsored by Casarah Nance 10~28~16

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Date: 11/18/2016 4:16:00 AM
Congrats x this led me down the garden path x I thought it was true x I'm glad it had a better ending x
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Date: 11/17/2016 11:45:00 PM
love the atmosphere of suspense, jan... enjoyed experiencing this other side of you!...big cheers on your win with hugggs
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Date: 11/18/2016 2:25:00 AM
Thanks Nette I do surprise people with more serious poems:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 11/17/2016 5:57:00 PM
love the poem, love the twist, congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
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Date: 11/17/2016 6:06:00 PM
Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 11/17/2016 4:52:00 PM
What a twist! well done!
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Date: 11/17/2016 5:02:00 PM
Many thanks Cas thanks for a great contest theme:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/31/2016 9:30:00 AM
Ha ha... I like this one with the twist, Jan:) splendid work:)
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Date: 10/31/2016 12:43:00 PM
Thanks Jo I'm not sure if Cas will like it ... I do hope so :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/30/2016 5:24:00 PM
Love your twist, Jan :)
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Date: 10/30/2016 12:16:00 PM
great twist lol dads are the best lol
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Date: 10/30/2016 1:49:00 PM
They are Stephen:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/30/2016 11:47:00 AM
haha...good twist Jan
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Date: 10/30/2016 1:48:00 PM
I hope Cas likes it Tim:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/30/2016 3:45:00 AM
Of course, Jan, the most important thing at that tragic moment was a pair of high heel shoes and not the fractured scull and the bleedin! Haha! A good one my dearest. A seven!
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Date: 10/30/2016 4:24:00 AM
Thanks Demetrios it has a happy ending that is the main thing:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/30/2016 3:10:00 AM
GOOD ONE! I'm glad it wasn't really all that morbid after all. Yikes! Hugs, dear.
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Date: 10/30/2016 4:23:00 AM
Thanks Eileen I do like to have a twist in the end of some of my poems:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/29/2016 11:28:00 PM
Lol...I nearly believed the tragedy till the surprising ending popped out..Excellent one Jan...: )
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Date: 10/30/2016 1:52:00 AM
I told you I never know what will come into my head next Charma lol. I had the ending in mind and worked around that but I do surprise myself from time to time :-) hugs to all the family:-) Jan xx
Date: 10/29/2016 10:41:00 PM
You had me there! Great write!
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Date: 10/30/2016 1:55:00 AM
I'm twisted Arthur lol:-) I hope it appeals to Cas:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/29/2016 8:47:00 PM
Captivating. Much intrigued. Surprise ending. 7 Lots of luck in contest. Peace, Love and Joy.
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Date: 10/30/2016 2:45:00 AM
Thanks John I worry about my muse I never know what she will come up with next lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/29/2016 8:18:00 PM
Very descriptive story you tell here.
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Date: 10/30/2016 2:46:00 AM
Thanks Robert I do appreciate you dropping by to comment:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/29/2016 7:33:00 PM
Hi Jan, This appeared to be gruesome and then Bam! The twist at the end was totally unexpected. Great job. :-) Alexis
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Date: 10/30/2016 2:47:00 AM
I'm twisted Alexis lol I do hope cas likes it:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/29/2016 5:02:00 PM
You had me :) Good twist lol. I always enjoy reading your poems.
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Date: 10/29/2016 5:13:00 PM
Thanks carol:-) I do like to have a twist in the end of some:-) hugs Jan xx

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