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Into Night's Dwelling

I think to myself: I’m safe; I am sound. Crime in this neighborhood rarely is found. Night’s dwelling means peace on my little street, yet thoughts in my head go round and around. Whose safety can really be certain these days? On trees out my window I cast my gaze. They bear a burden the winter has brought. On their frail limbs the new fallen snow stays. In some other city, someone else peers out her window too, but this woman hears a sound. Oh! It comes from inside the house! She turns, horrified, as evil appears. . . Her murder, once known, will prove compelling. Snow trees are silent; they won’t be telling whether the killer was someone she knew, yet a monster broke into night’s dwelling. for nette onclaud's "Into Night's Dwelling" Poetry Contest

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Date: 3/29/2014 10:30:00 AM
Think I will leave that light on tonight. Always have to worry about who is prowling around the neighborhood at night. Day you can see but night no way. Nice one Andrea. love phyl
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Date: 2/2/2014 12:40:00 PM
Very dark I'm sleeping with the light on tonight. lol Loved the poem Thanks for sharing.
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Date: 1/30/2014 10:52:00 PM
Wow, this is brilliant talent! Reading this was a pleasure. Melatonin helps me rest and cuts my anxiety in half. Just thought I would throw that in there:)
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Date: 1/17/2014 8:49:00 AM
powerful , stirring piece,andie... congrats on your shining slot in my contest.. yes, i have a new one, go!.. huggs
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Date: 1/17/2014 1:12:00 AM
Beautiful introspective write and congrats on the win, Andrea
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Date: 1/16/2014 10:40:00 AM
Congrats on a fine win Andrea
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Date: 1/14/2014 2:40:00 PM
oooo...got creepy there at the end...I like it!!
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Date: 1/14/2014 7:35:00 AM
Scary! It reminds me of stories I heard as a child around campfires. Creative and well written
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Date: 1/13/2014 1:28:00 PM
Andrea, this one's very scary,, eerie! It's very frightening what the world is coming to. Be safe, be extra cautious.. Here, this is a very well written Rubaiyat,, my favorite is the final stanza, building up the mystery! A winning poem, an altogether different take! love again...
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Date: 1/12/2014 6:38:00 PM
Great write Andrea...but I wasn't expecting such a sad ending...best wishes
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Date: 1/12/2014 5:32:00 PM
wow, you sure write it as it is, the seedy side of life that is,,scary yet excellent poetry...
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Date: 1/12/2014 3:31:00 PM
wow, love this chilling write, andrea. Thanks very much - enjoyed the contest. Congrats on your wins too, of course
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Date: 1/12/2014 2:36:00 PM
This is very good. I think that crime can be found anywhere. I am a Pisces. Thanks for reading my poem and many blessings always.... Lucilla
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Date: 1/12/2014 11:13:00 AM
I know what Jimmy meant to you.dear..Here is my hug..My island is considered a very safe islsnd..but car accidents happen..burglaries happen too...and when you think you are somewhere safe and somethimg happens..Somehow the shock is deeper and greater..Very sinciere heart in verse..A big fat hug to you..Are there any fat hugs ? :.)
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 1/12/2014 4:15:00 PM
You are just wonderful the way you are..big smiles : )hehe
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/12/2014 11:30:00 AM
thanks for this sweet comment, and yes, there are fat hugs for fat people. hahaha. I am top heavy, so your hug for me would have to be a fat one. hahaha
Date: 1/12/2014 9:52:00 AM
Anything can happen in my neighborhood - inner city Saginaw. We are rated 2nd in the country for violence. Flint is 1st only because it is twice as large as Saginaw. Still, there are a multitude of fine people in this town and I don't feel endangered. Timely stuff, dear Andrea. Love, daver
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/12/2014 11:30:00 AM
eeeeeks!!! Salt Lake is becoming quite the crime pot too
Date: 1/12/2014 9:31:00 AM
By the grace of God go ye. It's better them than you or me. But God forgive us our own shame. For he know's the headline could be our name. So when the silence of the night, comes calling you with all it's fright. Remember that in a few hours, your fears will wane with the daylight.
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Date: 1/12/2014 5:59:00 AM
you can feel the fear Andrea excellent pen Shadow x smile hug
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Date: 1/12/2014 5:43:00 AM
Creative work that reads like a winner to me..Enjoyed reading this suspense one today..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 1/11/2014 9:46:00 PM
WOW i enjoyed this city write i live on the bad part of town don't worry i will be checking ouside my windows more often after reading this write lol. thank you for the comment on lifting the fog, it was alot of fun doing this write, thankyou for the congrads.
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Date: 1/11/2014 9:42:00 PM
A deep thought. Thanks for sharing and for placement in your contest. It was a good idea.
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Date: 1/11/2014 7:33:00 PM
It's a form I haven't used, and would try, thanks for the fine example. Light & Love
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Date: 1/11/2014 8:15:00 AM
- Never walk alone my friend ..... Really a well written poem to this contest, Andrea!! - Luck to you !!! - Have a great weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/11/2014 7:55:00 AM
I think this will do well Andrea. I like the ominous feel to it.
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Date: 1/10/2014 9:41:00 PM
Scary what can happen in one place while someone is safe in another. I'd never hear of a rubaiyat before, but I like this form. I liked how you incorporated the title into the end of the poem. Good luck in the contest!
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Date: 1/10/2014 3:33:00 PM
And I see you making a very good Rubaiyat, here Andrea, quite spooky no doubt has echoes of truth I would suppose; Its Joe..!
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