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Smile I Feign

Cork of my life, sheer pain in vain, Rode with me upon a fast train; Not far could I go, though I tried For it blocked my path, hurt my pride; Yet, tricking my brain, smile I feign. November 29, 2019 Five word challenge poetry contest Sponsor: Beth Evans 8 syllables per line (howmanysyllables.com)

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 11/6/2020 6:35:00 PM

Pretending to smile. Perfect poem, Vijay. Have a great weekend :)

Ann Foster

Date: 12/23/2019 8:03:00 PM

This was great fun to read... hope you win. Lots of word play. Merry Christmas and God Bless your New Year... Ann

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 12/4/2019 12:00:00 PM

cork of my life perfectly opens this beautifully excellent pen vijay i pray you have a blessed week

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/4/2019 2:48:00 PM

Thank you Liam--much appreciate.

Paul Callus

Date: 12/3/2019 2:02:00 PM

You have admirably risen to the challenge, Vijay. This was no easy task; I struggled to write mine! Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/3/2019 2:10:00 PM

Much appreciate Paul--many thanks.

Jenish Somadas

Date: 12/3/2019 6:38:00 AM

Beautifully penned.. Nice entry for the contest.. Best wishes..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/3/2019 7:11:00 AM

Much appreciate Jenish--many thanks.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/2/2019 5:51:00 PM

Nicely done, Vijay. It's so difficult to fit the five words into just five lines!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/3/2019 7:10:00 AM

So true--much appreciate Andrea--many many thanks.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 12/2/2019 1:59:00 PM

- One smile rarely comes alone ... a touching and wonderful poem, Vijay :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:48:00 PM

So very kind of you Anne-Lise--much appreciate--many thanks.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 12/1/2019 11:15:00 PM

It can be difficult to smile- through the pain. You have expressed this so well, in only a few words. As you know, I like lingering in less. It is soooo much more. Sometimes. Good luck in the contest Vijay. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:48:00 PM

Yes--less can be more in able pen like your's--much appreciate Brandy--many thanks.

Hello There

Date: 12/1/2019 9:39:00 PM

Everybody plays the fool... sometimes. Really cool take on this challenge, Vijay :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:46:00 PM

So true my friend--much appreciate your visit and comments--many thanks, HT.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/1/2019 8:01:00 PM

Very thought-provoking poem, Vijay. Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:46:00 PM

That is a nice thing to hear--much appreciate, Janice--many thanks.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 12/1/2019 10:59:00 AM

A colorfully clever pen, Vijay.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:45:00 PM

You are so very kind--much appreciate MLK.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/1/2019 9:05:00 AM

Sometime we smile until we mean itor because we don’t wish to pass our sorrow onto another. Blessings Rick

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:45:00 PM

Yes--so true Richard..many thanks--much appreciate, as always.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 12/1/2019 6:59:00 AM

Thank you dear Vijay, for always being there for me and supporting my poetry, It means so much. Have a great day.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:44:00 PM

And back at you my friend--many thanks.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 12/1/2019 4:57:00 AM

It is not impossible for someone with a poetic heart to express himself in few words dear, Vijay! Excellently done!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:43:00 PM

Appreciate your valued comments my friend--many thanks, Demetrios.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 11/30/2019 1:35:00 PM

What a clever brilliant poem this is dear Vijay - we sometimes smile or laugh but do our eyes feel the same and does our brain feel the smile? Your brain works sheer fame and talent - best of luck in the contest! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:43:00 PM

Happy, as always to read your comments--thanks you for the kind remarks, Jennifer.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 11/30/2019 12:53:00 PM

Kinda when your smile doesn't reach your eyes heh, lovely way to put it. Gl , dear Vij,

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:42:00 PM

Something like that my friend--much appreciate, Pixie--many thanks.

Eve Roper

Date: 11/29/2019 3:36:00 PM

very well done, Vijay, haven't tried this yet.. good luck in the contest.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:40:00 PM

Thank you Eve--much appreciate the kind feedback.

Ann Foster

Date: 11/29/2019 2:31:00 PM

This was a great read. Ann

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:40:00 PM

Much appreciate your visit and comments, Ann--many thanks.

Chris Green

Date: 11/29/2019 1:07:00 PM

This is fantastic, to take words of another and create your own poetic world around them is definitely challenging, but you have done so wonderfully

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:39:00 PM

Thank you my friend--much honored by your visit--appreciate the kind words, Chris--many thanks.

Heidi Sands

Date: 11/29/2019 12:43:00 PM

Creatively written Vijay. That tricky brain! Well done :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:38:00 PM

Had to fool the brain to smile--much appreciate Heidi--many thanks.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 11/29/2019 12:33:00 PM

Using allocated words is always challenging but you've done to well Vijay, never heard of that form until today. Good luck. Tom.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:37:00 PM

Yes--bit hard to wrap those words around your thoughts and keep them meaningful--much appreciate Tom..many thanks.

Sandra Adams

Date: 11/29/2019 12:30:00 PM

Wow Vijay you did an excellent job with these words given in the contest , great form and content... I am sure it’s a winner my friend :) hugs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/2/2019 3:37:00 PM

Thank you for your vote of confidence my friend--a pleasure to read your comments. Much appreciate.