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Please Don'T Leave Me - Emotional Write - Dark Side of the Moon For Contest

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My darling Time is no longer on our side Since your car crash we have no money For you are no longer able to work If I can’t find a job I may have to go on the run The debts are piling up so high they almost reach the sky Brain damage has taken its toll on you I wish you were able to speak to me But all as long as you can still breathe … That is the most important thing I still visit you every day Talking to you about our once happy life Trying to jog your memory Do you remember the time we saw the total eclipse Together we saw the dark side of the moon Oh what memories it conjures up Don’t give up the fight It’s not your time to go to the great gig in the sky Babe, its you and me not us and them If you should leave me my darling I will remember your request … No black at your funeral You said wear any colour you like No matter what happens I will love your forever Contest:- Album Tracks Tell Stories Sponsor:- James Fraser 18th August 2015 Album 1 chosen ~ Dark Side of the Moon – Pink Floyd TRACKS used: Speak to Me/ Breathe, On the Run, Time, The Great Gig in the Sky, Money, Us and Them, Any Color You Like, Brain Damage, Eclipse

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Darren White

Date: 10/10/2016 1:53:00 AM

This actually a great poem Jan. I know the album and I love the music and lyrics. Great job!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/10/2016 2:34:00 AM

Thanks for reading some of my older poems I do appreciate your comments and support:-) hugs jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 10/20/2015 10:31:00 AM

Apologies in my late reply Jan. Firstly a big thank you for entering my first contest. Secondly, congratulations on your placement xx ~ I hope to host another contest soon, probably along the same lines, we'll see. Hugs//James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/20/2015 11:06:00 AM

Really enjoyed the challenge James and I love the album so it was a natural choice:-) hugs Jan xx

Tammy Reams

Date: 10/17/2015 9:02:00 PM

This is fantastic and so sad Jan but a wonderful write! Congrats on your win! 7 from me.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2015 9:07:00 PM

Thanks so much Tammy it is an emotive write - I really love the CD so it was a natural choice to write about this particular album:-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/15/2015 5:19:00 PM

Your “Dark Side Of The Moon” is excellent!! ((())) Congrats!! Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2015 5:28:00 PM

Thanks Sara I enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 10/15/2015 7:32:00 AM

I'm loving this write...Congratulations

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2015 9:06:00 AM

Thanks Judy I really enjoyed the challenge of the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/15/2015 2:32:00 AM

Wonderful poetic version of lovely album Jan! Congrats on big win!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2015 4:01:00 AM

Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 10/14/2015 10:33:00 PM

Jan, Congrats -SKAT-

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2015 1:08:00 AM

Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 10/14/2015 12:41:00 PM

Dear Jan, just swinging back to extend my hearty congratulations on your win! All the best to you, my friend! Pandita

Jan Allison
Date: 10/14/2015 12:58:00 PM

Thanks Pandita:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman

Date: 10/14/2015 8:39:00 AM

So nicely done Jan. Oh how I feel sorrow for those young people who have not heard Dark Side of the Moon on a good stereo.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/14/2015 8:46:00 AM

Its a fabulous album James I never really was into pink floyd until I met my hubby now I wish I'd had the chance to see them live - the closest we have got is an awesome tribute group on the Island called 'pigs on the wing' - have seen them three times they are fabulous:-) hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/20/2015 1:06:00 PM

Good one.This sounds like country western song.Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 8/20/2015 1:07:00 PM

Thanks Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 8/20/2015 12:38:00 PM

Jan, amazing write, you inspire me A7 and thanks for visiting my poem, tattered ...

Jan Allison
Date: 8/20/2015 12:44:00 PM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment - this was a tough ask with the 'brain damage' title I hope James likes my take on the theme:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 8/19/2015 10:19:00 PM

Good write, Jan, good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 8/20/2015 3:02:00 AM

It's an emotional write Eve but a very touching poem:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 8/19/2015 10:03:00 AM

My ignorance of the titles makes me unable to appreciate the greatness of your poem but your writing is superb, dear Jan. Excellently done, good luck!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/19/2015 5:50:00 PM

I put all the titles we needed below the poem Demetrios - it is actually a very challenging to get them into a form which makes sense:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/19/2015 8:49:00 AM

I remember this album like it was yesterday. I enjoyed how you did this one. Good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/19/2015 5:48:00 PM

Thanks Richard i adore pink floyd so this was a natural choice:-) hugs Jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 8/18/2015 7:53:00 PM

Jan, these titles are challenging to work with and it takes a lot of imagination and creativity to compose such an amazing coherent emotional piece! I love it and it looks like another winner to me. A-7 for sure! Warmest regards, my friend! Pandita

Jan Allison
Date: 8/19/2015 3:57:00 AM

Thanks Pandita i agree, it was a tough challenge and this emotional write came out - i hope James likes my take on the theme:-) hugs Jan

Ian Jones

Date: 8/18/2015 3:49:00 PM

What do you say Jan to the person on the dark side of the moon except what you said in your verse. Kind regards Ian

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2015 3:50:00 PM

Thanks for the lovely comment Ian:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/18/2015 3:26:00 PM

LIke Aiyah, I really like that last part too. Yes, you have to just keep hanging on with the person that you dearly love! Have you heard the song : "Say Something?" Jan, if you never heard it, you gotta go see it right now over at Youtube. You of all people will really "feel" its message. GREAT way to approach this contest. I need to take a look at its details!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2015 3:35:00 PM

Do you mean the song by a great big world? hugs jan xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2015 3:28:00 PM

Thanks Andrea and i will drop by youtube right now:-) HUGS JAN XX

Aiyah Torres

Date: 8/18/2015 2:11:00 PM

Jan, this is so touching! I like the ending and the subject you put on the story.. You're simply amazing! Good luck in James' contest :O)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2015 2:12:00 PM

Thanks Aiyah it is an emotional write I do hope James likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Anu Nayak

Date: 8/18/2015 1:31:00 PM

dear Jan, I am not aware of albums and the titles...but your write is too touchy and very emotive...good luck for the contest...love, Anu:-)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2015 1:35:00 PM

Hi Anu the album is stunning and one I am very familiar with so it was the only choice for the contest - it is a very emotional write though:-( hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 8/18/2015 1:15:00 PM

I looked at this contest and said no way...well done to get all the titles in there.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2015 1:18:00 PM

Thanks Tim it is a tough challenge James has set but I love this album and managed to get all the titles in - it is an emotional write though:-( hugs jan xx