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Long Distance Love

In our distance is our dreamy closeness In quite fragrant expanse scented flowers In moon lit sky we seek each other’s face In Milky Way many restless whispers The sun sits on the leaves of apple tree Your face flashes in a nest of robin The wet grass asks me softly where is she At the top, hop restless sparrows umpteen On this side of the sea I breathe empty On the other side of the great void you Smelling salted ozone from the deep sea Go through my poems to feel the pink hue I write verse to fill my oceanlessness You inhale in your chest oxygen fresh ____________________________________ 15/10/2016

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Date: 10/24/2016 7:27:00 AM
That's a very romantic and yet divine piece, Probir!!! Somehow it reminds me of a TV Series I once enjoyed watching, the Mahabarat.... Congrats Probir, for your placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Probir Gupta
Date: 10/24/2016 10:48:00 AM
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Date: 10/18/2016 12:16:00 PM
Good to go through your poem. I think, every body hs long distance love. Where do you stay?
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Probir Gupta
Date: 10/18/2016 12:26:00 PM
Thank you ... My poems are mostly impersonal ... Kolkata ...
Date: 10/18/2016 1:57:00 AM
I can feel the deep emotions in every line of your poem my dear friend, Probir. Long distance love is really hard. A superb sonnet my dear friend! A 7. Thanks a lot for sharing and for stopping by my poem. More blessings and power. Hugs!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 10/18/2016 6:01:00 AM
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Date: 10/17/2016 3:04:00 AM
Very intimate poem, Probir. I can fully relate, I had a long distance love affair that was intoxicating and unfulfilling. It was a painful/pleasurable experience that gave me mixed emotions. You expressed it very well in this poem. Love your work, friend. Much love from the RW (Romantic Warrior.)
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Date: 10/17/2016 5:36:00 AM
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Date: 10/17/2016 1:00:00 AM
Hi Probir, what a lovely sonnet (my fav. form of writing), I honestly don't think these kind of relationships would work, but look at James and Olive, theirs did, so you never really know do you, this is a great write my friend, take care.......Vera
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Probir Gupta
Date: 10/17/2016 5:37:00 AM
Thank you, Vera ... Please do drop by now and then, me too shall try to ...
Date: 10/16/2016 11:43:00 AM
though i can't bear long distance love , your touching lines allow me to understand the visage of this circumstance, probir..huggs
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Probir Gupta
Date: 10/17/2016 5:38:00 AM
Thank you, nette ...
Date: 10/16/2016 8:55:00 AM
You can feel the emptiness, last verse is quite remarkable.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 10/16/2016 11:02:00 AM
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Date: 10/16/2016 6:49:00 AM
Oceanlessness... I love your play with words. Lovely poem!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 10/16/2016 11:03:00 AM
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Date: 10/16/2016 5:34:00 AM
Wonderful creation. Loved it. A7 & heartful love from me for this beautiful sharing...........//hugs
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Probir Gupta
Date: 10/16/2016 11:03:00 AM
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Date: 10/15/2016 8:55:00 PM
Lovely, Probir ... CayCay
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Probir Gupta
Date: 10/16/2016 5:14:00 AM
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Date: 10/15/2016 6:45:00 PM
Immensely beautiful and romantic my friend, Probir! A seven!
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Date: 10/15/2016 12:42:00 PM
Very romantic, long distance love can be painful, being so far apart.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 10/15/2016 12:43:00 PM
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Date: 10/15/2016 12:09:00 PM
A great sonnet...A 7... Good luck with the contest...
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Probir Gupta
Date: 10/15/2016 12:40:00 PM
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