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Author's Notes: I realize it's not Halloween yet, but I had to go ahead and do a dark theme for the new year!! This poem is a dark little Rhyme write I put together under the title: "The Enchantress with the Greenest of Eyes." This is a slight departure from some of the love poetry and other more positive themes I've written and presented over the last few of months. This poem focuses on an evil enchantress whose goal and purpose are the eternal damnation of men's souls, in this case, referring to any of the men who have been unfortunate enough to become acquainted with her. Getting to know this Enchantress is not a good idea -- especially if you're a man. And so at least the female Poetry Soup readers and colleagues should get a chuckle out of this one, that is, if you have an interest in Dark Themes. (Disclaimer: This poem is not about anyone I know. It's strictly fictional and fantasy.) (Gary Bateman, January 20, 2015) (Rhyme)

Categories: allegory, dark, evil, fantasy, fear, horror, and magic.

The Enchantress with the Greenest of Eyes This lady is quite lovely and most fascinating with the greenest of eyes, And she’ll easily captivate and bewitch all men she meets with no surprise. This lady has the reddest of hair, long and full, with such a lustrous sheen, And with her soft skin and a nubile appearance she looks just like a queen. This lady’s grace of movement and mellifluous voice are most charming, Which makes her all the more enthralling to men and at once most disarming. Now one can see why this Enchantress with her comely visage of pulchritude, Can make easy work of the men she meets and mesmerizes with such certitude. This reflects that some people in life are not what they always appear to be, And this Enchantress wears such a mask hiding her true self—for no one to see. Since this is the reality for men who fall for this lady while making their pitch; It will be obvious to many of them over time that this Enchantress is a Witch! For men who succumb to the spell of this Enchantress, it’s time to pay the Piper, And so they will now meet the real person behind her mask who is Satan’s Viper! With powers of sorcery and debauchery supreme this Enchantress sets her goals, Which is to sow fear in her victims—bringing eternal damnation to their souls! For men who might meet this Enchantress, don’t look deeply into her green eyes! This deep look will lock your soul under her evil power and bring on your demise! Gary Bateman, Copyright © All Rights Reserved, January 20, 2015 (Rhyme)

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Sharon Gulley

Date: 2/15/2015 5:42:00 PM

Another awesome write Gary. Happy Valentines Day to You & Yours. I enjoyed this a lot and I like Halloween poetry any time of year. As always you have delighted me with this write....Sharon G. A 7 from me.

Sharon Gulley
Date: 7/13/2015 4:45:00 PM

Thank you so much Gary for the return comment. Always so nice to hear from You both. I thank you for being interested in buying my book but I must say that I only done paper back and e-book with this one. I am so thankful though that you would buy one. It should be out by the third week of July if all goes well, had some things to fix. Always my best to you both....Sharon

Gary Bateman
Date: 7/13/2015 4:05:00 PM

Hello Sharon, I just noticed now here on July 13th that I missed responding to you most wonderful comment above!! Thanks!! and I really appreciate the "7" rating too!! This particular poem ended up in my first book. I can't wait to see your new book when it's finished!! And I will most happily buy a copy immediately!! Maybe I will buy both a hardbound copy and a paperback copy!! Best Wishes Always, Gary

Robert Lindley

Date: 1/25/2015 9:10:00 PM

Brilliant write. I have met that enchantress and barely escaped with my life! She that brought me woe, became my mortal foe A viper that ate my soul, and all that wrapped in her woe Escaping I paid the price, beware that beauty that does so entice! A7 on your gem my friend!! Bravoooooo!!!

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/26/2015 4:07:00 PM

Robert My Good Friend!! Thanks so much for the read and your always gracious comments. I too had known one of these "enchantress" types many years ago. Not someone to be around or married with!! I am thrilled that you liked this write. I have several other poems now (4-5) that I'm simultaneously working on. Thanks for the "7" -- and best wishes to your wife and family. Best Always, Gary

Val Brooklyn Rogers Blk Panther

Date: 1/23/2015 2:05:00 PM

Hello Gary. What can I say that hasn't already been said. That's plenty of talent in that pen. Good story. Too!

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/23/2015 2:53:00 PM

Hello Val, That's a very nice compliment indeed. Thank You!! I will drop by your way to check out your poetry. Feel free anytime to read any of my poems that interest you. (I'll try to do the same too as time permits.) Best Weekend Wishes!! Gary

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/23/2015 2:42:00 PM

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 1/23/2015 12:44:00 AM

Wow! Wow! My dearest friend Gary, this is an awesome masterpiece that you've penned and delivered us here. So powerful! A real scary story treat for me eyes only to read many months before Halloween. You even made her look like Medusa with the eyes thing in Don't look deeply into her green eyes or you'll be dust., or some like that. I like your story and you made me happy you wrote it, my dearest friend.If she was for real for sure we all better keep away from her being so evil and cruel and getting pleasure in hurting people, destroying, bringing confusion with all her evil, selfish behavior and rantings. So sad when this takes place in real life and people really get hurt and even destroyed, but that can happen only if you let her.As for me I am not really afraid of women like that, but think of others welfare and safety..A very solid 7 +++ from me! Your pen for sure is mighty golden, Gary! Thanks for writing this story! Have a very lovely day! :) Love and hugs!XXXOXXOX D. ^O^"

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/23/2015 3:02:00 PM

Hello My Dear "D" -- What can I say except: mit diesem wunderbar Kommentar, du hast mich wirklich ganz umgehauen!! (Translated from the German, it means you have really totally overwhelmed me (or bowled me over) with your commentary (or comments)). Thanks so much for your detailed pen of praise and observation!! I'm glad you liked this one. Many more like this to come. My wife actually did not like this poem, as she's gotten used to my more romantic writes of late. Probably like you, I can actually write on just about any topic which is what I normally prefer to do anyway. Have a nice weekend (Schoenes Wochenende!!) Gary, XOXOXO!!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/21/2015 2:20:00 PM

- Gary, this poem has really all categories: allegory, dark, evil, fantasy, fear, horror, and magic !!! - Very proficient written !! - // Anne-Lise :)

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/21/2015 4:48:00 PM

Hello Anne-Lise!! Thanks for your read here. I'm pleased you liked it (but this one is "not" a romance poem -- of course.) I always like to do a dark theme or two ever so often. Best Wishes Always, Gary

Emile Pinet

Date: 1/21/2015 2:11:00 PM

Anyone that can rhyme "pulchritude" is a word smith of note indeed. Your poem is well written with powerful imagery, that liberates its presents from the page and enters our minds with ease of skill. Emile. #7

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/21/2015 4:55:00 PM

Hi Emile, Thanks for your read and most gracious comments!! BTW, when I first used "pulchritude" in my draft, I got really lucky since and all of sudden "certitude" just happened to pop into mind at almost the same time. I'm pleased your enjoyed this one, and thanks so much for the "7." Best!! Gary

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 1/21/2015 6:54:00 AM

Though her green eyes "will lock your soul under her evil power and bring on your demise" I could not help loving this enchantress. I have succumbed to her spell literally. I cannot blame you for that . You posted a warning "Getting to know this Enchantress is not a good idea -- especially if you're a man. But what can I do? You write so brilliant. And this "getting to know" is so interesting. Love Gary for this piece. Love and regards to you and Ingrid.Your friend Rajat

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/21/2015 5:04:00 PM

Rajat My Dear Friend!! Thanks so much for your most gracious comments here!! I very pleased you like this particular poem. (You've got to watch out from now on just in case you should ever run into this Enchantress with her deep green eyes!!) Best Regards Rajat to you and your family from Ingrid and me!! Gary

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 1/21/2015 5:53:00 AM

Mein freund Gary, we have not visited each other for sometime now! Well, I come first to congratulate you for this writing of truly literal merit! It reminds me of the Gorgons of the Greek mythology who when they stared men into their eyes they turned them into stones! Incomparably beautiful and for that a seven is due!

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/22/2015 4:26:00 PM

Precisely Herr Professor -- I believe you did indeed catch the comparative linkage to the famous Gorgons of Greek Mythology. Glad you enjoyed this poem and thanks for the "7"!!! Next week Demetrios will be my last full week posting anything on Poetry Soup for one month. During February I will be standing down to finalize my all the work on my first book of poetry, and I must have everything to my publisher in London, UK by the end of February. After that, I'll be back online and posting many new poems. Talk to you soon!! Best!! Gary

Tim Smith

Date: 1/20/2015 11:53:00 PM

Wow wow wow....love this awesome write my friend...cheers Tim

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/22/2015 4:30:00 PM

Thanks so much Tim!! Glad you liked this write. I always enjoy your poetry too very much. Best Wishes to you and your family, Gary

Jan Allison

Date: 1/20/2015 4:56:00 PM

Should I be worried Gary - I have green eyes and auburn hair!!!!! (out of a bottle I hasten to add lol) Love the rhyme and the deep dark side of the poem - a 7 from me :-) Hugs Jan xx

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/22/2015 4:38:00 PM

No Worries Jan -- unless they are DARK GREEN EYES!! HAHA!! I think you have Dave "Lyric Man" running scared. (See his response above!!) Thanks, as always, for your read and for the "7" rating. Glad you liked this dark poem -- green eyes and all!! Best Always, Gary

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 1/20/2015 3:55:00 PM

well the leprechaun his green eyes almost popped out excellent pen gary love gow you drew this piece

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/21/2015 4:41:00 PM

Thanks Liam Mate!! I would venture to say that our little Leprechaun friend would be quite afraid of this particular Enchantress!! Glad you liked this one. Best Mate, Gary

M. L. Kiser

Date: 1/20/2015 3:16:00 PM

That's quite a vibrant word-painting; bold and bright with a dark side.

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/20/2015 3:26:00 PM

Hello ML!! (It looks like my response to Connie Marcum Wong got merged twice after my comment.) Anyway, thanks for your note here and comment. I felt compelled to do an early-year dark theme write. I've been on the romance bandwagon for a while with my love poems. Time to switch themes a bit. Best Always, Gary

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/20/2015 3:20:00 PM

Hello Connie, Thanks so much for your read here and for you most interesting note. And so your mother had "green eyes" huh?? Sounds like she had quite personality too!! I glad you enjoyed this little rhymed write. My wife, Ingrid, normally reads all of my poems. So knows I write dark themes sometimes, but she didn't like this one because she got used to my romantic writes. But at the end of the day, it's all poetry and varied creativity anyway!! Best Always to you . . . and it's very cold now here in Germany!! Gary

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/20/2015 2:44:00 PM

I could visualize some amazing imagery while reading this intriguing piece Gary. My mother had green eyes and red hair, makes me think of her. She had the witch thing going once in a while too. Haha. I enjoyed this!

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/20/2015 3:22:00 PM