Red Sun

Red Sun The engine coughs and sputters Then roars and shows it’s ready To catch the sun at Hilo Rising from the sea. Written 06/24/13 for Russell Sivey’s Red Sun Contest.... Remember Pearl Harbor

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Wilma Neels

Date: 7/25/2013 5:57:00 AM

Unique approach Jake, absolutely enjoyed this one :) Wilma

John Posey
Date: 7/25/2013 6:10:00 AM

Thank you, Wilma. I had fun writing it. from the perspective that came to me ..... Evidently I wrote myself out of any position on the winners list. .Such is life.... Jake

Judy Konos

Date: 7/23/2013 11:13:00 AM

Thanks John....mine certainly can't compare with yours ...but appreciate your comment....

John Posey
Date: 7/25/2013 6:06:00 AM

Thanks, Judy... I disagree. Yours followed the rules and Mine was from a different perspective which the judges evidently did not like.... Jake

Connie Moore

Date: 7/10/2013 4:47:00 PM

you capture so much with just a few words. amazing and very good. I read another one of yours that reminds me of "America the Blue" that I wrote.

John Posey
Date: 7/10/2013 5:17:00 PM

I hope I'm not penalized for not sticking to the literal intent of the contest rules... Jake

Shirley Candy

Date: 7/7/2013 9:37:00 PM

Amazing words..!! short, but deep.. well penned, Jake :))

John Posey
Date: 7/8/2013 3:20:00 AM

Thanks, my friend. I appreciate your visit.... Jake

Debbie Duncan

Date: 7/3/2013 4:00:00 PM

nice write, even though I was born 1955 ;}

John Posey
Date: 7/3/2013 5:43:00 PM

Thanks Debbie....Dec. 7, 1941 Will live in infamy for those who were around then....Just as people today will remember 9/11/01..... Jake

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/1/2013 8:51:00 AM

you mentioned Fireside reverie. Is it one of yours and if so , where is it?

John Posey
Date: 7/1/2013 9:38:00 AM

http://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poem_detail.aspx?ID=433235

John Posey
Date: 7/1/2013 9:31:00 AM

Soup mail for link to Fireside reverie

John Posey
Date: 7/1/2013 9:19:00 AM

fireside reverie is a poem I wrote some time ago and can be found in my portfolio here on PSoup... a search on google should find it......Jake

Vesna Kovrlija

Date: 7/1/2013 8:28:00 AM

Brilliant!

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 7/1/2013 5:59:00 AM

Excellent. Very cleverly penned. Tfs

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 6/30/2013 9:14:00 PM

A very clever write on this poem. I did not know the significance of red sun and Pearl Harbour and now I do. Nicely done. love phyl

John Posey
Date: 7/1/2013 4:56:00 AM

Phyllis, There are few people that were present at Pearl Harbor on that December morning. I was seven at the time and remember well the angry feeling that set the industry in motion that won the war for the allies. The movie, "Tora, Tora, Tora" will illustrate the meaning of my entry.... It's worth a look if you get a chance to view it.... Jkae

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/30/2013 3:35:00 PM

Once again, I must comment..........the red sun on the wing of the aircraft, has such significance........and makes this poem even more poignant and memorable. And John, I'm grateful for your kindness and comments ....it means so much to me. Thank you!!

John Posey
Date: 6/30/2013 4:27:00 PM

Carrie, when I wrote this I thought few people would catch the significance of the Red Sun. People would normally look for the beauty of nature, but the infamy of 12/07/41 Was my first thought... Thanks so much... Jake

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 6/30/2013 9:44:00 AM

Cleverly penned John.Good luck in the contest.

John Posey
Date: 6/30/2013 10:53:00 AM

Thank you, friend. I really appreciate your comments.... Jake

Jack Horne

Date: 6/29/2013 3:16:00 PM

love this clever take on the contest

John Posey
Date: 6/29/2013 5:20:00 PM

Thanks, so much, Jack. I was hoping this would be a unique take on the contest. .....Jake

Len Gasun

Date: 6/29/2013 5:21:00 AM

This is another one! Soo beautiful & I love it again! Thank you so much for sharing my dear friend John. I enjoyed so much stopping by on your poetry this afternoon. Have a blessed weekend! love and hugs, Leonora

John Posey
Date: 6/29/2013 9:30:00 AM

Your afternoon stroll through my garden of prose has made my day.... Love and hugs.... Jake

Elai Cee

Date: 6/28/2013 9:05:00 PM

aha John! Love yah! Love ur poem... mhuahx! Good luck John!

John Posey
Date: 6/29/2013 9:32:00 AM

Thanks, sweet friend... may the God of Abraham, Isaac, and Jacob draw you close and keep you in His love.... Jake

Donna Jones

Date: 6/28/2013 5:51:00 PM

Oh Jake...this made my eyes glass over...wonderful

John Posey
Date: 6/28/2013 6:29:00 PM

Donna, Thanks so much for you comment... "Brush Away The Tear".... Jake

Donna Jones
Date: 6/28/2013 5:52:00 PM

Tear up that is....

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/28/2013 1:48:00 AM

hey, you did a patriotic one too. VEry unique and creative!!

John Posey
Date: 6/28/2013 4:22:00 AM

Thanks, deary, I always find encouragement in your comments.. Good luck on your entry.... Jake

Robert Pettit

Date: 6/27/2013 5:33:00 PM

You vicariously placed the reader in one of those Mitsubishi Zero planes on that infamous morning. Good work.

John Posey
Date: 6/27/2013 7:18:00 PM

Thanks Robert, I have seen many newsreels showing the before dawn start up and take off of Japanese planes from their carriers...This fed my creativity in this contest.... Jake

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/27/2013 11:10:00 AM

ohh, a visual treat with great tonality, john.. this flows like butter on the tongue... amazing write!.. :) huggs

John Posey
Date: 6/27/2013 4:40:00 PM

Thank you, dear Nette. I just think a different perspective would be appreciated....Love ya.... Jake

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/27/2013 8:28:00 AM

Such a nice vision you have given me, and what a fine postscript ! Well done!!

John Posey
Date: 6/27/2013 9:47:00 AM

Carrie, Thanks for your comments. I read the contest outline and just remembered newsreels showing Red Suns painted on the fuselage and wings of Japanese aircraft attacking Pearl Harbor....Jake

Bukang Liwayway

Date: 6/27/2013 6:16:00 AM

a very creative poem my friend Jake :) Good luck in the contest..have a nice day! hugssss Maria

John Posey
Date: 6/27/2013 9:38:00 AM

Thank you, Maria. I am comforted by your comment.... Jake

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/25/2013 5:19:00 AM

Isn't Japan called the land of the rising sun?..We had a little boy from Japan to come here once with his family..He tried to teach us southerners some Japanese one day..We were lost at understanding his language and he did not understand ours..I don't see how he learned anything in school..Great work..I believe that it will place in the contest..Sara

John Posey
Date: 6/25/2013 5:50:00 AM

Sara, you broke the code.... Yes... The empire of Japan was known as the Land of the Rising Sun. and the battle cry of WW2 was "Remember Pearl Harbor!" I hope no one believes I hold a grudge.... I find that forgiveness is a balm that eases many pains.... Thanks for your encouraging comments...Jake

John Posey
Date: 6/25/2013 5:22:00 AM

Karen, I added a huge clue after reading yours and other comments. I chose this theme because on 12/07/41 on the deck of USS Arizona, the rising sun was no thing of beauty...Karen, your comments can be so comforting.... Thanks... Jake

Karen Anglesey

Date: 6/24/2013 8:14:00 PM

Jake, your gift of putting the right words together while creating imagery at the same time in one fell swoop- simply amazing as usual :)

Karen Anglesey
Date: 6/24/2013 8:18:00 PM

After reading your comment below I knew there was more to this than dawned on me at first read. The imagery is perfect for your theme. Maybe the date of Pearl Harbor as a last line dangling farther down the would have given a clue to someone who usually isn't clueless. Thank you for sharing this beauty