My Awakening

Your touch fills me with glee By awakening my soul I always want you near me You make feel completely whole I never get tired of your loving ways Loving you is my ultimate goal I want to be next to you all my days You make feel completely whole Your embrace is my safe harbor Something was missing, you filled the hole My darling, you'll always be Mi Amor You make feel completely whole Continue to shower me with kisses Ingite love's fire, don't forget the coal I'm so glad and honored to be your Mrs. You make feel completely whole Alexis Y. 08-04-16 Author's Note: This is my first attempt at the"Kyrielle" form. I wanted to try one after I saw Peter Duggan do one in this form. I hope I got it right.

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Patrice Trice Jackson

Date: 11/4/2016 9:32:00 PM

You hit home heavy with this master piece. I remember my awakening its a beautiful thing. Beautiful job Alexis please don't lose sight on your dreams your work is very brilliant.

Justin Bordner

Date: 8/9/2016 6:22:00 PM

You most definitely got the form of love right intense Poetess..."Ignite love's fire, don't forget the coal..." I love the sincerity and double meaning in your tender thoughts woman. Sweet poem Alexis...J.A.B.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/7/2016 9:25:00 AM

I am not that familiar with the form but I like the feel of this one. Check line three second stanza. I think you meant "I want to be by your side all of my days" hugs Rick.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/6/2016 9:02:00 PM

wonderful sentiments in this one, Alexis. I love this form AND quatern. Have you tried quatern, where the repeating line just keeps moving down one line in each stanza ? It is actually even more interesting than the basic kyrielle. Great start you have had with this form.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/6/2016 11:56:00 AM

- I have no knowledge of this form, Alexis ..... but, it sounds beautiful to my ears (7) - the form is not so important to me ...... write from your heart :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Caycay Jennings

Date: 8/6/2016 7:42:00 AM

From what I know you can use either rhyming quatrains (which you did) or rhyming couplets so, yes - me thinks you got the form right and filled it in with your own dedicated romantic thoughts. I enjoyed it and apparently many others did, too ... CayCay

Jan Allison

Date: 8/5/2016 7:39:00 PM

I've never tried this form Alexis - your poem has a beautiful flow, so full of romance:-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/5/2016 4:32:00 PM

Very romantic ...I know your special friend will be glad to get this love note..Enjoyed reading it today..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Winged Warrior

Date: 8/5/2016 1:05:00 PM

Done with a tender style...unique all on its own...a great kyrielle my friend...god bless...WW

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 8/5/2016 10:46:00 AM

Delightfully romantic, successfully written dear Alexis! A seven!

Vladislav Raven

Date: 8/5/2016 8:17:00 AM

Hi Alexis, a beautiful poem with such lovely content. I enjoyed the read. A well written piece. I can't comment on the form Alexis for i do not know it, but i can say it is an excellent poem. The romance sings. This is a seven Alexis. Hugs....Mike. XX

Probir Gupta

Date: 8/5/2016 5:38:00 AM

Very nice poem ...

Joseph May

Date: 8/5/2016 5:18:00 AM

Very nicely penned Alexis.. Best wishes..