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On the Outside, Looking In

"When humanity becomes louder than love, stay out of its way. At times, it's better to be the lion in the distance, rather than the sheep losing their way...again." This was the 1st time I felt out of place. Its impact mimicked abused parallelograms Unto emptiness’ solution I witness sliced wrists shedding bohemian smiles. Testament verses Latching onto anchors of invalid mo(u)rning There was no sunrise to be found, Because humanity kept making love to silhouetted blinders I was surrounded by shovels Ransacked For the sake of digging louder messages’ trench While I Caress incipient wings And half-full Windex bottles Just to keep perception from clouding my lyrics Because nobody wants to see eye to eye… … …cataract-laced speeches permeate tainted whispers Of an innocent breath Simply Searching For B-rated serendipity Oh, this was the 1st time I felt out of place. Turning away from windowed afflictions Ready To step towards gratitude’s breath Outside, No longer looking in How good it feels. Yet, I still miss my friends. ©Drake J. Eszes

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Debbie Duncan

Date: 7/24/2015 11:12:00 PM

I do love the way you write Drake. Your title brought me in. I'm on the outside looking in Little Anthony & The Imperials 1964 . I was age 8-9. ALSO your 5th line about cut wrists. I have a poem called Fireflies on that subject. I need to start reading your word more often :)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 11/25/2014 4:00:00 PM

It is said eyes are windows to the soul - maybe no one wants to see eye-to-eye cause they are insecure of what their soul might look like. I absolutely loved this part - There was no sunrise to be found, because humanity kept making love to silhouetted blinders." Wow! The artificial shadows and slits of light has somehow become more precious that the light itself. What a description!

Poet Tacito
Date: 1/7/2015 1:00:00 PM

Cheers to you sir! Great to read your comments again. Though, for me, it's been a long while too. I will always be grateful. Thanks, Tim!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 5/9/2014 3:35:00 PM

What can I say?I wish it could have been me writing such words..instead of being the silent lion in distance..Wish they could hear me roar like the lion song goes : )Powerful and honest.Going to my favs

Kim Van Breda

Date: 5/9/2014 7:12:00 AM

There is that perfect quill of yours again-- such relevant subject matter that you have as always eloquently explored with your weaving words. Hope you are keeping well Drake Xx~Xx

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/9/2014 8:29:00 AM

Kim! :) Hi and yes, I'm doing good. It's just been super busy with life. It's been quite enjoyable. I hope you & Brenton are doing well! :)

Ana Espinola Collins

Date: 5/8/2014 8:46:00 PM

Wow! That was an awesome read Drake :) Ana

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/9/2014 12:11:00 AM

Why thank you, Ana! :) I appreciate that so much!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/30/2014 8:07:00 AM

Good morning, I see this one is high on the top 100 recent list! Way to go Drake.

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/4/2014 6:48:00 PM

Hi & thank you so much, Richard. :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 4/25/2014 8:38:00 PM

It is difficult to want to stay here, when our friends can't get along. We do our best to keep the peace and still nothing works. But, we have to stick together and just hope for better days...This is a very expressive write. I could feel the frustration and sadness coming through. Another amazing poem, Drake! :)

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/4/2014 6:47:00 PM

Moreso, the center of this "circle" continues to set rules/more rules/etc., yet we don't even know their name...who they are. Trust/respect is earned for me. Kelly, you're awesome. I seriously appreciate it! :)

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 4/24/2014 12:42:00 PM

excellent piece of writing loved it

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/4/2014 6:46:00 PM

Thanks, Liam.

Patricia Mitchell

Date: 4/21/2014 8:56:00 AM

Drake, that's deep! Love it!

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/23/2014 11:24:00 PM

Hi & thank you for that, Patricia! :) I appreciate it!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/19/2014 6:32:00 PM

Hi Drake, some entertaining comments.

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/23/2014 11:22:00 PM

Indeed. :)

Carrie Richards

Date: 4/13/2014 1:47:00 PM

Who among us, has not felt this way, I wonder? So familiar everyone must be with something as this moment. As we have grown, changed, or perhaps it is the world around us that has changed, what used to be, ...is no more.... and at first the loss may seem like grief..but perhaps instead relief that we can part and go our separate ways. I think I can relate to feeling this way more than once. This is clearly human! :)

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/13/2014 3:14:00 PM

A truly spectacular comment. :) Carrie, you're just awesome. I seriously appreciate it.

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 4/9/2014 11:31:00 PM

This is a wonderful write and I'm so glad that you are no more out of place. You are alright and you can take that to the bank. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/10/2014 8:17:00 AM

Hey, Lucilla!!! :) I'm glad too. It's not easy, at times. I shall...deposit made! :) Thank you very much for that!

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 4/9/2014 8:47:00 PM

I have always marched to the beat of my own drummer, and you Drake are marching and beating the hell out of your own drum I see! Excellent write! Hugs

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/10/2014 8:16:00 AM

Hey there! Damn right I am. :) Your words are truly appreciated, Cecilia! Thank you kindly!

Kira Price

Date: 4/9/2014 2:56:00 PM

Proud to be different, never worried about fitting in, but boy there was the temptation..... Love this one very deep rooted and relational to what people feel everyday

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/10/2014 8:13:00 AM

Yes, absolutely!!! Damn that temptation. :) Thanks very much, Kira. Nice to see you around.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/9/2014 12:58:00 PM

This is worthy of a second, third, fourth and fifth read. Thanks for your visits Drake.

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/10/2014 8:12:00 AM

=) You rock, Richard.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 4/9/2014 7:12:00 AM

(Whoops! I got too wordy and it made me divide into two comments) Now I revel in being on the 'outside', being different, walking three steps left of 'normal', dancing alone in the forest on moonlit nights and scaring scrubby looking campers (but that is another story) Thank you for this one!

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/9/2014 7:41:00 AM

Monterey, you have been MISSED!!!!!! Keep on scaring those campers! They need that excitement! ;-) You are BEYOND awesome!!!

Monterey Sirak

Date: 4/9/2014 7:11:00 AM

Hi Drake, I faved this one...it resonates with me. "Sliced wrists shedding bohemian smiles" "Turning away from windowed afflictions" It feels like you were watching a long ago me and taking poetic notes. Once I realized I didn't care if I fit in, didn't understand what drove most people anyway, I turned away from observing what was only window dressing, and wandered off to find my own path. One friend stuck with me, and I found a few more along the way.

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/9/2014 7:40:00 AM

I was down this path too, a long time ago. A few aspects of it tried to creep back, but that just wasn't going to happen on my watch. HUGE HUG!

Mel Merrill

Date: 4/8/2014 9:38:00 PM

Drake, thought I'd drop in and say hi. That, and I like this poem. I need to write more free verse--and I too miss my friends. Nicely done, Drake. Thanks for sharing. :) Mel

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/8/2014 10:36:00 PM

Hi & thank you, Mel. That's greatly appreciated! :)

Jennifer Perry

Date: 4/7/2014 1:24:00 PM

Hi there! Great work as usual!! I really like the line: "There was no sunrise to be found, Because humanity kept making love to silhouetted blinders"...... Very deep, poetic, and mindfully visual! Cheers :)

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/7/2014 11:08:00 PM

Wow, hey stranger! :) Thank you so much, Jennifer. This was a pleasant surprise! Cheers to you too!

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 4/7/2014 7:49:00 AM

This marvel of a poem leaves the mind wondering in a labyrinth of splendid interpretations without ever wishing an exit to find! Excellent my friend Drake!

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/7/2014 8:16:00 AM

Ah, kind sir, that is part of the beauty of it all. Many, many thanks, Demetrios! I look very forward to Sunday!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/6/2014 2:31:00 PM

Some great feedback Drake. Rock on brother.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/6/2014 3:12:00 PM

If you have a chance check out my Bowkowski poem.

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/6/2014 3:05:00 PM

Indeed. I'm grateful. Thank you kind sir!

Russell Sivey

Date: 4/6/2014 8:31:00 AM

I hear notes of periwinkles playing deep in my head because of your incredible write my friend! I feel the depths of my soul and find it more appealing due to this wondrous poem! Thank you for your awesome words here! What a grand piece, Great Work!!

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/6/2014 9:00:00 AM

What's up, Russell!!! That is quite cool & unexpected!!! =) I absolutely appreciate that sir. Thank you so much!

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 4/5/2014 9:27:00 PM

in a world of such negativity. But you are a light, Drake! So thanks for sharing this beautiful poem. I really enjoyed reading. Sometimes feeling out of place can be a good feeling and that's how I really related to this poem. Being set apart is a gift and a blessing. Love your original style. Always, Laura

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/5/2014 9:32:00 PM

Yes, you are spot on with that. It is a gift. The path less traveled, I prefer that path. It has a much, much greater view. Thank you so very much with your very deep & noteworthy commentary. You're awesome, Laura!

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 4/5/2014 9:24:00 PM

"Because nobody wants to see eye to eye" -I really like that line; it was very powerful for me. I also really like the lines "Ready/To step towards gratitude's breath"... Having gratitude is really a breath of fresh air and I loved how you crafted that. I think sometimes stepping back and looking at the bigger picture, and having a firm grasp of what's going on along with gratitude for what we have is important. That's what I got out of this anyway. Even those near and dear to us can lose heart-

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/5/2014 9:31:00 PM

Mmmhm... :)

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 4/5/2014 8:02:00 PM

Love this love this love this! I will write more soon! Always, Laura

Poet Tacito
Date: 4/5/2014 8:41:00 PM

Awesome! =D So, you kinda like it? Is that what you're saying?? ;-) Thanks so much, Laura!