Pierced

She fell in love with body art He pierced her needs and won her heart. He pierced her tongue and both her lips He pierced her navel and her nose He pierced her ears with rings and clips He pierced the spots he deftly chose. He pierced her cheeks and by the eyes He pierced the parts that were unseen He pierced some places even twice He pierced with zest for she was keen. But on the day they broke apart He left his mark and pierced her heart. ---------------------------------------------- Contest: Pierced Sponsor: Rob Carmack

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Robert Lindley

Date: 8/22/2015 11:04:00 PM

Just found this delightful and very witty rhyming poem my friend. A 7 all the way my friend......

Paul Callus
Date: 8/23/2015 12:02:00 PM

Thank you for reading and enjoying my friend. Hope you are keeping well and active. // paul

Old Buck

Date: 3/9/2015 2:45:00 PM

Bravo.. . . this is my idea of poetry at it's finest. funny yet stinging. thank you for sharing it with us. oldbuck

Paul Callus
Date: 3/9/2015 5:21:00 PM

Many thanks Ray; I appreciate your lovely comments. Pleased to meet you:) All the best. // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/8/2015 12:11:00 PM

Paul, Congratulations, A nice "Pierced" win. Love LINDA **

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2015 1:17:00 PM

Thank you for the 'like' and congrats, Linda:) hugs // paul

Joyce Johnson

Date: 3/7/2015 9:28:00 PM

I hate tattoos but I like your poem. Ccongratulations. Love, Joyce

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2015 9:39:00 AM

I'm no tattoo fan, either, Joyce; thank you for the 'like' and congrats. All the best. // paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/7/2015 7:29:00 PM

Very modern! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2015 9:45:00 AM

Thank you, Debbie. Piercing is a modern 'art', but heart-piercing isn't!! All the best. // paul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/7/2015 6:33:00 PM

My gosh, I thought I had commented on this one before..I must be loosing my mind. Anyway..I just love this one. congrats. BG

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2015 9:47:00 AM

No problem, Barbara:) I am pleased that you like it...thank you!! // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/7/2015 5:35:00 PM

For me this is still one of the best. Congratulations!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2015 9:49:00 AM

Thank you Richard; appreciate the congrats and your faith in this poem. All the best. // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 3/7/2015 7:05:00 AM

I told you Paul it's a winner's piece . Congrats...Love and regards.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2015 9:17:00 AM

Thank you for coming back with congrats, Rajat! You make a good judge:) Regards....paul

Eve Roper

Date: 3/6/2015 7:49:00 PM

I love this piercing poem, Paul. Congratulations on your win blessings dear friend 7

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2015 9:48:00 AM

Thank you for liking and the congrats, Eve. god bless. // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/6/2015 7:35:00 PM

Paul, stopping back to congratulate you on your win! I knew it would be on the winner's list. Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 3/7/2015 5:41:00 PM

Thank you, Sandra. I appreciate your encouragement and support. All the best. // paul

Iris E. S-Lewis

Date: 3/6/2015 1:22:00 PM

Wow! What magnificent poem, Paul. Straight to the point of letting me feel saddened for such soul. I admire the way you so creatively smooth out the harshness of the topic.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/6/2015 2:19:00 PM

Thank you for the insightful comments, Iris; your feedback is very encouraging. May you enjoy a lovely weekend. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 3/6/2015 12:56:00 PM

Dropping back again to congratulate you on your win Paul :-) Hugs Jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/6/2015 2:17:00 PM

Thank you Jan; did not realize the results were out. Have a nice and restful weekend:) hugs // paul

Abdul Malik

Date: 3/6/2015 11:03:00 AM

And, by the way I am glad you think my 'Basic Instinct' beats the film. You know why? (between you and me only), because it was "Personally experienced!!!"

Paul Callus
Date: 3/6/2015 11:19:00 AM

Ahhh Abdul....nothing beats the real thing:)

Abdul Malik

Date: 3/6/2015 10:59:00 AM

Yeah, you are right. You pierced the heck out of 'pierced' - and I didn't even used once!! No, seriously, I like yours very much.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/6/2015 11:21:00 AM

Pleased that you found it to your liking, Abdul! All the best. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 3/3/2015 1:00:00 AM

that's the ultimate pierced Paul.. breaking the heart... at first it's kinda cool but the finale is an explosion!!! ...//olive eloisa.. I am back PAul from three days of being away again.. :)! Will mail you.. miss you dearie PAul.. hugs.. :D!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/3/2015 10:50:00 AM

Hi Olive_eloi:) Lovely to have you back. Hope those m.ts were ok. Yes, the last piercing was the breaking of final straw! Can you work out what joe means? Hugs // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 3/1/2015 1:02:00 PM

Oh that a winner's piece ( pierce?)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/1/2015 1:17:00 PM

Thank you Rajat....you give me a smile:) All the best. // paul

Emile Pinet

Date: 3/1/2015 12:21:00 PM

This poem was entertaining and three dimensional in character. Good imagery and flow are both presented within these lines. Emile.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/1/2015 1:12:00 PM

Once again I praise your insightful read of my poems, Emile. Thank you...I appreciate. All the best. // paul

Jack Ellison

Date: 3/1/2015 9:33:00 AM

Great one Paul! Well done my friend... enjoyed reading! AWESOME! 10+++

Paul Callus
Date: 3/1/2015 9:44:00 AM

Many thanks Jack ... for the 'awesome' comment and the high rating!! All the best my friend. // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/1/2015 9:23:00 AM

Wow Paul! This is tremendous, one of the best I have read so far!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/1/2015 9:43:00 AM

Thank you, Richard! I have read a couple of really good ones, too. Have a nice day. // pau

Nathan D.

Date: 3/1/2015 3:00:00 AM

oh nice love the turn at the end. the revelation makes the whole poem awesome.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/1/2015 4:28:00 AM

Thank you for the 'like' and 'awesome' comments, Nathan! Have a nice day. // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/28/2015 5:35:00 PM

Reads like a winner to me..Creative way to go with the idea..Some do all that piercing don't they..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 3/1/2015 4:25:00 AM

Thank you Sara; pleased that you like it. All the best. // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 2/28/2015 2:40:00 PM

Great "pierced" poem, Paul! Love the unexpected twist at the end. Best wishes for the contest. Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 2/28/2015 3:26:00 PM

Hi Sandra....thank you for reading and liking. I read your excellent entry....pls read my comment. // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/28/2015 10:06:00 AM

If people focused on piercing their troubles than their bodies probably less hearts would have been pierced! A magnificent poem on piercing transmitting a profound message on relationships ! Excellent piece of work, dear Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/28/2015 3:02:00 PM

Your wise comments are appreciated, Demi! Thank you ! Have an excellent weekend my friend. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/28/2015 6:30:00 AM

- Body Art, yeah they call it art ..... to me, no thanks :)))) - Love your last line, Paul - I wish you best of luck in the contest ..... and a beautiful weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/28/2015 3:47:00 PM

Tattoos and piercing are considered body art, but they tend to take it toooooo far!! Glad you liked the poem but not the 'art':) Have a lovely weekend, Anne Lise:) hugs /x/ paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/27/2015 6:28:00 PM

wow! you have nailed this one, paul! killer ending...

Paul Callus
Date: 2/28/2015 3:49:00 PM

Thank you Ilene...I'm depending a lot on that ending...hope it serves me well:) All the best. // paul