Night Time

In a blink of an eye Bright stars wink in the sky Jan Allison 11th October 2014 Contest: In its Essence Sponsor: Nette Onclaud ~awarded 3rd place~

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Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/19/2014 11:16:00 AM

starstruck by the flow of your words and content, jan.. thanks for making my contest a special one.. congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2014 11:20:00 AM

Thanks for running such a great contest Nette I always try extra hard with my imagery and am so glad you like my poem:-) Hugs jan xxx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/18/2014 12:59:00 AM

Wow Jan its brilliant! Congrats on huge win!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/18/2014 3:25:00 AM

Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 10/15/2014 7:27:00 PM

so lovely Jan congrats on win hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 7:29:00 PM

Thanks Shadow - hope you are keeping well have missed seeing your around:-( hugs Jan xxx

David Mohn

Date: 10/15/2014 6:42:00 PM

Back for congrats Jan...I thought this would make the list...love it

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 6:44:00 PM

Thanks David it's the boost i needed to have my poem on the winners list:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/15/2014 4:00:00 PM

this was so cute, Jan. You are doing GREAT these days. BIG congrats, my friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 6:10:00 PM

Thanks Andrea I am finally getting my mojo back and will be posting a poem tonight:-) Hugs jan xxx

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/15/2014 3:15:00 PM

Hi Jan, just a few words present so much meaning and metaphor! Congratulations on your high place win! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 6:09:00 PM

Many thanks Sandra for your lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Frederic Parker

Date: 10/15/2014 1:35:00 PM

congratulations Jan, you reached for the stars and won

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 1:43:00 PM

Thanks so much Frederic:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 10/15/2014 12:28:00 PM

Poetry will take you to stardom,you have what to write ,words and style to express them; I am happy to benefit from your bundle of talent.Congrats Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 12:34:00 PM

Oh Kayod5 that is such a lovely comment. Thank you:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 10/15/2014 10:46:00 AM

Congratulations Jan!! As soon as I read this poem I knew that it would fly to the top...and it sure did!! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 12:36:00 PM

Thanks so much Paul i am glad Nette like my little poem - i did find it quite a challenge! Hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/15/2014 10:08:00 AM

Knock Knock, left you a reply to your reply to my comment.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 10:41:00 AM

Oh I could have done with additional support on Monday LOl hugs jan xxx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 10/15/2014 8:43:00 AM

Congratulations... Love and prayers, Gina

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 9:51:00 AM

Thanks so much Regina:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/15/2014 8:19:00 AM

Congratulations Jan on your win with this stunner.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 1:12:00 PM

LOL I think you two need to get out more! Hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith
Date: 10/15/2014 11:32:00 AM

If you shake it really fast it looks like it bends

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/15/2014 10:46:00 AM

I'm one to talk, last time a woman saw me naked she looked right at it and said "is there an eraser on the end of that thing?"

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 10:40:00 AM

lol at you and Tim:) Hugs jan xxxxx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/15/2014 10:05:00 AM

You make me sound like a bra.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 9:50:00 AM

Thanks so much Maurice for your support both on and off soup:-) hugs jan xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 10/15/2014 8:16:00 AM

Congrats Jan...hugs

Tim Smith
Date: 10/15/2014 1:22:00 PM

Lol.. Could be called night at the double O2bar

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 1:18:00 PM

Oh you should write a poem about it Tim! Hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith
Date: 10/15/2014 11:34:00 AM

Last time we went out he had to get the ashtrays steam cleaned.... It was that hot we were burning up

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/15/2014 11:09:00 AM

I'm one to talk, last time a woman saw me naked she looked right at it and said "is there an eraser on the end of that thing?"

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 10:50:00 AM

Oh Maurice I didn't realise you and Tim were THAT close:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/15/2014 10:43:00 AM

If you saw him naked you would laugh even more.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 10:38:00 AM

ha ha ha I have laughed out loud for the first time today - thank you:-) hugs jan xxx

Tim Smith
Date: 10/15/2014 10:09:00 AM

You make me sound like a bra

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 9:50:00 AM

Thanks so much Tim for being here to support me both on and off soup:-) xxxx hugs jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/15/2014 8:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your win my friend. I'm glad you did so well

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2014 9:49:00 AM

Oh I've not seen thanks Brenda - i need a boost - I have felt so demoralised by recent events i have no wish to write at the moment:-( Hugs Jan xxx

David Mohn

Date: 10/12/2014 3:35:00 PM

Love yours Jan...good luck in the contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2014 3:40:00 PM

Thanks David it was very tricky to write - Nette has set us quite a challenge! hugs Jan xxx

Paul Callus

Date: 10/11/2014 10:37:00 AM

Well done Jan....you managed to insert both internal and end rhymes...not at all easy! hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2014 10:41:00 AM

I found it a real challenge Paul! thanks for the lovely comment. Hugs jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/11/2014 10:30:00 AM

Oh, yes they do, my friend. You describe it perfectly. When I look at stars, I imagine small holes in the seams of heaven that allow the light of loved ones' smiles to let us know they're waiting for us. I'm not familiar with this contest, Jan, but I love your beautiful couplet. Best wishes for success, dear. Love, Carolyn

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2014 10:42:00 AM

Its a very tough challenge Carolyn - 6 syllables per line with end and internal rhyme but I have given it my best shot:-) hugs jan xxx

Ndaba Sibanda

Date: 10/11/2014 9:25:00 AM

Jan-short ,sharp and shining-that`s your poem! l wish you all the best. Good luck!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2014 9:42:00 AM

Thank you so much - its a very tough contest and I hope Nette likes my write. Hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/11/2014 5:00:00 AM

Full of awe! Enormous depth, dear Jan!xoxo

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2014 8:02:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios - Nette has set a really tough challenge with this one:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Muhammad Safa Thajudeen

Date: 10/11/2014 1:55:00 AM

Enjoyed reading.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2014 2:39:00 AM

Thank you so much Muhammad:-) Hugs Jan x

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/10/2014 10:35:00 PM

I love how you did your essence poem, Jan. It is such a short form and yet very difficult I think!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2014 2:38:00 AM

I think its one of the hardest challenges for contests I've entered so far Andrea:-) I am sure yours will be amazing :-) hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 10/10/2014 8:22:00 PM

Dang I was gonna say that :).....lovely Jan...hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2014 2:37:00 AM

I still don't know what dang means! Thanks Tim:-) hugs jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/10/2014 6:53:00 PM

I love this one. I am still working on mine. This is going to be tough to beat. Excellent Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2014 2:36:00 AM

Good luck Maurice its a real challenge:-) hugs Jan xxx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 10/10/2014 6:53:00 PM

two very delightful lines here, jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2014 2:35:00 AM

I found it incredibly challenging! Hugs Jan xxx