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Once You Were My Song

There was a season, precious was that time, When you were my dawn of ebullient sunrise, Song of my mornings, exuberance of spring, Blossoming gleefully life’s verdant prairies Whispering to dreamy nights hints romantic Adorning love verses in indulgent promise. As autumn arrived, you were still by my side, Though vigor of hearts soon began to parch As resplendence dried amid meadows’ sighs When memories of spring autumn spurned For music of romance was abruptly paused And you left the stage as emotions stormed Leaving behind effigy of affections denied. There I struggled in turmoil of the bygones Recalling forever-vows pledged for lifelong Dissonant in your resolve~ time to exit now, When rejecting my pleas, you were soon gone, Refusing to ponder where did love go wrong. Those days of spring still bloom my prairies, Your passionate themes still blossom my dreams, Though you have left and time has moved on I am still holding on to reveries of our past Knowing, at times, while love may not last, It still strums the music and recites its song. October 25, 2022 Placed 1st: Inspired By a Song-Once There Was A love Poetry Contest; Sponsor: JCB Burl

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Mike Gentile

Date: 10/31/2022 5:33:00 AM

Vijay, I love the line " Song of my mornings" It sets the tome so romantically as only your can do!! I really enjoyed reading it this morning!!! Happy Monday!!

Ann Peck

Date: 10/30/2022 11:56:00 AM

That's such a beautiful, poignant poem, Vijay. There's nothing that compares to young love. Good luck in contest!

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/28/2022 7:07:00 PM

This metaphoric and symbolic write is nostalgic, romantic, sensuous, sad, and riveting Vijay my dear friend..The last two lines set it off for me...sounds, smells, and sights - each reminds us of past events, lost loves, timeless memories. A brilliant write!

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/27/2022 5:21:00 PM

WoW! Vijay, What an outstanding entry for the contest theme. You composed it so well, and I didn’t want it to end. Your content was spot on. You did a great job expressing how love can turn cold. When one experiences a love like you described, it's hard to forget. Like always ways, your verses were so poetic. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Have a nice day, my friend-Alexis

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/28/2022 11:43:00 AM

So very kind of you my friend. Much appreciate your visit and comments, Alexis. Many thanks.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 10/27/2022 3:59:00 PM

Long after the love is gone, the scent of it still lingers, in a song, in a perfume in a memory. Very nostalgic but good

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/28/2022 11:42:00 AM

Thank you Vienna--much appreciate.

Eve Roper

Date: 10/27/2022 10:45:00 AM

Beautiful verse with great imagery and romantic promise feeling. Good luck in the contest. Many blessings to you my friend and wishes come true.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/28/2022 11:41:00 AM

Much appreciate your visit and comments, Eve. Many thanks my friend for your kind remarks.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/27/2022 10:28:00 AM

Creative and expressive work you have penned in this one. Could we be truthful with tact with anyone these days? Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. Sara

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/28/2022 11:40:00 AM

Thank you Sara. Much appreciate.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/27/2022 10:01:00 AM

Beautiful and passionate work here, Vijay. The symbols of springtime were great images.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/27/2022 12:11:00 PM

Thank you Andrea for visiting and commenting. Much appreciate your kind feedback..

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 10/27/2022 9:43:00 AM

“ Your passionate themes still blossom my dreams.” What a beautiful lines to remember a love by. Beautiful tribute to past love. SuZ

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/27/2022 12:07:00 PM

Much appreciate, SuZ. Many thanks for your visit and kind feedback.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/27/2022 7:31:00 AM

A beautiful, vividly descriptive, movingly sad write, Vijay! Fervent love may, over time, turn into cold absence. Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/27/2022 12:06:00 PM

Thank you Janice. Much appreciate your visit and comments.

James Inman

Date: 10/26/2022 7:21:00 PM

Sad but lovely write Vijay.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/27/2022 6:07:00 AM

Thank you James--much appreciate.

Bill Baker

Date: 10/26/2022 4:34:00 PM

To love and be loved, that is the answer, my friend. Through people and love, may come into our lives and out of our lives, the pleasant memories can last forever. Remember those times of loving and being loved and allow the memories to be the blessing they were and still are. Thanks for sharing such an realistic experience through your revealing poetry, Vijay. Write On! my friend. Bill

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/27/2022 6:07:00 AM

Always a joy when you visit and share your insights my friend. Much appreciate your thoughtful remarks, Bill. Many thanks.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/26/2022 3:47:00 PM

Absolutely amazing verses filled with passion and the romantic aroma of love's song, my dearest Vijay. Masterfully written. Be blessed!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2022 5:33:00 PM

Thank my friend. Much appreciate your visit and kind feedback, Demetrios.

Joe Dimino

Date: 10/26/2022 8:57:00 AM

"Those days of spring still bloom my prairies, Your passionate themes still blossom my dreams" We are never the less, for having sung Love's Song, such music expressed always deeply attaching to one's sacred heart, becoming a blessed part of humanities' Forever-uplifting-voice. Beautiful write, Vijay!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2022 11:53:00 AM

Your comment is more eloquent than my poem Joe:--We are never the less, for having sung Love's Song, such music expressed always deeply attaching to one's sacred heart, becoming a blessed part of humanities' Forever-uplifting-voice--brilliant! Much appreciate your visit and kind feedback. Many thanks.

Heidi Sands

Date: 10/26/2022 6:31:00 AM

This is so beautiful. I can feel the sadness, heartache and loss weaved into the seasons. The last stanza is excellent and I love those last 2 lines. Well written Vijay :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2022 8:28:00 AM

So very kind of you to say so, Heidi. Always appreciate your presence on my page. Many thanks for your visit and comments my friend.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/26/2022 1:39:00 AM

Lost love as the weather turns cold. So much imagery and metaphoric use. You are great with your poetic vision.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2022 8:27:00 AM

Glad you noticed the metaphors, Victor. Much appreciate your thoughtful feedback. Many thanks.

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/25/2022 10:10:00 PM

Love the passion you hold, Vijay. Superb poetry. good luck in contest.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2022 8:26:00 AM

So nice to hear that Harry. Much appreciate--many thanks for your visit and kind feedback.

Valsa George

Date: 10/25/2022 7:02:00 PM

Lovely poem on a one time love. You are unbeatable as a composer of love songs. It is not easy to forget a passionate love. Memories will cling. So intensely fervid and nostalgic. Into my FAVE

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2022 8:26:00 AM

Glad you liked the poem well enough to consider a FAVE. So special to hear that from a talented writer. Much appreciate your kind remarks, Valsa. Many thanks.

Michael Tor

Date: 10/25/2022 6:50:00 PM

Vijay your words convey emotional heartache in a timely loss of meaningful memories of all that meant and created special timeless memories in us. You cleverly use nature to relate this special message of your tender emotions. Love this another favorite. I want to let you know that I am taking a break from the Soup for a while. I suffer from radiation from the computer and I have to take time off from it. I will catch up when I return my friend. God bless you Vijay and I will see you soon...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2022 8:24:00 AM

Please take care of yourself Michael. We will see you soon after a well deserved break from Soup. Much appreciate your thoughtful and insightful comments. Many thanks.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 10/25/2022 6:38:00 PM

"Though you have left, I am still holding on to reveries of our past." So sad. Clinging to memories, will not bring they back. This is beautiful, yet tender and emotional, all at the same time. Your words caress softly around me and my heart. My best to you, Vijay. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2022 8:22:00 AM

Glad you liked the poem my friend. Much appreciate your presence on my page and on Soup. Many thanks, as always, Brandy.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/25/2022 4:27:00 PM

- Still sounds like a song ... but, a sad song ... the memories no one can take away from you .. a wonderful poem, Vijay - Best wishes in the contest ... a winning poem in my eyes :) - hugs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2022 8:20:00 AM

Much appreciate your kind feedback, Anne-Lise. Many thanks for your visit and comments.

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/25/2022 2:45:00 PM

Vijay, you have such a lovely way with words. You have developed a great work of art that pours the light from the depths of your heart and puts it into your own words. Your poetry resonates with the music of existence. We all had a strong start, but as we get older, we see that all around us is wearing out. Your decision to use free verse to express certain crucial and sensitive thoughts was successful, and the general quality of your writing is quite excellent. wish you luck in the contest.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2022 8:20:00 AM

Your insightful comments are always appreciated my friend. Thank you for taking the time to write detailed and glowing remarks, Lasaad.