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The Fault Line Premiere Contest Winner

You are my purple dream I am your yellow window In between yet a fault line Taking toll yours and mine Both indeed feel sorry I am the enigmatic dusk You are my emerging dawn In between still a night Taking toll from both me and you Both suffer from dearth of dew I am your Darjeeling tea You are my cut glass bowl In between yet a fault line Taking toll from our river Our feasible flowers get fewer We walk and share our sparrows Green grass smiles in the meadow There too falls the night-like shadow We do want to shoo it away too But the fault line is a difficult fence The malt-robber fault line Disappointment dwelling in the spine _____________________________________________ 26/11/2016

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Date: 1/13/2017 10:34:00 AM
By far, the best I have read. Wow! Very impressive. I am going to write this in my diary and I will read it everyday. Very inspiring. And, congratulation for the win, you deserved it.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 1/13/2017 8:21:00 PM
THANK YOU, Aarushi ... Can u let me know what sort of poem you like and why ... I want to understand readers' pulse about poetry ... probir ...
Date: 12/11/2016 8:54:00 AM
Congratulations....great figures of speech...
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/11/2016 11:40:00 AM
Yes, figures I love very much ... Thank you ...
Date: 12/10/2016 6:30:00 AM
Wow congrats great poem x
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/10/2016 7:16:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 12/9/2016 9:37:00 PM
Congratulations, Probir. Very interesting poem.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/10/2016 7:17:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 12/9/2016 8:00:00 PM
I am back to congratulate you on a 1st place win :) Hugs Eve
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/9/2016 8:03:00 PM
Sorry ... My reply to Janis has got posted here ... Thank you, Eve for your kind support ...
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/9/2016 8:01:00 PM
Right, Janis ... Thank you so much ... Warm regards and love ...
Date: 12/9/2016 4:23:00 PM
I said your poem looked like a winner but you must be very proud, a trophy win. My warmest congratulations to you. Blessings, Janis.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/9/2016 8:08:00 PM
My first and spontaneous response to your happy greetings has unfortunately got inserted in Eve's box above ... I feel bad ... Thank you for your friendly feelings ... My warm regards and love ... probir ...
Date: 12/9/2016 3:44:00 PM
Congrats! Colorful write JE
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/9/2016 8:13:00 PM
Thank you ...
Date: 12/9/2016 12:45:00 PM
Such essence and human truth - beautiful, Probir!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/9/2016 8:16:00 PM
Thank you, Doug ...
Date: 12/9/2016 12:38:00 PM
Congratulations! Like the repetition of "in between" in the middle of the stanzas! :-)
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/9/2016 8:17:00 PM
Thank you ... You have poetically discerned the accentuated line ...
Date: 12/9/2016 12:37:00 PM
Great win with a fantastic poem!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/9/2016 8:20:00 PM
Thank you, Rick ... Your support helps me a lot ...
Date: 12/9/2016 12:27:00 PM
Congratulations for your poem win! :)
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/9/2016 8:21:00 PM
Thank you ...
Date: 12/9/2016 12:12:00 PM
Congrats Probir to win top place.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/9/2016 8:28:00 PM
Thank you, Anisha ...
Date: 12/9/2016 10:43:00 AM
Such an emotional, beautifully-worded poem! Probir, congratulations on your well-deserved top win! Janice
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/9/2016 8:29:00 PM
Thank you, Janice ...
Date: 12/9/2016 10:28:00 AM
Oh, Probir, such a magnificent poem. You have imaged the 'fault line' in such a sadly emotional and powerful way. Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place Trophy win! Sandra
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Date: 12/9/2016 8:30:00 PM
Thank you, Sandra ...
Date: 12/4/2016 6:52:00 PM
I love this Probir. Looks like a winner to me.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/4/2016 9:07:00 PM
Thank you ...
Date: 11/29/2016 5:14:00 AM
I love this. These lines especially: I am the enigmatic dusk // You are my emerging dawn // ... Good luck in the contest.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/29/2016 5:20:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 11/27/2016 11:38:00 AM
A poetically lovely and clever take on this contest theme, Probir. Well done! // paul
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/27/2016 11:45:00 AM
Thank you, Paul ... Regards ...
Date: 11/27/2016 7:43:00 AM
Well depicted fault line.....gl
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/27/2016 11:45:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 11/26/2016 3:11:00 PM
well done on all points, probir... huggs
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/26/2016 7:51:00 PM
Thank you, nette ...
Date: 11/26/2016 12:34:00 PM
Very nice Probir
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Date: 11/26/2016 7:52:00 PM
Thank you, Tim
Date: 11/26/2016 11:43:00 AM
I love the divided on the first stanza of love, Probir, a unit of verses devine .
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Date: 11/26/2016 7:52:00 PM
Thank you, Eve ...
Date: 11/26/2016 8:08:00 AM
Although there are many faults none is there in your poem to be found my friend, Probir! Good luck my friend!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/26/2016 9:42:00 AM
Thank you ... Those faults have gone into the shadows of your love ...

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