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My Word Diet

Long poems are for the birds! They have just too many words. I like ‘em short and sweet, Like something axiomatic that I can “tweet”. Poems that appeal to people who are real, Not some long spiel. Long poems leave me cold. By the time you’ve finished them you’re old! “Keep it simple, stupid” is my motto. Altruistically speaking, I’m not trying to win the Word Lotto. Long words too with hidden meanings Are for people with intellectual leanings. I’m on a word diet. My asseveration is: Get rid of the fat words and try it. By: Carole O'Terry Duet Copyright: 4/5/2018 "All Rights Reserved"

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/6/2020 8:47:00 PM

“Get rid of the fat words”- this is how I feel too. Well done!

Carole Duet
Date: 8/6/2020 10:09:00 PM

Yeah, I was hoping you would like this one, Caren. I think we have very similar tastes and styles. Thanks for reading and commenting on "My Word Diet". Carole :D

Jan Allison

Date: 12/29/2018 2:41:00 PM

dropping back to read this gem again Carole! I am sure you can grab a few phrases and add them to make a limerick!:-) hugs Jan xx

Ra Shagun

Date: 5/14/2018 12:42:00 AM

So nice poem." Keep it simple, stupid " really enjoyed it. I am also on a diet since a time .Short poems have a long after effect as yours had. :)

Carole Duet
Date: 5/15/2018 12:42:00 AM

Hi RA! Thank you for reading and commenting on "My Word Diet". Just remember: K.I.S.S. (keep it simple, stupid) lol Carole :D

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/4/2018 8:48:00 PM

AHA, it has come back to me now, this awesome poem of yours was it!!

Carole Duet
Date: 5/15/2018 12:40:00 AM

So glad you liked it, Andrea. Carole :D

Jan Allison

Date: 5/4/2018 8:28:00 PM

I can't believe this clever poem didn't place Carole, nor did mine but hey ho what is another n/a looks like we are in good company with Andrea not placing either.:-) hugs jan xx

Carole Duet
Date: 5/6/2018 1:40:00 AM

That's true, Jan. So glad to be in the company of two of my favorite poets...no matter how I got there. As far as I'm concerned, N/A could mean "Naughty Angels". lol Carole :D

John Hamilton

Date: 5/4/2018 9:27:00 AM

Sooo well done Carole...I, like you, like most poetry, long or short if they captivate my attention, loved this one, deserved a placement for sure! The sing song feel of this poem reveals you are a songwriter...can't hide it!!

Carole Duet
Date: 5/4/2018 8:15:00 PM

LOL...John! I do like writing songs... since I "have the beat" in my soul and in my feet. Music puts me in a trance and makes me want to dance. I'm not trying to hide it. I just wish I could "sing-song" it! And I don't care if I place because for me writing poetry is not a race. haha Thanks for your nice comment. Carole :D

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/1/2018 5:17:00 PM

Hey, did you not win this contest? OMG. If I were judge it would be top of the heap. FAVE back at ya!!!(I did not win either. Mine was super short)

Carole Duet
Date: 5/4/2018 8:05:00 PM

Well, thank you, Andrea. i guess "he" was insulted...perhaps he thought I was serious, not realizing it was really all innuendo. lol It doesn't really matter to me. I will take a look at yours too and if you didn't place either I am SHOCKED to say the least. Luv u....Carole :D

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/25/2018 8:30:00 AM

I enjoyed this word appetizer Carole. Hugs Rick.

Carole Duet
Date: 4/29/2018 1:52:00 AM

Well I'm so glad you did, Rick! Thanks. Carole :D

Woodrow Lucas

Date: 4/22/2018 10:36:00 PM

Carole, That was such a great poem. So humorous yet eloquent. Thanks for your comments on My Lord's Prayer. Stay gifted!! Woody

Carole Duet
Date: 4/23/2018 10:52:00 PM

Thank you so much, Woody. I'm glad it gave you a laugh. Carole Duet :D

John Gondolf

Date: 4/21/2018 11:04:00 AM

Nicely written, Carole, I don’t care for poems that are old by the time you finish reading them. John

Carole Duet
Date: 4/22/2018 12:40:00 AM

Lol....thanks for reading & commenting, John. Carole Duet :D

Pashang Salehi

Date: 4/19/2018 11:19:00 AM

You took words out of my mouth and put it together way more elegant...

Pashang Salehi
Date: 5/2/2018 2:48:00 PM

Great Job...

Carole Duet
Date: 4/20/2018 1:50:00 AM

Thanks Pashang....Carole Duet :D

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 4/16/2018 12:24:00 PM

Hello Carole, I will put my rhyme in the rhyme form. When i am ready to submit it. Thank you. I totally agree with your poem. I begin to read a long poem, towards the end of the poem, I forgot what it was about.Have a niceday my friend.

Carole Duet
Date: 4/18/2018 1:21:00 AM

Hi Darlene! Thanks for your comments on this poem and good luck with your rhyme. Glad to help. Carole :D

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/16/2018 4:39:00 AM

Good job with getting those words in a poem, dear. You've done well. I don't know how I would manage if I had to write for this contest.....Good luck!

Carole Duet
Date: 4/18/2018 1:18:00 AM

Thank you so much, Eileen. This was one of those poems that popped in my head when I woke up one morning and I had to hurry to write it down before it disappeared. Know what I mean? Carole :D

Jan Allison

Date: 4/10/2018 6:20:00 PM

It depends if the poem grabs my attention as the whether I continue to read on or not:-)Love the way you wove the words in carole, good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Carole Duet
Date: 4/10/2018 7:57:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. Of course I too like all poetry, short or long, if it "grabs my attention". Carole :D

Robert Lindley

Date: 4/9/2018 9:45:00 AM

Be they short or long, if they are very good I like them all. Prefer sonnets, but longer poems are great if the poet's creation inspires, delights and gives to the reader- as so oft do your superb creations my friend.. A fav...

Carole Duet
Date: 4/9/2018 9:24:00 PM

Poetry that "delights, inspires and gives"...my goal, Robert. Thank you so much for your comments. Carole :D

Viv Wigley

Date: 4/8/2018 10:25:00 PM

Good x

Carole Duet
Date: 4/9/2018 1:29:00 AM

Wow Viv! You must be on a "word diet" too. lol Carole :D

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/8/2018 9:23:00 PM

Talk about getting rid of the fat words. YOU just explained best by example. By the time you’ve finished them you’re old! That is a line I will be very lucky not to accidentally subliminally steal. Because I love it so MUCH! Well done, Carole. I am getting my dictionary out now for Aximotic, a word I know I'll use and often. You have taught me!

Carole Duet
Date: 4/9/2018 1:26:00 AM

Hi Caren and thanks for that. I learned some new words too in writing this one. "Axiomatic" was one of the required words to use for the contest. Happy to help by-the-way! Carole Duet :D

Daniel Turner

Date: 4/8/2018 8:52:00 PM

Count me in, Carole. I prefer short and simple too. I love how you wrote this and i understand the 3 long words were the challenge. Well done! I generally lose interest in long poems unless they are well written.

Carole Duet
Date: 4/9/2018 1:14:00 AM

Me too, Danny. However, there are a few poets here who write some really good long ones. This poem was mostly meant to be "tongue in cheek" because of the 3 long words that had to be included for the contest. Thanks for your comment.

Maria Williams

Date: 4/8/2018 6:06:00 AM

Sorry Carole, I'm not on a word diet, but don't blame me, blame my Muse. I do like to tell a story in rhyme though,so that does take some length. Hopefully my next poem that I'll be putting now wont be too long for you? Lol! Love this poem of yours and a definite fave for me....Maria :)

Carole Duet
Date: 4/9/2018 12:37:00 AM

Awww Maria...you know I love your long poems. lol Thanks for your nice comment and the fav!! Carole :D

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 4/6/2018 5:18:00 PM

Very cool funny poem, Carole. Had me laughing all the way thru. I guess being the son of a poet, I appreciate any poem, no matter the length. I know you said this was purely tongue-in-cheek, but that is my two cents nevertheless. Lovely poem tho'. Love and hugs always.

Carole Duet
Date: 4/6/2018 8:39:00 PM

Thanks, Freddie. I'm glad it gave you a laugh. Carole :D

Agnes Krampe

Date: 4/6/2018 11:32:00 AM

I admit that I prefer shorter poems, too (but there are exceptions; some long poems are wonderful). Generally, though, I find minimalism and sparse language appealing.

Carole Duet
Date: 4/6/2018 2:40:00 PM

Hi Agnes! Thanks for the comment. Me? I like allll poetry (if it's good) even if it's long. The poem was meant to be taken "tongue in cheek". Carole Duet :D