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My Family

In the sky of life Grandparents are midnight stars Sacred rays they slant. Staying in my heart My parents, my living God Blessing ever nice It is a big tree Children, the heavenly fruit Leaned branches for Thee. My earth is pretty Lovely wife flows like river My dreams are like sea. It is like garland Tied hearts with single thread Team work, god prefer. -------------------------------------------- Written on 05/05/2016 For contest sponsored by Marvin Celestial.

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Date: 9/28/2016 1:59:00 AM
Felt very happy knowing your strong bond and great love and devotion to family. So nice piece. But it does nit belong to haiku. Syllable count strictly stick to 5-7-5. Also god should be God. Best wishes.
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Manmath Dalei
Date: 3/22/2017 4:39:00 AM
Corrected.
Date: 9/18/2016 8:11:00 AM
A lovely write my friend, I especially love the last two haiku... you have great values in your heart... Linda
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Date: 9/8/2016 11:03:00 AM
This is so lovely Manmadha. We miss you and I hope you come back soon. blessings, Connie : )7
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Date: 5/15/2016 2:24:00 PM
Great collection of haiku's.
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Date: 5/10/2016 10:04:00 PM
a lovely string of haiku's, best of luck in the contest
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Date: 5/10/2016 5:00:00 PM
Nice metaphors, Manmath ... I liked the way you connected family with the elements ... "team effort, God prefers" ... a great way to wrap it up. Family is give and take ...
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Date: 5/10/2016 8:25:00 AM
Heaven and earth, physics and metaphysics unite a family as yours to create dear Manmath! Exalting writing!
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Date: 5/10/2016 8:20:00 AM
Very beautiful imagery about your lovely family. So filled with metaphors tied to nature. I wish you good luck with the contest. Sandra
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Date: 5/9/2016 5:24:00 PM
Lovely ties with nature. Beautiful poem.
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Date: 5/8/2016 9:35:00 AM
This is filled with great warmth! You are blessed!
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Date: 5/7/2016 6:18:00 PM
I LOVE your metaphorical haiku set. Wondefully done, Manmath. Truly one of my favorites!
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Date: 5/6/2016 1:33:00 PM
- Manmath, I love this description: "my children, the heavenly fruit " - Wonderful haiku about your family - (Although I've posted one for this contest .......... :)))))) - I hope you win ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Manmath Dalei
Date: 5/7/2016 2:46:00 AM
Thank u for ur lovely comment.
Date: 5/6/2016 12:16:00 PM
Beautiful family yours penned in beautiful haiku. Loved always, bl
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Manmath Dalei
Date: 5/7/2016 2:47:00 AM
Thank u for ur lovely comment.
Date: 5/5/2016 11:52:00 PM
Manmath, you have a beautiful poem and family.... SKAT
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Manmath Dalei
Date: 5/7/2016 2:48:00 AM
Thank u for ur lovely comment.
Date: 5/5/2016 1:30:00 AM
What a beautiful picture of your family you have described. I love the last verse. Fiona
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Manmath Dalei
Date: 5/7/2016 2:44:00 AM
Thank u....

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