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Shadow of the Eve

Trails of laughter amid tears Tales of the ancients rake pensive queers History is but present hollowly thought Experienced oceans of belittled naught Swelling chest and above the eyes That constantly gaze on high We hear the change of the believed Rainwater drips into the pangs of eve Enamored upon the brink of a wind’s tide A tapestry of the softest gold beside It is the tip of the highest sorrow That brings a happy tear to the morrow Look back, but upon the wind you stay Treasure ashes remain acceptance, gray Leaves curling dutifully brown As the knowing tiger lilies frown Prison guard of the future With a hardened face revealing today Be present at best in an experienced face Into the eyes that trace true pain

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Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 12/20/2013 4:24:00 AM

"It is the tip of the highest sorrow"- wonderful verse that made me swoon yet again. Absolutey beautiful and brilliant poem, Laura. Kudos; enjoyed this very much! :)

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 10/28/2013 6:53:00 PM

An extraordinary piece, susceptible to so many interpretations. A poem to savour... once read, never forgotten. Magnificent language, graphic imagery and powerful emotions. Well constructed with free flowing verses and fine couplet rhyming. Brilliant Laura!! Best wishes, Keith

Justin Bordner

Date: 10/21/2013 1:55:00 PM

A beautiful & expert use of language Laura - this write may be your finest in regards to language/concept palette and how it's all married and contrasted - this is a special piece of Art - a real step forward -this style endows the reader with much liberty of interpretation,; a style in which few can Master or apprehend - this is a very admirable composition , and a FAV. - J.A.B. %

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/21/2013 8:07:00 PM

So thrilled to have you read my work. For a brilliant poet to favorite a composition of mine, I must say I am very honored. Thanks - yours is lovely as well. You take care and keep writing! I'm looking forward to reading more from you.. ~Laura

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/21/2013 1:56:00 PM

A lovely new avatar as well - does you much justice - J.A.B. %

Johnny Rhinem

Date: 10/21/2013 12:14:00 PM

† I Spent Roughly Four Years Amid Such Chains; Not To Mention Within A Lighter Form, Most Of A Life ? Hello Beautiful Laura, Tis Always A Gift We Believe When Finding Such Exceptionally Written Verse. There Is This Myriad In Different Pain These Hearts Yet, It All Leads Unto The Very Same Stage ? Even 'Christ' Himself, Was A Man Of Many Sorrows; Why We Ask ? My Love, Always, John

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/22/2013 7:09:00 PM

Johnny! Nice to hear from you. I love all that you have said. Thanks so much for reviewing my work. It means the world. Always, Laura

Stephen Kilmer

Date: 10/20/2013 2:30:00 AM

A well written write my my friend. I touches me on many levels and leaves me wondering about how we perceive life on many levels. Watch the eyes for they are the true windows to the soul. As always you leave my with questions about my self and you poetry! ~Kilmer

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/21/2013 8:04:00 PM

Lovely! Glad you connected with this one. It's dear to my heart to hear such things. I need to read some more of your work. I have also seen that a lot of your poetry touches me on more levels than one. So glad we can share our work together. You are a wonderful guy. ~Laura

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/19/2013 10:55:00 AM

wow what a wondrous poem this is,,,,

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/21/2013 8:02:00 PM

Harry! I've gottah read more of your work! Thanks for passin by to read. ~Laura

Len Gasun

Date: 10/18/2013 2:43:00 AM

This is a stunning write my dear friend Laura. You did it very well. You're a great poet as well. Thank you so much for sharing you precious gems & thank you as well for your precious time stopping by leaving lovely comments in one of my poems. Have a great day! love lots and big hugs, Leonora

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/21/2013 8:02:00 PM

The pleasure is all mine, really. Thanks for the praise; we'll support each other and become greater poets and individuals. Thanks for the hugs and the love - I need em'. ~Laura

David Scott

Date: 10/17/2013 12:53:00 PM

AGAIN ANOTHER HEART FELT POEM LOVE YOUR CHOCIE OF WORDS WELL WRITTEN MATE LOVE IT XXX DAVIDSCOTT

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/21/2013 8:01:00 PM

Thanks so much David! You are very sweet. ~Laura

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/17/2013 10:50:00 AM

of lessons learned through rain and sunrise... such a resplendent work so heartfelt, laura..:) huggs

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/21/2013 8:00:00 PM

Thanks nette! I like the word resplendent. (: I hope all is well with you. ~Laura

Poet Tacito

Date: 10/17/2013 8:46:00 AM

What incredible, emotional word flow. "We hear the change of the believed"...damn right. May the heart go up from here...

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/21/2013 7:59:00 PM

Glad you could take something out of this poem. Thanks for the encouraging words. I really appreciate it. ~Laura

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 10/17/2013 5:40:00 AM

hi Laura what a wealth of feelings run through this super poem Ty for visiting my work

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/17/2013 6:23:00 AM

Your working is something most rich. Thank you for your visit as well. I am honored. ~Laura

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/17/2013 3:50:00 AM

- Laura, a very well written poem - deep and strong! - Have a nice day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/17/2013 4:29:00 AM

Thank you Anne. You are a sweetheart. Glad that you visited. Sometimes I go so deep that I crave the shallow. Just a tad. ~Laura