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Laughing Moon

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Laughing Moon

Laughing Moon

Our seaward route defines the night's mistrust,
recites untruths, upon the waters' wakes,
the brines transmit inside the breeze my past,
with demons transferring my last mistakes.

They are my ocean pals! From dark sea depths
they jump and dance inducted like buffoons,
and holding violins or brass trumpets,
they gallivant around with looney tunes.

Meanwhile the stars, elusive, send their spark,
my pals embark on boats with wooden laughs,
discerning critics of our ghostly barque,
where waxen maids regale on moon's behalf.

Some lovely group! Night's theater folklore,
with drunk musicians and chords distuned,
who awkward smile with swollen lips to yore,
in front of a half-hidden laughing moon.

They sing for me! Hoarse sounds, guitars' slack strings,
brass horns, vociferous trombones and lyres;
my joker pals in airy jumps they sing,
transmitting brassy, foolish laughs and tears.

And dancing they absorb my stare and thought,
with anchor amulets that neck-chains hold
away they glide, like seaport prayers besought,
upon magnificent of seas to voyage bold.

Saluting me, a dancer higher jumps
('mid pandemonium tunes - on marble delf!)
and as the  laughing chorus plays paeans,
avaunt he sails resembling myself.

© 01-03-2012, G. Venetopoulos, All rights reserved
(Iambic Pentameter)

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  1. Date: 11/6/2014 7:53:00 AM
    Congrats Giorgio, this is simply unique.

    A. V. Avatar Giorgio A. V.
    Date: 11/7/2014 11:36:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you KAYODE!
  1. Date: 11/6/2014 7:23:00 AM
    Giorgio, came to read it again,, touched by the deepest emotions in these lines.. not just finest in examples of metrical verse,, it's Great work!!!!

    A. V. Avatar Giorgio A. V.
    Date: 11/7/2014 4:39:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, Gautami. : )
  1. Date: 11/6/2014 6:01:00 AM
    Deep and sensitive,, a creative masterpiece! and the beautiful musical scene presented here,, loved you amidst it all, amazing at the close!

    A. V. Avatar Giorgio A. V.
    Date: 11/7/2014 11:35:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You are among the very few who know poetry, Gautami. You know how to write it, read it and evaluate it. Thank you for your support.
  1. Date: 11/5/2014 5:11:00 PM
    Congratulations on your win Giorgio. A great choice for this contest.

    A. V. Avatar Giorgio A. V.
    Date: 11/6/2014 3:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Brenda. : )
  1. Date: 11/5/2014 11:13:00 AM
    Congratulations Giorgio on your win with this fine write.

    A. V. Avatar Giorgio A. V.
    Date: 11/6/2014 3:02:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, Maurice.
  1. Date: 1/23/2014 2:24:00 AM
    Giorgio- ty for your amazing comments on my work- also, as I progress in my own personal writing, I am learning I cannot do so constructively, unless I read others work. Currently, I am studying the various forms of poetry. Thank you for the chance to read in "iambic pentameter", your dancing words, and for allowing me to envision your sitting with pencil & paper! Wendy~

    A. V. Avatar Giorgio A. V.
    Date: 1/23/2014 9:15:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Wendy: Thank you for your kind words. Read my poems! They may contain minor flaws here and there, but still they are good metrical reads. I appreciate your honest and diligent remarks! Giorgio
  1. Date: 11/8/2013 7:59:00 AM
    Hi Giorgio, a well deserved second place win. Congrats!!!!

  1. Date: 11/7/2013 12:08:00 PM
    Hi Giorgio, congrats on your win * HUGS & LOVE <3 ~SKAT~

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 7:03:00 PM
    Giorgio, a beautiful sail & imagery of you... CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR WINNING POEM!!! awesome :) LUv~ LINDA

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 4:20:00 PM
    love the allusion to the nursery rhyme and how you mentioned all the items of dance and music toward the end. The last three stanzas were my favorites.

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 11:59:00 AM
    Magnificent imagery worthy of the highest of awards. Congratulations, Giorgio..... Jake

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 11:16:00 AM
    another feather in your cap, G.. sensational.. congrats on your winning slot!..:) huggs

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 8:11:00 AM
    Congrats on your fine win!!

  1. Date: 11/5/2013 11:26:00 PM
    Congrads on your win

  1. Date: 11/5/2013 8:40:00 PM
    Great job, Giorgio. Congrats!

  1. Date: 11/5/2013 4:51:00 PM
    fantastic use of language; a very well written piece - congrats! :)

  1. Date: 11/4/2013 3:16:00 PM
    A very creative write, with wonderful imagery! A fantastic poem, Giorgio, I thoroughly enjoyed it!

  1. Date: 11/3/2013 10:13:00 PM
    Deep write Giorgio...creative, great ending....

  1. Date: 10/31/2013 7:14:00 AM
    Yes you do remind me of the moon, splendid, reflecting, and beautiful, you're poetry is ethereal with a dreamy quality, it is no contest, you're work is of high quality, and always good for my soul. xxx

  1. Date: 10/30/2013 5:44:00 PM
    I really enjoyed reading your creative magnificent poem Giorgio..Looking forward for your next : ) Charma