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Withering in heat blossoms fade from summer sun petals fall as tears just as dreams gone unfulfilled this season leaves no promise... Lament A Tanka Contest Sponsored by Rick Parise 09/26/2016

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Afzal Nusker

Date: 10/14/2016 11:05:00 PM

A lovely Tanka.

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/15/2016 8:06:00 AM

Thanks again Afzal...

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 10/5/2016 4:41:00 AM

And then we have to overcome lamenting and seek new promise...

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/5/2016 6:52:00 AM

Thanks for the visit Kai...

Paul Callus

Date: 10/2/2016 1:16:00 PM

What a lovely Tanka, Charlie! Visually attractive! Congrats on your podium finish. Regards // paul

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/2/2016 6:59:00 PM

Thank you Paul...

Moon Flower

Date: 10/2/2016 4:54:00 AM

A profound lamentation based on the summer heat -- which I find the imagery cute. ;) Congrats!

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/2/2016 8:34:00 AM

Thank you Moon Flower...

Laura Leiser

Date: 10/1/2016 11:43:00 PM

Excellent tanka poem, Charlie! Congrats on your win :)

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/2/2016 8:33:00 AM

Thank you Laura...

Lu Loo

Date: 10/1/2016 9:58:00 PM

Lovely tanka Charlie :) congratulations on your placement :)-luloo

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/2/2016 8:33:00 AM

Thank you LuLoo...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/1/2016 7:07:00 PM

I LOVE this. It's a very deserving win, Charlie. Congrats to you.

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/1/2016 9:16:00 PM

Thank you Dear lady, I appreciate your encouragement...

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/1/2016 4:03:00 PM

A lovely Tanka 'lament' with accompanying metaphors, Charlie. Congratulations on your fine podium win. Sandra

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/1/2016 9:15:00 PM

Thank you Sandra, a pleasant surprise...

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 10/1/2016 2:47:00 PM

wonderful work Charlie...I love this. Congrats. BG

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/1/2016 3:14:00 PM

Thanks Barbara...

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/30/2016 9:34:00 AM

That is about the way my plants have felt this summer..Reads like a winner to me..Sara

Charlie Smith
Date: 9/30/2016 10:10:00 AM

Thank you Sara...

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/29/2016 9:04:00 PM

This is REALLY good, Charlie--a 7. Janice

Charlie Smith
Date: 9/30/2016 9:23:00 AM

Thank you Janice...

Joseph May

Date: 9/27/2016 9:05:00 PM

Great tanka Charlie...best wishes

Charlie Smith
Date: 9/28/2016 9:22:00 AM

Thank you Joseph...

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 9/27/2016 5:27:00 PM

What a fantastically written Tanka! Being a gardener I appreciate even its poetic beauty dear, Charlie! A seven!

Charlie Smith
Date: 9/27/2016 8:19:00 PM

You're very kind Demetrios, thank you...

Barry Stebbings

Date: 9/27/2016 3:17:00 PM

Like the imagery in this end of summer Tanka, Charlie. Barry.

Charlie Smith
Date: 9/27/2016 8:18:00 PM

Thanks Barry...

Meenakshi Raina

Date: 9/27/2016 2:33:00 PM

Lovely Tanka...well written...

Charlie Smith
Date: 9/27/2016 8:18:00 PM

Thank you Meenakshi...

Jan Allison

Date: 9/26/2016 10:03:00 AM

Very beautifully penned Charlie and as autumn is well and truly here I can relate to this so much on our garden at present. :-) hugs jan xx

Charlie Smith
Date: 9/27/2016 6:15:00 AM

Thank you Jan...