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The Five Word Poem

My five words are: Pain, Enough, Nine, Remember, Beautiful I remember my past, Bits and pieces floating through my mind. I remember the pain, Of being alone, I remember the pain, The beautiful, heart wrenching pain Of a broken heart, At the tender age of nine, I lost what I believed was mine. I guess I just wasn’t wise enough, To see past your toxic lies. for the "five word challenge" contest 06/03/16

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/3/2016 6:24:00 AM

I really like this and how you used the five words. i had no idea this contest even existed. i was checking the contest just last night. I better go see again!!

Winged Warrior

Date: 7/24/2016 2:56:00 PM

Superbly done my friend...the pain of being alone is like breathing air that doesn't want you there...I understand... god bless...^WW^

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/19/2016 4:57:00 AM

Masterfully done dear, Angie! Keep it up!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/5/2016 10:58:00 AM

gosh, so much pain you had at that young age. (unless you invented the part about your age since you had to use the word nine in your poem!) This seems like a very heartfelt poem, Angie. I enjoyed seeing it this morning. (I call my daughter Angela by your name. Love that name)

Angie Thomas
Date: 6/5/2016 11:09:00 AM

Hahaha yes Andrea... The age was fictional, but the emotions were quite real.. Thank you for the read :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/5/2016 10:56:00 AM

hey, thanks for that very sweet comment to my summer solstice poem. Now let me see yours before i do off here this morning.

Angie Thomas
Date: 6/5/2016 11:10:00 AM

The pleasure of reading your poem was all mine Andrea :)

Paul Callus

Date: 6/3/2016 12:13:00 PM

You have tackled this challenge superbly, Angie! Five words and eleven lines combine to produce a an excellent poem worthy of this challenge. The content takes me to the pain of a disillusioned girl, perhaps let down by an unreliable father. // paul

Angie Thomas
Date: 6/4/2016 1:51:00 AM

Thank you Paul :) yes that is a very accurate interpretation :D hugs, Angie

Casarah Nance

Date: 6/3/2016 11:24:00 AM

nine is such a young age to feel a pain like that :( You completed the challenge very well Angie

Angie Thomas
Date: 6/4/2016 1:50:00 AM

Thank you Casarah :) This was one of the poems that was way out of my comfort zone and I'm glad to receive positive feedback :) hugs

Jan Allison

Date: 6/3/2016 11:05:00 AM

Oh Angie you have woven these 5 words into a sad poem full of heartache and pain - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Angie Thomas
Date: 6/3/2016 11:08:00 AM

Thank you Jan... <3