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October Bliss

Ghouls and ghosts holding glowing pumpkin lanterns in the dark ‘Trick or treat’ the children cry as I cautiously open my door With bulging bags of sweets and treats they move on to the next victims 10~05~14 Contest October Bliss Syllable Count 14, 16, 16 Sponsor Andrea Dietrich ~awarded 6th place~

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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 10/13/2014 10:26:00 AM

wowoowow scary Sweet Jan.. :O congratulations... :)!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/13/2014 10:32:00 AM

thanks for dropping by Olive I do appreciate your comment:-) hugs jan xx

Len Gasun

Date: 10/13/2014 9:29:00 AM

Wow! This is an awesome poem for October Bliss my dear friend Jan! I like it! Big congrats on your win! Hugs and cheers! love lots, Leonora

Jan Allison
Date: 10/13/2014 10:31:00 AM

Many thanks Leonora:-) hugs Jan xxx

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 10/12/2014 5:36:00 PM

Very interesting and wonderful piece,Jan...Congrats on your superb win in this contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2014 5:37:00 PM

Many thanks for your lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xxx

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/12/2014 3:27:00 PM

Nice poem for October Bliss, Jan. Yes, we will be experiencing all your imagery in a few weeks! Congratulations and hugs! Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2014 3:36:00 PM

Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 10/12/2014 12:08:00 PM

Stopping back with congrats...hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2014 12:25:00 PM

Thanks Tim:-) Hugs jan xxx

David Mohn

Date: 10/12/2014 11:45:00 AM

Love your well done Halloween theme Jan...big congrats

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2014 11:54:00 AM

Many thanks David:-) hugs Jan xxx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/12/2014 9:19:00 AM

Oh God this is scary Jan! Congrats on awesome win!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2014 9:58:00 AM

Thanks Dr Sharma:-) I am so pleased Andrea liked it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 10/12/2014 7:19:00 AM

Great picture of a Halloween evening, Jan. Very enjoyable....especially the ending. Congrats on yet another win. hugs // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 10/12/2014 1:08:00 PM

...do keep me informed:)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2014 7:19:00 AM

Thanks as ever for your support - am counting down the days till we visit:-) hugs jan xxx

Earl Schumacker

Date: 10/12/2014 5:45:00 AM

Hi Jan, Nice Halloween poem. Very nicely structured. Congratulations on a solid win in the contest. Have a great week end. Earl

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2014 5:51:00 AM

Thanks so much Earl:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/12/2014 5:24:00 AM

Well penned poem on October bliss, Jan, congrats on the win

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2014 5:50:00 AM

Many thanks Dr Mehta:-) I enjoyed your poem too many congrats. Hugs Jan xxx

Mohan Chutani

Date: 10/12/2014 4:40:00 AM

congrats foe a lovely win, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2014 4:50:00 AM

Thanks Mohan:-) hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/12/2014 12:48:00 AM

Hello, Jan, this one was cute. It was the last line I really loved, calling us all victims of these Trick or treaters. That was a great line. Congrats in my contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2014 4:50:00 AM

Thanks Andrea i didn't realise it has been judged:-) hugs Jan xxx

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 10/8/2014 7:40:00 PM

I am surprised that this is your first attempt at this form because you aced it! This is definitely a winner, my friend! Very clever write and I love the imagery! Best wishes in the contest! Pandita

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2014 3:54:00 AM

Thanks Pandita for your kind words - i do hope Andrea likes my poem:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Joseph May

Date: 10/7/2014 2:56:00 PM

Wonderful write Jan....best wishes in the contest......thanks for stopping ...I have made the correction...hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2014 3:01:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Joseph:-) Hugs Jan xxxx

Jack Horne

Date: 10/6/2014 3:19:00 PM

awesome sijo for Andrea's contest - she'll love this one, for sure

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2014 3:37:00 PM

I hope so Jack - it's my first attempt at this form - it would make my day to be on her winners list:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 10/6/2014 9:09:00 AM

Wonderful Jan...almost missed this... Hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2014 11:13:00 AM

:-) Thanks Tim - Its my first attempt at a sijo - not sure if it counts as Ocotber' bliss' guess it is for the children though as they seem to have such fun. Hugs Jan xx

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/6/2014 6:52:00 AM

i always love the treating jan very beautifully draw picture

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2014 7:45:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Liam:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/5/2014 4:19:00 PM

This is sweet..I love receiving and giving treats.Harmless tricks are fun too : ).Lovely poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/5/2014 4:35:00 PM

Thanks for another lovely comment Charmaine:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/5/2014 3:08:00 PM

A glowing poem incarnating Halloween Eve in a most enchanting way, Dear Jan! Since you are 100% then let me send you 100 hugs! Good luck on the contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/5/2014 3:13:00 PM

Wow a wonderful comment and 100 hugs - I'm in heaven:-) hugs Jan xxxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/5/2014 1:26:00 PM

I love this little gem. I have to admit I broke out laughing with the line "to the next victims". I think Andrea will love this. My soup mail will not let me send mail it keeps giving me a system error 500. So I suppose I will have to wait to send you original.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/5/2014 1:31:00 PM

It's my first attempt at this form Maurice - I hope I have got it correct:-) To be honest i wouldn't change your original poem - you can't improve on perfection my friend and that is what I consider it to be and I don't say stuff like that lightly:-) Hugs Jan xxx